Darkness
Lanturne contest entry36 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
The eerie picture with the figure's red eyes establishes the mood for this poem well. I admired the shape of the Lanturne and the compelling plea for help. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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The eerie picture with the figure's red eyes establishes the mood for this poem well. I admired the shape of the Lanturne and the compelling plea for help. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This was an excellent Lanturne poem, beautifully crafted, a cry for help from a tortured soul.
Graphics are fantastic and a brilliant picture to accompany your words.
Have a lovely evening
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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This was an excellent Lanturne poem, beautifully crafted, a cry for help from a tortured soul.
Graphics are fantastic and a brilliant picture to accompany your words.
Have a lovely evening
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your review, it is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Lanturne poem. We often feel overwhelmed by daily events and feel that we are in a darkened place where there is no escape from.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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A very well-written Lanturne poem. We often feel overwhelmed by daily events and feel that we are in a darkened place where there is no escape from.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you Sandra for you review.
Comment from SueZen
Ohla, talk about darkness engulfing soul - totally recognize the "dark", shadow side
of my soul - I believe it carries trauma and memories of past lives in this incarnation, in order to keep learning and evolving...until finally becomes "unburdened", pure light, awareness. Super pic to complement poem - if crows, symbol for shape-shift, transformation, keeper of sacred law. Raven has similar connotations. See "Medicine Cards" by Jamie Sams and David Carson. Good luck in contest !
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Ohla, talk about darkness engulfing soul - totally recognize the "dark", shadow side
of my soul - I believe it carries trauma and memories of past lives in this incarnation, in order to keep learning and evolving...until finally becomes "unburdened", pure light, awareness. Super pic to complement poem - if crows, symbol for shape-shift, transformation, keeper of sacred law. Raven has similar connotations. See "Medicine Cards" by Jamie Sams and David Carson. Good luck in contest !
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much, I love your input you put into your review, fascinating. Thank you.
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Thank you too for response ! See my next poem, might "ring home" on some level ? Take care and have a great day, Susan
Comment from melyuki
Hi Kerry , thanks for sharing your lanturne poem . My what a darkness spreads over your words. You have depicted that feeling so well in such few words.. and the image accompanying your verse strengthens that dark and somber feeling.. The colour scheme black on red works perfectly. Thanks for the ride.. and best of luck to you in the contest.. cheers and smiles, mel xx
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Hi Kerry , thanks for sharing your lanturne poem . My what a darkness spreads over your words. You have depicted that feeling so well in such few words.. and the image accompanying your verse strengthens that dark and somber feeling.. The colour scheme black on red works perfectly. Thanks for the ride.. and best of luck to you in the contest.. cheers and smiles, mel xx
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much for your wonderful review. It was a 1st on the dark side. Testing the waters sorta speak.
Comment from Sis Cat
Help, indeed! This is a perfect little Lanturne which told a story about a person's decent into darkness. She cannot help herself and is drowning in darkness. I see it as a poem about mental illness or depression.
thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Help, indeed! This is a perfect little Lanturne which told a story about a person's decent into darkness. She cannot help herself and is drowning in darkness. I see it as a poem about mental illness or depression.
thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your review, its greatly appreciated.
Comment from Thal1959
Very nicely written. Gets straight to the point, and the final word reads like the Satori of a Haiku. Very well composed for such a brief poetic form.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Very nicely written. Gets straight to the point, and the final word reads like the Satori of a Haiku. Very well composed for such a brief poetic form.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this. I appreciate your comments.
Thanks again
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It was my pleasure, Kerry.
Comment from LIJ Red
Conjures up the Krell's demons of the id, or the black essence of evil that killed Tasha Yar. From the rules, I think this is a properly written Lanturne poem for the contest. Excellent.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Conjures up the Krell's demons of the id, or the black essence of evil that killed Tasha Yar. From the rules, I think this is a properly written Lanturne poem for the contest. Excellent.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you, I appreciate your wonderful review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well done Kerry. Very dramatic presentation and your Lanturne poem certainly lives up to the expectation of a dramatic write. Great job, and good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Well done Kerry. Very dramatic presentation and your Lanturne poem certainly lives up to the expectation of a dramatic write. Great job, and good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much Pearl. I greatly appreciate your six stars.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem for the lanturne contest. Good job with the syllable count per line. Your words & art pair nicely. The message is expressed well. One would need help in that situation.
Good job & thanks for sharing.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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I enjoyed your poem for the lanturne contest. Good job with the syllable count per line. Your words & art pair nicely. The message is expressed well. One would need help in that situation.
Good job & thanks for sharing.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you, I greatly appreciate your review.
