Comment from MaxN

Excellent

I was allured by the title of this piece, as I was reading A Boy's Will by Robert Frost this morning. I must say that what you have written delivers beautifully. The description of the apple's taste and the adjectives used are splendid. The second to last sentence is my favorite, it is absolutely beautiful. I feel like eating an apple now. Great job and keep on writing!

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017

Hi MaxN? How delightful and I am really pleased your liked this and do enjoy Frosts poems. These apples are so nice bit I havent had one since childhood bit I enjoyed learning about frosts connection and hope I have been able to combine the two Athanks for your review Many Cheers Christine😃

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Chrissy:

I hadn't heard of this apple variety, which is something, because I managed a produce department for many years. Living in Alaska, the idea of a snow apple suits my fancy. Add Robert Frost's name to it and you have an instant winner lol

I think you did well combining the traits of the apple into your piece of prose. I have just one suggestion:

Producing tantalizing juicy sweet tastes readily consumed. (This reads like an incomplete sentence. I think the best suggestion is to combine it with the preceding sentence.)

Good luck in the contest!

Kim

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017

Hi Kim. Thanks for your review and suggestion I have made the change and now it does sound better. I havent had a snow apple since being a little girl but researching the information was fun and i hope I have managed to describe them both Cheers for your support Christine😃

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was so enjoyable and educational. The picture was an ideal one that made my mouth water with anticipation of taking a bite. I think it was good writing and very much appreciated. Thanks Christine.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017

Hi Ary . I am pleased you thought this educational and enjoyable and yes the snow apple is delicious. With my thanks for your review Cheers Christine😃

reply by aryr on 15-Mar-2017

You are welcome my dear.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

I enjoyed your well written piece on the snow apple. It's true there are so many varieties of apple and I love them all. This is a fine entry for the contest. I liked your interesting author's note, too. Marilyn

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 Comment Written 15-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017

Hi Marilyn, Yes there are many varieties and I love the snow apple bit havent had one since childhood. I learn something every day . many Thanks Cheers Christine😃

reply by BeasPeas on 15-Mar-2017

I will be on the lookout for that apple. I like all apples and eager to try something new. :) Marilyn

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

Very well written with great descriptions and comparisons to an apple.
Nice flow of words and great imagery.
A nice contest entry.
Good luck!
Michael

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 Comment Written 15-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017

Hi Michael. Thanks for reading and reviewing and for your good luck message for my Apple piece. Cheers Christine😃