Comment from MelB

Excellent

A very nice rictameter with excellent syllable count. Do you live in Michigan? LOL It's been dreary, cloudy and dark here for the last few days. I would love the sun back.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your kind words. I live in the Pacific Northwest - land of the rain,
~patty~

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I liked your idea for a rictameter and you told a story. Just one little quire. Your line six seems a little out in tense. Maybe it would read better as Clouds 'came' in. You may like to review this - just a suggestion.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I will use your suggestion and change the form of 'came' I appreciate your comments.
~patty~

reply by marybell1 on 05-Mar-2017

You are most welcome.
Marybell1.

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Patty! You amaze me. I was not aware you were such a good poet...and at something you have never tried before at that. Bravo!

I liked the entire piece but especially these lines:

"Cold heart filled with sadness
Alone in the
Darkness"

Bless you. great job. Bob

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017

Hi Bob;
Sometimes, I just surprise myself. I give a lot of credit to the good poetry I read on here. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~patty~

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very interesting, but very sad Rictameter poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
~patty~

Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

For a first time Patty, it was very good, I never
wrote one either. I like the way it flowed easily
The picture suited the darkness well.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the artwork.
~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes you have expressed your thoughts so well using this form it reads smoothly through the poem with wonderful artwork I enjoyed well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for your feedback on this poem. I was a bit worried about my first venture into the world of 'poetic form,' but it seems to be well received.
~patty~

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Very nice for your first Rictameter. It is well written with minimum words as this form requires such economy of words.

Well done

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent. It looks like you have done a great job with your first attempt with this type of poetry. Of course, I'm not a poet so I guess I can't really judge. I know it sounded lovely to me and that is what matters.

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 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Rictameter and an excelkent first attempt of this popular format. The poet can say a lot with the minimum words and it all makes perfect sense.

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 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for your review. I'm glad that you feel that the poem met the form's requirements. Thank you for your words of encouragement.
~patty~