Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a very fine haiku of an easily observed moment
with succinct wording and 4-7-3 syllables
Excellent concrete imagery in the robins/morning
with solid grammatical connection
and a fine satori line
Nice colors with the green lawn
Well done

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017

Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku, rspoet. I'm delighted you enjoyed the imagery and satori. Thanks so much.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh, this is wonderful! I have a huge grin on my face. All the elements of outstanding haiku are present - kigo=Spring implied, kire=perfectly connecting to two concrete images, satori=a splendid moment, and immediate (present tense) scene I picture as 'observer'...

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017

Thank you, Dawn, for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku. I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem, and if it made you smile, I couldn't ask for a better compliment for the poem. Thanks so much.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by Dawn Munro on 08-Mar-2017

Well, here it is, another day, and just remembering it has made me grin again - you're very welcome!

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Lovely haiku about Robins having breakfast on the lawn.
Saw one in my garden this morning it was beautiful.
Have a lovely evening

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017

Thank you, YNWA, for your great review and comments for my spring haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

How nice it would be to start the day with friends and a lawn party. The poem is effective in meeting the haiku requires of line, syllables, and topic. It's very effective in evoking imagery and emotion from the reader.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017

Thank you, Mvbrooks, for your great review and comments for my spring haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

A wonderful image of spring, Karyn. After a few bitter cold days, this is just what the doctor ordered. I love seeing the first robins come back, with voracious appetites for slumbering worms. They are committed to new life. And I love your final line to reflect on the first two, "lawn party". I can easily see these red-vested gentlemen hopping about a greening lawn.
Nicely penned, in 4-7-3 form! Thanks for sharing. A good haiku doesn't need pictures. The pics form in your mind.
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017

Seeing my first robin is the sure sign of spring for me. I love watching them dig around in the grass, and I especially love their bird songs. Thank you, Kimbob, for your wonderful review and for taking the time to share your comments. Love your red-vested gentlemen! Thank you for your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

this made me smile. I found your satori playful about robins gathering for an early morning breakfast for a lawn party. It is clever and vivid. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017

Thank you, Sis Cat, for your great review and comments for my spring haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response, and your smile is the best compliment you could give the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Rhonni

Excellent

Ahh, this means spring in ever so near when we begin to see the robin. I have seen them already here in Nebraska...it's enchanting to see them spring up and begin building their nests then to see and hear their speckled babies. This is a very sweet haiku and I love the last line, "lawn party"...nice job

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Thank you so much, Rhonni, for this great review for my spring haiku. I love robins, too, and it always means spring is here when I start to see them. I, delighted you liked "lawn party", and thank you for your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from sue133

Excellent

Robins...........one of my favourite birds and we used to see so many when I lived in England. But on trips back, they are dwindling. Your haiku is a lovely image. I really enjoyed the line, 'lawn party'. Thank you for sharing this. Susan

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017

I love robins, too, Susan. I keep a lookout for them, a sure sign of spring. Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the satori.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi IndianaIrish,

You sure have written a very nice little poem.
I really enjoyed reading it and look forward to more of them.
You are wonderful at writing all kinds of poems.

Kat

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017

I love robins, Kat. I keep a lookout for them, a sure sign of spring. Thank you for your kind review and comments for my spring haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by MizKat on 06-Mar-2017

You're very welcome.

Comment from irishauthorme

Exceptional

Ha, you are certainly living up to your nickname, Sassy! Anyone reading this will see those hungry birds on their lawns right after a rain, pulling and stretching those big, juicy worms, trying to get them out of the ground in one piece!
Delightful!
irish

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017

Irish! Thank you so much for your awesome review, generous rating, and always encouraging comments. I'm pleased you enjoyed my spring haiku. I get so excited the first time I see a robin...it's the definitive arrival of spring to me, and I love their song. Hope you're doing well, and spring will soon surround you with color, birdsongs, and warmth from the sun. Thanks for the stars, Irish.
Smiles,
Sassy :-)