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8 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello estory
I hope and pray that we won't see modern technology take over the old ways of using paper, so we can read
the all advertisements In the newspapers.
Just think some folks don't have a computer
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Hello estory
I hope and pray that we won't see modern technology take over the old ways of using paper, so we can read
the all advertisements In the newspapers.
Just think some folks don't have a computer
Gert
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the five star review and your comments about this free verse poem estory
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Poet writes where thoughts flow about hollowness or illusions and meaningless stand of consumerism with examples and artificial trappings of mechanized life and state of after use of things.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Poet writes where thoughts flow about hollowness or illusions and meaningless stand of consumerism with examples and artificial trappings of mechanized life and state of after use of things.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your five star review and your comments validating the way I constructed the poem. I think you got exactly what I was trying to portray in this piece. Its nice to see a poem taking a life of its own and resonating in the experiences of readers estory
Comment from lyenochka
This poem uses repetition in such a melodic way. I like the imagery of "plain paper wrappings" to describe the ordinary life. The "emptiness" describes the loneliness of compartmentalized life in the suburbs. Very artistic!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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This poem uses repetition in such a melodic way. I like the imagery of "plain paper wrappings" to describe the ordinary life. The "emptiness" describes the loneliness of compartmentalized life in the suburbs. Very artistic!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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thank you for your five star review and your comments supporting my construction of the poem and its images. this is indeed what I was trying to create in this piece; a sense of a hollow experience, an artificial, expendable experience, an experience that is disconnected from the deeper meanings originally permeating these experiences. estory
Comment from Irish Rain
Disposable society. I often think that. We even throw people away, as though they they were dollar-store specials. A profound free verse, we generate so much waste, not the least...our lives. Blessings...
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Disposable society. I often think that. We even throw people away, as though they they were dollar-store specials. A profound free verse, we generate so much waste, not the least...our lives. Blessings...
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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thank you for your five star review and your support of my poetry and your encouraging sympathetic comments. I am glad the piece resonated in your experience and that I was successful in this construction. Yes, we live in an artificial world, a disposable experience, a hollow place disconnected from its deeper meanings, its relevance to our lives and our souls,. estory
Comment from fafa
philosophy and thought, poetry and love, words that always have a merger trajectory with the soul, with the being. I loved its poem, congratulations
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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philosophy and thought, poetry and love, words that always have a merger trajectory with the soul, with the being. I loved its poem, congratulations
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful review and your support of this poem. coming from you I am especially glad, since your poetry is very much in the vein of where I want to be as a poet. I am into experimenting with new original forms, minimalism, and open free verse estory
Comment from His Grayness
Very unique and creative indeed. It is certainly a very unique perspective of many aspects and symbols and identities of our lives, packaged well with good rhyme and meter into a delightful and thought provoking read! Much enjoyed indeed with many thanks to the author! HIS GRAYNESS Vance
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Very unique and creative indeed. It is certainly a very unique perspective of many aspects and symbols and identities of our lives, packaged well with good rhyme and meter into a delightful and thought provoking read! Much enjoyed indeed with many thanks to the author! HIS GRAYNESS Vance
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the five star review and your comments in support of the construction and style of this poem. I wanted to capture the hollow, disposable, disconnected experience of life we have today estory
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My pleasure indeed Vance
Comment from Mustang Patty
This was a moving poem. Such a sad commentary on the current state of affairs. Even some families do not interact with one another - instead they are all using their own electronic devices, and all that is heard is beeps and boops.
The poem flows well and brings the empty feeling you were going for - thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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This was a moving poem. Such a sad commentary on the current state of affairs. Even some families do not interact with one another - instead they are all using their own electronic devices, and all that is heard is beeps and boops.
The poem flows well and brings the empty feeling you were going for - thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the five star review and your support of this piece and its depiction of life today. I am glad I was successful in creating this sense of a hollow world, and relationships, the individual disconnected from the meaning of experience. estory
Comment from humpwhistle
Empty is the recurring theme. Empty is more
often internal than external. Yes, it is the 'universal us' responsible
for some of it. But the 'individual us' is ultimately responsible.
Do you feel empty? If so, look for fulfillment.
You poem suggests many areas where you could stand against the tide.
The beauty of 'empty' is, don't take much to make it not so empty.
Good luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Empty is the recurring theme. Empty is more
often internal than external. Yes, it is the 'universal us' responsible
for some of it. But the 'individual us' is ultimately responsible.
Do you feel empty? If so, look for fulfillment.
You poem suggests many areas where you could stand against the tide.
The beauty of 'empty' is, don't take much to make it not so empty.
Good luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your five star review and your interesting comments. This poem is a comment on contemporary culture and its artificial, disposable, hollow experience. in some ways the individual is responsible for his experience of life, in other ways we are stuck with what society creates. Today, we don't get together face to face in a coffee shop and discuss poetry, we sit at a desk and type our conversations and send them via electrical digital impulses over the network of cables. it is nice to be in contact with people around the world we wouldn't other wise have contact with, but at the same time, the quality of the experience is impersonal. I once saw a husband and wife sitting together at a café table and neither one of them said a word to each other. instead they were just engrossed in their own blackberries, reading text messages. I don't know how many times I've been on a nature trail and seen kids spending the whole time staring at their cell phones, or been on dates when the other person constantly spends the time talking to someone else who isn't there estory
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Yes, I understand. But understanding is passive. A wise woman once said to me, "Now that you understand, what the hell are you doing about it?"
Journalists report the news. Poets make it. L
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Well, I wrote the poem, didn't I?
