Fence Posts
a metaphoric poem58 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
The picture is a puzzle with the fence posts leaning the same way on each side. it looks a lot like a prison. I like the cadence and theme. Well done :)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Hello, my friend,
The picture is a puzzle with the fence posts leaning the same way on each side. it looks a lot like a prison. I like the cadence and theme. Well done :)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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I think it was a concentration camp. Thank you.
Comment from Oatmeal
victortouche,
Your arrangement here is very creative. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The theme is good. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
The words you chose worked very well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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victortouche,
Your arrangement here is very creative. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The theme is good. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
The words you chose worked very well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from Thamp
I love the idea of sailing over the fence post. I had hoped I'd find more reference to the picture. There is a good possibility I just missed it, I do that frequently. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading and sailing with you.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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I love the idea of sailing over the fence post. I had hoped I'd find more reference to the picture. There is a good possibility I just missed it, I do that frequently. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading and sailing with you.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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The picture is essentially the true reference for poem and its meaning. A concentration camp.
Comment from rjuselius
this is an interesting piece of poetry and a wonderful fresh take on the original poem dear victor! very clever and insightful. nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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this is an interesting piece of poetry and a wonderful fresh take on the original poem dear victor! very clever and insightful. nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from nuthead
Fence posts like barricades, hurtles, bumps in life's road and the "he" a spiritual bring, angel, or perhaps the character's version of God? Lovely, uplifting poem that they were lifted up over these obstacles and sailed away.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Fence posts like barricades, hurtles, bumps in life's road and the "he" a spiritual bring, angel, or perhaps the character's version of God? Lovely, uplifting poem that they were lifted up over these obstacles and sailed away.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Very close, and the reader's interpretation is never to be questioned anyway. Because the poem speaks to him in that way. Who am I to differ? Thank you.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was an outstanding poem; It was a very deep
and emotional write, That was a very cool picture
you added to this and your reference to Judy Garland.
Thanks for sharing this. ~Kerry~
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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That was an outstanding poem; It was a very deep
and emotional write, That was a very cool picture
you added to this and your reference to Judy Garland.
Thanks for sharing this. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Well, it is nice to get a good review. Perhaps I shall get to know U one day. Doug
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My goodness, I thought I was late getting back to R&R's, lol Your very welcome, my friend:)))
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes, my friend, this is well written and an original write these fences are barriers that can eventually be overcome well-done regards Jill
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Yes, my friend, this is well written and an original write these fences are barriers that can eventually be overcome well-done regards Jill
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Neat poem flows well and tells a great story. Creates a strong mental image. Well done! I don't see anything that needs to be corrected, but I'm not a poet, so punctuation and capitalization elude me in poems - I'll leave checking that to you. Thanks for writing and sharing!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Neat poem flows well and tells a great story. Creates a strong mental image. Well done! I don't see anything that needs to be corrected, but I'm not a poet, so punctuation and capitalization elude me in poems - I'll leave checking that to you. Thanks for writing and sharing!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you for reading.
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You're welcome
Comment from Nan Beeson
Re your metaphoric poem, "Fence Posts," I read your author's notes first so not sure what to expect.....
First of all, I liked the layout of your poem because it made it so easy to read....
I particularly resonated with your stanzas....
and then with sea
and laughter start
to mend ourselves
that fell apart
Whether we look through a fence post, garden wall, curtain, over the rainbow -- or within ourselves... we strive to learn more about our existence and our purpose for being here while clothed with flesh and then -- in our Soul bodies -- explore this vast universe...
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At least that is what I do.
I enjoyed reading this and the time and deep thought you put into writing it.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Re your metaphoric poem, "Fence Posts," I read your author's notes first so not sure what to expect.....
First of all, I liked the layout of your poem because it made it so easy to read....
I particularly resonated with your stanzas....
and then with sea
and laughter start
to mend ourselves
that fell apart
Whether we look through a fence post, garden wall, curtain, over the rainbow -- or within ourselves... we strive to learn more about our existence and our purpose for being here while clothed with flesh and then -- in our Soul bodies -- explore this vast universe...
.
At least that is what I do.
I enjoyed reading this and the time and deep thought you put into writing it.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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U are so far ahead of us time focused masses. Thank U.
Comment from Janet Foor
A very thought provoking piece Victor. The picture is a puzzle with the fence posts leaning the same way on each side. Looks like a prison scene and maybe we all have our prisons or fences that we need to sail over like the Judy Garland rainbow.
Well done
Janet
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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A very thought provoking piece Victor. The picture is a puzzle with the fence posts leaning the same way on each side. Looks like a prison scene and maybe we all have our prisons or fences that we need to sail over like the Judy Garland rainbow.
Well done
Janet
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Yep, U got it. Thank you.
