Cherry Wine
Infatuation that never dies6 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
I can see why this poem won the contest. The passion of this poem smoked the computer screen! The repeating line accentuated the rhythm and the piece spoke of a forbidden love to me. Congratulations!
~patty~
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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I can see why this poem won the contest. The passion of this poem smoked the computer screen! The repeating line accentuated the rhythm and the piece spoke of a forbidden love to me. Congratulations!
~patty~
Comment Written 17-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the review.
Comment from Wabigoon
To whomever--
I like the"cherry wine refrain," and what it means and what it means in terms of memory.
This is a last nice stanza:
Our love was never, sanity prevails
Desire to taste her sweet cherry wine
Still echoes in my memory jail
Slowing aging in my soul
I'm not quite sure what "sanity" has to do with it. But, as long as it slows the aging of your soul I'm not complaining.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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To whomever--
I like the"cherry wine refrain," and what it means and what it means in terms of memory.
This is a last nice stanza:
Our love was never, sanity prevails
Desire to taste her sweet cherry wine
Still echoes in my memory jail
Slowing aging in my soul
I'm not quite sure what "sanity" has to do with it. But, as long as it slows the aging of your soul I'm not complaining.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the review. Sanity means the author never did taste those cherry lips because she was too young.
Comment from Selina Stambi
my memory jail ... a great phrase. It speaks of endless passionate remembrances that remain prisoner forever in the writer's mind.
Deep, yearning passion.
Repeated 'cherry wine' refrain is an effective tool.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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my memory jail ... a great phrase. It speaks of endless passionate remembrances that remain prisoner forever in the writer's mind.
Deep, yearning passion.
Repeated 'cherry wine' refrain is an effective tool.
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the review and the comment. I wasn't sure that the repetition would be effective.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was a beautiful love poem, Magical words,
terrific flow, Great contest entry.
Best of luck to you.
~Kerry~
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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That was a beautiful love poem, Magical words,
terrific flow, Great contest entry.
Best of luck to you.
~Kerry~
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the read and the review.
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Your welcome
Comment from MaggieF
Your poem is certainly romantic, I like how you used the picture only showing the lips. Good rhyming scheme and repeating the last line in 4 of the stanzas works well and I loved 'memory jail'. Enjoyed. MaggieF
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Your poem is certainly romantic, I like how you used the picture only showing the lips. Good rhyming scheme and repeating the last line in 4 of the stanzas works well and I loved 'memory jail'. Enjoyed. MaggieF
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the read and the kind comments.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. The artwork is perfect for your poetry. I like the continued reference to the cherry wine, it gives a spark to the writing. I enjoyed reading this. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Excellent. The artwork is perfect for your poetry. I like the continued reference to the cherry wine, it gives a spark to the writing. I enjoyed reading this. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the read and the encouragement.
