The Wise Greyhound
A poodle learns that appearance isn't everything8 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a very wise greyhound and a very obvious statement about how bad discrimination is.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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This is a very wise greyhound and a very obvious statement about how bad discrimination is.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the review.
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No problem. It is what we are here to do. Post and review.
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Comment from Lindagail Hall
This put a smile on my face, I really enjoyed reading this doggie story. Love the interaction you have going through three dogs. Structure wise it's solid and your words are strong that the reader wants to know the ending. I myself can't see how you could improve on this poem. My dogs are a a part of my family so can see the poodles point of paw.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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This put a smile on my face, I really enjoyed reading this doggie story. Love the interaction you have going through three dogs. Structure wise it's solid and your words are strong that the reader wants to know the ending. I myself can't see how you could improve on this poem. My dogs are a a part of my family so can see the poodles point of paw.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the comments.
Comment from RodG
a really cute poem about a dog who fears she's not up to snuffle cause she has a black print paw the new neighbor might not accept. Good characterization of all the dogs through dialog. Good social commentary from two dogs' points of view.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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a really cute poem about a dog who fears she's not up to snuffle cause she has a black print paw the new neighbor might not accept. Good characterization of all the dogs through dialog. Good social commentary from two dogs' points of view.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the review.
Comment from chcbeck
A great story and entertaining read. If only our pets could talk would they worry about their looks. A great contest entry thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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A great story and entertaining read. If only our pets could talk would they worry about their looks. A great contest entry thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the review.
Comment from Ogden
An involving poem about a vain, naive female obsessed with her looks. It's a familiar story when we anthropomorphize it. I know, you just wanted to keep it rated PG. A walk? No way! To Mr. Greyhound, she's purely poochtang. ;)
Excellent work, anonymous poet!
Don
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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An involving poem about a vain, naive female obsessed with her looks. It's a familiar story when we anthropomorphize it. I know, you just wanted to keep it rated PG. A walk? No way! To Mr. Greyhound, she's purely poochtang. ;)
Excellent work, anonymous poet!
Don
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Okay, yeah PG. I think the poodle had more on her mind. Thanks for the read.
Comment from Marykelly
The personality of the poodle is developed very well in this poem and is in character for what I would think of a poodle's opinion of herself, which of course influences her opinion of others. The need for perfection is obvious and her need to impress the greyhound with her pedigree fits her personality. The greyhound has a nice nonchalance about him.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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The personality of the poodle is developed very well in this poem and is in character for what I would think of a poodle's opinion of herself, which of course influences her opinion of others. The need for perfection is obvious and her need to impress the greyhound with her pedigree fits her personality. The greyhound has a nice nonchalance about him.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the review.
Comment from nuthead
Love this! Great dialogue between the three. I like the repeated line, explaining why her paw is black, "You see, I'm considered one of the family." Sweet, that her humans include their beloved four-legged family member's signature paw print on their Christmas cards.
All the dog-characters are described well. I could visualize them all.
Mayzie, the snooty, hoity-toity, nose in the air type. The greyhound, elegant and refined, humble and aware. The poodle (adorable photo choice to accompany the poem!) is sweet and insecure and huggable. I was so happy the greyhound embraced her rather than judged her by one "blemish".
Enjoyed. :)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Love this! Great dialogue between the three. I like the repeated line, explaining why her paw is black, "You see, I'm considered one of the family." Sweet, that her humans include their beloved four-legged family member's signature paw print on their Christmas cards.
All the dog-characters are described well. I could visualize them all.
Mayzie, the snooty, hoity-toity, nose in the air type. The greyhound, elegant and refined, humble and aware. The poodle (adorable photo choice to accompany the poem!) is sweet and insecure and huggable. I was so happy the greyhound embraced her rather than judged her by one "blemish".
Enjoyed. :)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the kind reivew.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
One animal's opinion of another is here direct, formal or traditional, it is interesting and humorous, rather funny, and how allegations are waived with pleas, Mr. Greyhound leads; I enjoyed the approach, sentiment and presentation in a good flow.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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One animal's opinion of another is here direct, formal or traditional, it is interesting and humorous, rather funny, and how allegations are waived with pleas, Mr. Greyhound leads; I enjoyed the approach, sentiment and presentation in a good flow.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the comments.
