This is the Deep
Free verse34 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an excellent poem. The first two lines are especially impactful. What I like about it is that the reader can bring his/her own interpretation to it. Dynamic presentation. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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This is an excellent poem. The first two lines are especially impactful. What I like about it is that the reader can bring his/her own interpretation to it. Dynamic presentation. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Marilyn for your review of this and for your interesting comment. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Hello Tony:
This is a wonderful poem and it reminds me of a quote from Edgar Allan Poe - "Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before." Thanks for sharing this piece.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Hello Tony:
This is a wonderful poem and it reminds me of a quote from Edgar Allan Poe - "Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before." Thanks for sharing this piece.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Bill, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from frierajac
This seems a bit obscure, although perhaps it is supposed to be as it is under sea?
The pain of red perhaps a Red Tide personified, or as a 'count noun' having one
of an item stand for all. It is a little blurry in the end although the sounds of the
words could be for the sound from a shell on the beach.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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This seems a bit obscure, although perhaps it is supposed to be as it is under sea?
The pain of red perhaps a Red Tide personified, or as a 'count noun' having one
of an item stand for all. It is a little blurry in the end although the sounds of the
words could be for the sound from a shell on the beach.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Frierajac, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL The 'pain of red' was intended to signify the agony of death, preceding the calm of the hereafter - whatever or whereever that might be! I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from Irish Rain
Well, just wow. This is quite lovely. I'm sure I'm not interpreting it right, unless it's open to interpretation. I'm thinking dreams not acted on, shelved too long, sink eventually into the deep. A burial ground for all that might have been. Just beautiful, blessings....
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Well, just wow. This is quite lovely. I'm sure I'm not interpreting it right, unless it's open to interpretation. I'm thinking dreams not acted on, shelved too long, sink eventually into the deep. A burial ground for all that might have been. Just beautiful, blessings....
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Judy, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
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I know, the different interpretations are always interesting!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Our minds are as unexplored, for the most part, as are the deepest fathoms of the Earth's oceans.
Scientific studies have shown that human beings use less than 11% of the brains overall power and capacity.
I would venture to suggest further that for some, it seems to be far less.
Interesting write, Tony, and food for thought...
~Dean
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Our minds are as unexplored, for the most part, as are the deepest fathoms of the Earth's oceans.
Scientific studies have shown that human beings use less than 11% of the brains overall power and capacity.
I would venture to suggest further that for some, it seems to be far less.
Interesting write, Tony, and food for thought...
~Dean
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Dean, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from dragonpoet
It is sad to loose a dream in the deep dark of the sea caused by doubt of ability to achieve it whether that doubt is form inside or outside force. Nice use of repetition and enjambment.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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It is sad to loose a dream in the deep dark of the sea caused by doubt of ability to achieve it whether that doubt is form inside or outside force. Nice use of repetition and enjambment.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Joan, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Amazing words about a grieving widow and the depths one can sink. A poignant write and I have been there, sad words very well written and sent a shiver down my spine as I remember grief, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Amazing words about a grieving widow and the depths one can sink. A poignant write and I have been there, sad words very well written and sent a shiver down my spine as I remember grief, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Dolly, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
What a beautiful poem it seems you have a water obsession like myself! I mind so much beauty and magic in it....and this is a smashing example absolutely beautiful, elegant and eloquent. Kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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What a beautiful poem it seems you have a water obsession like myself! I mind so much beauty and magic in it....and this is a smashing example absolutely beautiful, elegant and eloquent. Kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thank, Meia, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from TAB_that's me
where dreams, like plankton,
swirl through weed, - very good simile.
You have wonderful imagery.
Very powerful. To me you are talking of a looming death. Maybe I am wrong.
teresa
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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where dreams, like plankton,
swirl through weed, - very good simile.
You have wonderful imagery.
Very powerful. To me you are talking of a looming death. Maybe I am wrong.
teresa
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! You were one of only a very few who made any connection with death. LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from krys123
Greetings and cheers, Tony;
-at 1st your tongue twisting alliteration were challenging as I read them aloud but after my 2nd meeting I was able to have fun with twisting my tongue as it rolled off my lips adequately enough to enjoy this piece.
-The form of your poem brought me down into the abyss and lines like "The widow weeds of dread" and "Dreams drowned in deed" Help me see through the dark of this underworld as I sped along the bottom in this abysmal deep.
-I enjoyed this very much and quite imaginatively inventive and creative and thank you for sharing and posting and take care and have a good one especially with all those you love.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Greetings and cheers, Tony;
-at 1st your tongue twisting alliteration were challenging as I read them aloud but after my 2nd meeting I was able to have fun with twisting my tongue as it rolled off my lips adequately enough to enjoy this piece.
-The form of your poem brought me down into the abyss and lines like "The widow weeds of dread" and "Dreams drowned in deed" Help me see through the dark of this underworld as I sped along the bottom in this abysmal deep.
-I enjoyed this very much and quite imaginatively inventive and creative and thank you for sharing and posting and take care and have a good one especially with all those you love.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Alex, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
