Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "haiku (empty swing)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from artemis53
Oh how beautiful and I can see it and the memories of one more joyous summer having ended. I will always remember those joys. So very well done!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Oh how beautiful and I can see it and the memories of one more joyous summer having ended. I will always remember those joys. So very well done!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thamk you, Artemis, for this wonderful review, your generous extra star, and encouraging comments for my autumn haiku. I truly appreciate your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Ella25
Playgrounds are bare, no laughter and smile there...the wind pushes the swings on a rainy day. It is a very lovely written haiku. I picture those empty swings and children sitting quietly in the classrooms. Autumn leaves dancing in the rain. Well done, my friend. With love, Ella
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Playgrounds are bare, no laughter and smile there...the wind pushes the swings on a rainy day. It is a very lovely written haiku. I picture those empty swings and children sitting quietly in the classrooms. Autumn leaves dancing in the rain. Well done, my friend. With love, Ella
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Ella, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are welcome, Karyn. I have been away from this site for few days. Other things keep me busy. With love, Ella
Comment from Rlegel99
Nice Haiku about autumn and the start of school. This poem has nice flow. Like the word choice. Great vision of an empty swing on the schoolyard. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Nice Haiku about autumn and the start of school. This poem has nice flow. Like the word choice. Great vision of an empty swing on the schoolyard. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Rlegel, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response. Thanks for mentioning the word choice and imagery!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from irishauthorme
You just get better as you ascend to the ranks of the most prolific and talented here on FS! Sorry no 6 packs left, this deserves more stars! Your ability to paint a picture with words is almost uncanny. The haunting picture of the empty swing is relieved by your last line, in which the swing will soon be filled with laughing, boisterous children.
Great work,
irish
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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You just get better as you ascend to the ranks of the most prolific and talented here on FS! Sorry no 6 packs left, this deserves more stars! Your ability to paint a picture with words is almost uncanny. The haunting picture of the empty swing is relieved by your last line, in which the swing will soon be filled with laughing, boisterous children.
Great work,
irish
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Oh, Irish, you say the nicesest things to warm this girleen's heart. Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts for my haiku...I truly appreciate your encouraging words and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Indiana Irish, this is a good haiku with lines one and two interconnecting as they should and your third line is a really good satori - it reflects on the previous two lines. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Hi Indiana Irish, this is a good haiku with lines one and two interconnecting as they should and your third line is a really good satori - it reflects on the previous two lines. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Dorothy, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from patcelaw
This is a wonderful haiku. When I was young I always enjoyed the beginning of the school year, in part because of the playground equipment. Patricia
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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This is a wonderful haiku. When I was young I always enjoyed the beginning of the school year, in part because of the playground equipment. Patricia
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Patricia, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Lu Saluna
Aww, this is a really good one. The parks do get very empty in autumn, they look so lonely without the kids in them playing.
Great satori, off to school they go.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Aww, this is a really good one. The parks do get very empty in autumn, they look so lonely without the kids in them playing.
Great satori, off to school they go.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Lu, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response. I always enjoy hearing from you!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, wow, wow! This is an excellent autumn hauki with a concrete image of the empty swing swaying in the autumn breeze because school has begun. I am very thrilled to have read this because you show what could be achieved in so few words. Thank you for sharing your contribution to the book.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Wow, wow, wow! This is an excellent autumn hauki with a concrete image of the empty swing swaying in the autumn breeze because school has begun. I am very thrilled to have read this because you show what could be achieved in so few words. Thank you for sharing your contribution to the book.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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What a wonderful review for my autumn haiku! Thank you, Sis Cat, for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Douglas Paul
ahhh - like this one. I can see that swing blowing in the wind. This one is creative with a very good satori. Well done, my friend
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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ahhh - like this one. I can see that swing blowing in the wind. This one is creative with a very good satori. Well done, my friend
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Douglas, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response. Thanks for mentioning the satori!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Yep, parks will have many empty swings during term time, a poignant write indeed, September school uniforms all neat and new, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Yep, parks will have many empty swings during term time, a poignant write indeed, September school uniforms all neat and new, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Dolly, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
