I am Robert Frost : Snow Apple
Based on Robert Frost's Snow Apple tree ( 100 words)25 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! I really enjoyed learning about this Snow Apple. I'm guessing it's named for the white flesh. How fun that Robert Frost grew them. I guess Frost and "snow" are similar. Thanks for this excellent entry!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Wow! I really enjoyed learning about this Snow Apple. I'm guessing it's named for the white flesh. How fun that Robert Frost grew them. I guess Frost and "snow" are similar. Thanks for this excellent entry!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi lyenochka Thanks for reading and reviewing my apple story It is a play on words throughout coppmpering Frost with hos apple. But I do enjoy the Snow apple and we always had a bag on our trip to Melbourne So it is also a childhood memory for me Cheers Christine😀🍎
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your story on the snow apple. It is a variety I have never seen or heard of--we do not have them at all in our part of the world. Your story is two-fold--one on the apple itself & two how the description also fits Mr. Frost.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest Jan.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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I enjoyed your story on the snow apple. It is a variety I have never seen or heard of--we do not have them at all in our part of the world. Your story is two-fold--one on the apple itself & two how the description also fits Mr. Frost.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest Jan.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi Jan, Yes you have it in one.It was a play on words with my attempt to compare Frost with the snow apple as well so thanks for picking that up . But they are delicious and I always remember eating them as a child. bit haven't seen one for years now.cI must explore forcone soon thanks for your good wishes and lovely review Cheers Christine😃🍎
Comment from frogbook
This is a unique and interesting entry as well as an enjoyable read. should be a great contender for the contest. Best of luck in the voting.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is a unique and interesting entry as well as an enjoyable read. should be a great contender for the contest. Best of luck in the voting.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi frogbook , Thanks for your review and best wishes. I had fun creating this and hope Mr Frost wouldn't mind this comparison LOL.Your positive comments are welcome Cheers Christine🍎😃
Comment from frierajac
i read and admired the "Robert Frost's Snow Apple." what sort of any criticism could be raised? It seemed a bit short and I wanted more. A taste perhaps of the actual
apple.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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i read and admired the "Robert Frost's Snow Apple." what sort of any criticism could be raised? It seemed a bit short and I wanted more. A taste perhaps of the actual
apple.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi Frierajac, Thanks for your review and soory for the short version but it is a 100 word writing contest so I had to try and make each word count. And do try the snow apple they are delicious. Cheers to you Christine😃🍎
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Chrissy,
I enjoyed reading your story about the snow apple, I also enjoyed your notes about Robert Frosts Farm, a clever last line with the double meaning of his name.
Good luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi Chrissy,
I enjoyed reading your story about the snow apple, I also enjoyed your notes about Robert Frosts Farm, a clever last line with the double meaning of his name.
Good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi Mary, Thanks for stopping by for a read. The whole prose was based on a double meaning about Frost the poet who is either liked or rejected and he lived to be quite an age before departing and wrote some great tantalizing poetry. Thanks for your good luck wishes We shall see LOL Cheers Christine😃🍎
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend,
This is a lovely write. I never heard about this kind of apple but I want one! hahaha! You make it sound delicious, mate. Good job!
Cheers,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hello my friend,
This is a lovely write. I never heard about this kind of apple but I want one! hahaha! You make it sound delicious, mate. Good job!
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi Gypsy, Thanks your so very much for reviewing this comtest entry. I was trying to capture Frosts traits with my words so a play on words rather than just a description of the Snow Apple although they are delicious. Hope all is goong well Cheers Christine😃🍎
Comment from emptypage
I love the play on words with my favorite poet, Robert Frost.
Your description is really well done here. I've read dozens of these, and yours is the best so far. The word pictures--
"Although standing alone my harvests are still bountiful...."
"Some however find me a little sharp and consequently I have also been rejected." (Love this, but you need a comma before and after "however," and before and after "consequently.")
And my favorite: "branches now old and gnarled I have outlived my creator..."
Nice job.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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I love the play on words with my favorite poet, Robert Frost.
Your description is really well done here. I've read dozens of these, and yours is the best so far. The word pictures--
"Although standing alone my harvests are still bountiful...."
"Some however find me a little sharp and consequently I have also been rejected." (Love this, but you need a comma before and after "however," and before and after "consequently.")
