Comment from Ogden

Excellent

A good premise, and a good follow-through, Patty. I think you should add a definition of agoraphobia to your author's notes. The word might be scare away some potential reviewers and voters. Good luck, and keep plugging!
Don

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Thank you for dropping by to read and review. I will go back and add the definition of agoraphobia to the author notes.
~patty~

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

Now-a-days with online banking, eCommerce, food delivery services, and door-to-door cleaning services, one truly can remain indoors. The poem captures how most of us feel some days -- and too many feel many more days.

The poem is successful in capturing much emotion in few words.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping to read and review. I appreciate your comments and generous critique.
~patty~

Comment from MaggieF

Good

Hi, It's great to try new things and I think you've done well, short, specific poems are much harder than they look. Well done. MaggieF

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review.
~patty~

Comment from estory

Excellent

I thought you did a great job with this form, using it to describe lonliness, cutting oneself off from the outside world. the poem wound in on itself very nicely, all those 'i' words tightened it up and kept the focus on the self. so you were very successful in crafting this as a piece depicting someone cutting himself off from everyone around him. estory

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I so appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

Comment from nancyrabbrose

Excellent

Your quinine is interesting. Perhaps I will try that form as well. My response to the question is "inside ourselves can be even scarier". You have chosen an accompanying illustration to enhance your poem. Well done.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

Mustangpatty, this is a good quinzaine poem. I like that you have given this format a go. It's all about making an effort to better one's self :-) Your picture is a bit spooky but it also looks a tad religious. The muslims tend to wear something like that - a prison cloth. Well done on this thoughtful read. ~DD

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Thank you again for reading and reviewing. Yes, I really enjoyed writing the quinzaine. I'm going to try a new format today - always good to learn something new.
~patty~

Comment from LoveLifeKnight

Excellent

there is no question the outside world can be scary ,even if you arent agoraphobic and sometimes i do not want to go out either, but i never thought of it that way so thanks for sharing this

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Quinzaine poem. This cruel world we live in today is best to avoid as much as you can. Even with friends or family around we stand a chance to be a victim.

NS I notice you say that you are interested in trying different types of poetry. If you are interested you can check out the challenge topic in the forum. Each Tuesday the format of the week is announced for the following Saturday at 6PM when the topic will be announced. It is a friendly group where we help each other to learn new poetry formats.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I so appreciate the information about the announcement in the forum. I was hoping to find something just like this. I was invited to join the haiku group, but I really don't want to limit myself to just one format.
~patty~

reply by Sandra du Plessis on 06-Mar-2017

I hope to see you there, and it is not going to cost you anything, and we truly only have fun, and we all help each other instead of trying to criticize without empathy.

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I loved your quinzaine. Your line and syllable count were spot on and it said so much in those few words. Your photo is also most appropriate.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

reply by marybell1 on 06-Mar-2017

You are most welcome.
Marybell1.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

You know patty i do concur with you about the outside world but we all must face our fears and phobias. I think a lot of people can become agoraphobic... scared of the real world that is out there

This is reflected in your write well done

dip

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2017

---

reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~