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Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "haiku (kids cannonball)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
41 total reviews
Comment from Ella25
I imagined children playing at the lake, rope swinging, water splashing, having fun. What an excellent haiku story in such short words. Bravo. No, didn't need a supporting image as I pictured it all naturally. Beautiful. With love, Ella
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
I imagined children playing at the lake, rope swinging, water splashing, having fun. What an excellent haiku story in such short words. Bravo. No, didn't need a supporting image as I pictured it all naturally. Beautiful. With love, Ella
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Oh, Ella, I'm so pleased and honored by your awesome review and comments for my summer haiku. Thank you for your your generous extra star, and your kind words are appreciated very much. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem and thank you for mentioning the imagery. Thank you for this encouraging and supportive review!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are always welcome, Karyn. It is beautiful indeed. Happy Spring Solstice, my friend. With love, Ella
Can you please check my last post "An Angel in Your Arms" and give me your thoughts. I tried my best to send a message in it but might be unclear. Thank you.
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Ella, I'm so sorry, but with that very light print color in your Angel poem, I can't read the words. I don't have the best of eyes, and even had trouble enlarging the,words. I'm sorry.
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No worries, my dear. If you wish I could send you via email as it would be easier to read. I would love your opinion. With love, Ella
Comment from Pantygynt
It is definitely still fgar too cold here for anything like that but, yes when the weather gets warmer, a great deal warmer may be. To be fair I see that the theme here is summer so I will run my imagination alongside yours.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
It is definitely still fgar too cold here for anything like that but, yes when the weather gets warmer, a great deal warmer may be. To be fair I see that the theme here is summer so I will run my imagination alongside yours.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thanks for your review for my summer haiku, Pantygynt. As it snows here in Indiana, it does the imagination good to think of warm summer days and flowers instead of snow.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from artemis53
I believe that I can with the rope. It was a joy of childhood that I never let my parents know about since I knew that would be the end ;)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
I believe that I can with the rope. It was a joy of childhood that I never let my parents know about since I knew that would be the end ;)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thanks for your review and comments for my summer haiku, Artemis. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your childhood memory.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was a great Haiku on summer.
"schools out" is always a grand declaration.
It stands well, without the photo. good job.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
That was a great Haiku on summer.
"schools out" is always a grand declaration.
It stands well, without the photo. good job.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review for my summer haiku, Kerry. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts, and glad you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from nuthead
Awesome! Great choice for summer haiku challenge.
kids cannonball
off rope at lake's edge
school's out
This created such wonderful images, memories of summer. Nothing like balling up tight and giving it your all. Ker-splash!
Great job here!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
Awesome! Great choice for summer haiku challenge.
kids cannonball
off rope at lake's edge
school's out
This created such wonderful images, memories of summer. Nothing like balling up tight and giving it your all. Ker-splash!
Great job here!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thanks, sjharshenin, for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm delighted you enjoyed the imagery of the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Bill O'Bier
You've written a fun haiku. Yes, cannonballs are fun. The higher you jump before hitting the water, the faster you'll be traveling when you hit the water. The tighter ball you form with your body, the more like a sphere you'll be when you go kersplosh! As always, practice makes perfect. so get out there and make a splash.
Bill~
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
You've written a fun haiku. Yes, cannonballs are fun. The higher you jump before hitting the water, the faster you'll be traveling when you hit the water. The tighter ball you form with your body, the more like a sphere you'll be when you go kersplosh! As always, practice makes perfect. so get out there and make a splash.
Bill~
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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LOL you sound like an expert cannonballer, Bill, and I love the word kersplosh!! Thanks so much for your rest review, and so pleased you thought the summer haiku was fun to read. Thanks for making me smile.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Douglas Paul
I like the human quality in this one. It will get my vote for the book. Clear imagery in your first two lines and a strong satori. I can see those kids playing at the lake
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
I like the human quality in this one. It will get my vote for the book. Clear imagery in your first two lines and a strong satori. I can see those kids playing at the lake
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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thanks for this wonderful review and kind words for my summer haiku, Douglas. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for mentioning you liked the imagery and the satori. It's. Ice to think of the warmth is summer as the snow keeps falling here. LOL
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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We can but dream LOL
Comment from TAB_that's me
Karyn, I love the fun and simpleness of this little summer haiku. Good summer reference and great overall haiku.
~~teresa~~
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
Karyn, I love the fun and simpleness of this little summer haiku. Good summer reference and great overall haiku.
~~teresa~~
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my summer haiku, Teresa. I appreciate your response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Janet Foor
I have some excellent many memories of an old swimming hole that my friends and I used to frequent. It's amazing that we all survived. haha
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
I have some excellent many memories of an old swimming hole that my friends and I used to frequent. It's amazing that we all survived. haha
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Janet, for your great review and comments for my summer haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. LOL it's amazing we survived so many adventures of childhood.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Susanjohn
yep I see it now!!!!! beautiful sunny day!!...warm water....icky seaweed beneath the water...splashing, screaming...ahhhhh
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
yep I see it now!!!!! beautiful sunny day!!...warm water....icky seaweed beneath the water...splashing, screaming...ahhhhh
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Susan, for your great review and comments for my summer haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem's imagery, and I appreciate your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)