Daisies to Destruction
Title self explanatory.25 total reviews
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I love the power behind this, the intensity of feeling, it is incredible, beautiful I think it is fantastic, well done to you Linda this is phenomenal. Kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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I love the power behind this, the intensity of feeling, it is incredible, beautiful I think it is fantastic, well done to you Linda this is phenomenal. Kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Meia, for reading and for such a positive review. livelylinda
Comment from estory
I like the contrast you painted between all the pretty flowers and the bumble bees and butterflies and the crumbled houses, the homeless people, the hungry people begging. and then at the end the bomb goes off and boom! all the flowers have gone. nice alliterations help the music "death and destruction" "Rather it be pretty, pink or paisley" estory
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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I like the contrast you painted between all the pretty flowers and the bumble bees and butterflies and the crumbled houses, the homeless people, the hungry people begging. and then at the end the bomb goes off and boom! all the flowers have gone. nice alliterations help the music "death and destruction" "Rather it be pretty, pink or paisley" estory
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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story: thank you for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a protest poem with a difference though in the end it is still protesting against the evils of the world , bomb of course comes in for a mention, war, poverty homelessness are all there as they should be in a protest poem but for me the best bit was at the beginning. There the protest was levelled agains all those cock-eyed optimistic poets who can see nothing but beauty and ignore the shit that lies beneath.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is a protest poem with a difference though in the end it is still protesting against the evils of the world , bomb of course comes in for a mention, war, poverty homelessness are all there as they should be in a protest poem but for me the best bit was at the beginning. There the protest was levelled agains all those cock-eyed optimistic poets who can see nothing but beauty and ignore the shit that lies beneath.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Pantygynt: thanks for reading and understanding. livelylinda
Comment from robyn corum
Linda,
I'm not totally sure I understood this poem, but I think I got most of the drift. It's sad that we have to deal with horror and mayhem in a world filled with so much beauty. That was clear.
Only one note:
1.) (whether) it be pretty, pink and paisley
Thanks!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Linda,
I'm not totally sure I understood this poem, but I think I got most of the drift. It's sad that we have to deal with horror and mayhem in a world filled with so much beauty. That was clear.
Only one note:
1.) (whether) it be pretty, pink and paisley
Thanks!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading, Robyn! You got the basic drift of the piece. And, thank you for pointing out the "rather/whether" mixup. Linda
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. We do write about the world around us and ad we see it through our eyes. I do see the ugly things as every one else, but I like to treasure the things that are still great.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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A very well-written poem. We do write about the world around us and ad we see it through our eyes. I do see the ugly things as every one else, but I like to treasure the things that are still great.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Sandra. LindaTha
Comment from nuthead
Absolutely love the sounds - alliteration, assonance, consonance - you've employed in this lovely poem.
"...pretty pink and paisley
or a field full of daisies"
Beautiful sounds!
"cities of rubble,
concrete crumbled,
families hungry and
homeless"
Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Absolutely love the sounds - alliteration, assonance, consonance - you've employed in this lovely poem.
"...pretty pink and paisley
or a field full of daisies"
Beautiful sounds!
"cities of rubble,
concrete crumbled,
families hungry and
homeless"
Well done!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts. livelylinda
Comment from June Sargent
I would ask the bumblebee, but frankly where have the gone? They've been pretty much exterminated. Then we will ask where has all the honey gone? It's a vicious cycle of destruction with no end in sight. Because everyone is deluded by self painted pretty pictures. Thought provoking poem. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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I would ask the bumblebee, but frankly where have the gone? They've been pretty much exterminated. Then we will ask where has all the honey gone? It's a vicious cycle of destruction with no end in sight. Because everyone is deluded by self painted pretty pictures. Thought provoking poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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June: thank you for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from FanStory_BJ
For me the first paragraph needed to be stronger, as dynamic as the rest of the poem. Upon re-reading, I think you could have eliminated the first paragraph or wrote another first paragraph as dynamic as the rest of the poem.
I loved the rhythm and the way the poem got stronger and stronger.
The dramatic appeals to me when it is done well.
Except for para 1, your poem was done very well.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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For me the first paragraph needed to be stronger, as dynamic as the rest of the poem. Upon re-reading, I think you could have eliminated the first paragraph or wrote another first paragraph as dynamic as the rest of the poem.
I loved the rhythm and the way the poem got stronger and stronger.
The dramatic appeals to me when it is done well.
Except for para 1, your poem was done very well.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts. livelylinda
Comment from Mustang Patty
Sometimes I wonder if the flowers will survive the growth of the concrete jungle. We have dismissed all ecological briefings, so the future of our planet is up in the air. Your lovely poem speaks to the steady decay of the world. Thank you for putting the words in a logical stream,
~patty~
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Sometimes I wonder if the flowers will survive the growth of the concrete jungle. We have dismissed all ecological briefings, so the future of our planet is up in the air. Your lovely poem speaks to the steady decay of the world. Thank you for putting the words in a logical stream,
~patty~
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Patty: thank you for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from Marykelly
The flowers in this poem seem to be a metaphor for what is good and beautiful, but the flowers don't bloom forever or for everyone. There seems to be a social message here of life's inequities separated by arbitrary boundaries, where there are flowers and where there are no flowers.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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The flowers in this poem seem to be a metaphor for what is good and beautiful, but the flowers don't bloom forever or for everyone. There seems to be a social message here of life's inequities separated by arbitrary boundaries, where there are flowers and where there are no flowers.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Marykelly: thank you for reading and commenting. livelylinda