And my favorite: "branches now old and gnarled I have outlived my creator..."
Nice job.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi emptypage. Thank you so much for your great review and fo picking up on my attempt to describe Robert Frost as the snow apple You have made my day by acknowledging this and I will make the punctuation corrections as your suggestion Many Thanks Cheers Christine
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You are welcome. Feel free to nominate me for reviewer of the month, LOL.
Comment from mvbrooks
This is one of the best "apple" stories I've read and wish you much luck in the contest. It reads very conversationally and is positive and upbeat.
Since it's a contest entry, you might want to adjust the grammar/comma usage.
Editing note -- Commas separate phrases within a sentence to allow the reader to absorb complex thoughts. They also make the story have a smoother flow.
Although standing alone, my harvests are still bountiful, producing tantalizing, juicy sweet tastes readily consumed.
Some, however, find me a little sharp and, consequently, I have also been rejected.
Use commas to separate multiple adjectives:
Being hardy, resilient, and versatile, I am still considered bright and red by many.
My appeal seems to be the deep. mysterious lines often seen as stains upon my pure, snow-white flesh. (snow-white is a compound adjective and needs the hyphen)
Standing the test of time, branches now old and gnarled, I have outlived my creator.
Use comma to set off introductory words or phrases:
With each passing winter, I still yearn for and enjoy a good Frost.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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This is one of the best "apple" stories I've read and wish you much luck in the contest. It reads very conversationally and is positive and upbeat.
Since it's a contest entry, you might want to adjust the grammar/comma usage.
Editing note -- Commas separate phrases within a sentence to allow the reader to absorb complex thoughts. They also make the story have a smoother flow.
Although standing alone, my harvests are still bountiful, producing tantalizing, juicy sweet tastes readily consumed.
Some, however, find me a little sharp and, consequently, I have also been rejected.
Use commas to separate multiple adjectives:
Being hardy, resilient, and versatile, I am still considered bright and red by many.
My appeal seems to be the deep. mysterious lines often seen as stains upon my pure, snow-white flesh. (snow-white is a compound adjective and needs the hyphen)
Standing the test of time, branches now old and gnarled, I have outlived my creator.
Use comma to set off introductory words or phrases:
With each passing winter, I still yearn for and enjoy a good Frost.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi mybrooks Thank your reading my poem and for your lovely feedback and I do appreciate your assistance with punctuation and have made the changes, I will kep this in mund for future writings Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for sharing this piece about the Robert Frost apple. I've often seen them in the stores, and one of my neighbors told me they are great for baking. (The news is of little use to me - I don't bake.) But, they taste good and make a great snack. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Thank you for sharing this piece about the Robert Frost apple. I've often seen them in the stores, and one of my neighbors told me they are great for baking. (The news is of little use to me - I don't bake.) But, they taste good and make a great snack. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi Patty, Yes do buy one they are very nice and I havent had one since I was a child so I will be looking out for them also. I do believe they are more of a dessert apple bit yummy and the white flesh is different. Thanks you for your review it is much appreciated Cheers Christine😃🍎
Comment from royowen
A great descriptive short episode Christine. I must admit I'm not an authority on apples, but I have been to Bacchus Marsh, but I didn't know there was a "snow Apple", but I do now. I don't think it gets down to -20 or -30 in Bacchus marsh...maybe, not even in Balarat, although one of the most bitterly cold days I've experienced, was in a blizzard in Ballarat, well done Christine, good luck in the contest. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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A great descriptive short episode Christine. I must admit I'm not an authority on apples, but I have been to Bacchus Marsh, but I didn't know there was a "snow Apple", but I do now. I don't think it gets down to -20 or -30 in Bacchus marsh...maybe, not even in Balarat, although one of the most bitterly cold days I've experienced, was in a blizzard in Ballarat, well done Christine, good luck in the contest. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2017
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Hi Roy, Thanks for stopping by and if you ever come through Ballarat let me know. I don't know if there is still a SnowcApplecorchard in Bacchis Marsh any more as I havent had a Snow Apple for about 50 years bit this is a vivid childhood memory and I had no idea that Frost planted a tree until I was researching info for this. I tried to capture Frosts traits in my play one words so I appreciate you feedback . Hope all is well and have great day Cheers Christine😃🍎
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I have a Good friend living in Ballarat I haven't seen in years, we might drop by sometime
