Trust
Trust in God awakens our soul.51 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hey, RP.
Yours is a very nicely composed poem for the Faith Poetry Contest featuring an a,a,b,b rhyme scheme, a smooth even flow in each of your three rhymed quatrains, and a message which speaks the gospel truth.
No pun intended...
Best wishes to you in the outcome, my friend.
Enjoy the weekend.
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hey, RP.
Yours is a very nicely composed poem for the Faith Poetry Contest featuring an a,a,b,b rhyme scheme, a smooth even flow in each of your three rhymed quatrains, and a message which speaks the gospel truth.
No pun intended...
Best wishes to you in the outcome, my friend.
Enjoy the weekend.
~Dean
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hi Dean,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting words backed by Best Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
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I always do, RP.
You're very welcome, and you do the same.
~Dean
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Hi Dean,
You are always very prompt and positive in all respects, and that too with worth appreciating speed.
With best wishes,
~RP
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written faith poem, when we have faith in God and we trust Him we will be able to do many things that we would not expect ourselves to be able to do.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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A very well-written faith poem, when we have faith in God and we trust Him we will be able to do many things that we would not expect ourselves to be able to do.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Sandra du Plessis,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging words..
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
Comment from Annie_ Stone
That was a very inspirational read and I'm glad I got to enjoy it. Sometimes it can be hard to have faith, but that's my thoughts. Anyways, yes we should believe in ourselves and god as well.
Thanks Annie
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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That was a very inspirational read and I'm glad I got to enjoy it. Sometimes it can be hard to have faith, but that's my thoughts. Anyways, yes we should believe in ourselves and god as well.
Thanks Annie
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Annie,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging words backed by SIX STARS.
It's a thing of great pleasure for me that you enjoyed it. Thanks a lot for the same.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A beautiful faith write, lovely rhymes, flow and sentiments. There are so many of these contest entries it will be hard to choose a winner as everyone I read I like! Good Luck! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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A beautiful faith write, lovely rhymes, flow and sentiments. There are so many of these contest entries it will be hard to choose a winner as everyone I read I like! Good Luck! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Dolly,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging words backed by Good Luck Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
Comment from persevere
You have poetically given the ingredient for success 'on paths untrod'. Your rhyming is unforced and your message is clear.Trust in God is certainly a motivation for success, whether we see Him or not.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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You have poetically given the ingredient for success 'on paths untrod'. Your rhyming is unforced and your message is clear.Trust in God is certainly a motivation for success, whether we see Him or not.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Persevere,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging words.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
Comment from bertranclan
Nice rhyming poem about trust in a divine being. While I, myself, do not believe in divine beings, your poem makes me think twice . Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Nice rhyming poem about trust in a divine being. While I, myself, do not believe in divine beings, your poem makes me think twice . Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Bertranclan,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging words backed by Best of Luck Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi RP - you have tackled the faith aspect from a personal level. Your faith in God is a way of achieving what you set out to do and you expressed this well in your poem. You have written this very well with good aabb rhyme and good rhythm with three good stanzas. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hi RP - you have tackled the faith aspect from a personal level. Your faith in God is a way of achieving what you set out to do and you expressed this well in your poem. You have written this very well with good aabb rhyme and good rhythm with three good stanzas. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Dorothy,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging words backed by Good Luck Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
Comment from HarryT
This poem well-expresses the trust you hold in your God. It need, in my opinion, a few tweaks from a grammar standpoint. Suggestions are below:
Having faith in ourselves and (in) God; (Adding in, in my opinion adds to the flow).
'Trust in God' awakens our soul,/And helps us focus on the goal; (Switch from singular our soul to plural us. Need to say our souls and our goals to be consistent).
Again, should be self-confidence(s).
" a lot; (Not poetic I would search for two other rhyming words).
First line of last stanza you use the word "we" in the last line you use the word "One's" you need to be consistent singular or plural.
My suggestions are easy fixes. You can decide to follow them or not. You are the final decider.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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This poem well-expresses the trust you hold in your God. It need, in my opinion, a few tweaks from a grammar standpoint. Suggestions are below:
Having faith in ourselves and (in) God; (Adding in, in my opinion adds to the flow).
'Trust in God' awakens our soul,/And helps us focus on the goal; (Switch from singular our soul to plural us. Need to say our souls and our goals to be consistent).
Again, should be self-confidence(s).
" a lot; (Not poetic I would search for two other rhyming words).
First line of last stanza you use the word "we" in the last line you use the word "One's" you need to be consistent singular or plural.
My suggestions are easy fixes. You can decide to follow them or not. You are the final decider.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Harry T,
Thank you very much for reviewing, and sharing your thoughts.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
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You are welcome. Keep writing.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This was a beautifully written faith poem.
It is a wise and inspirational write.
Good luck in contest.
~Kerry~
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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This was a beautifully written faith poem.
It is a wise and inspirational write.
Good luck in contest.
~Kerry~
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Kerry,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging words backed by Good Luck Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
Comment from fafa
The spiritual poetry defines the being, since the human being is or one feels creed for a being infinitely major, and when someone as you manage to write it in beautiful poems, sincerely it thrills, greetings and blessings
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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The spiritual poetry defines the being, since the human being is or one feels creed for a being infinitely major, and when someone as you manage to write it in beautiful poems, sincerely it thrills, greetings and blessings
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Hello Fafa,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging words backed by Blessings.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP
