My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Everything is fine"a collection of my poetry
25 total reviews
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
A fine poem written from the heart as these romantic poems for that special person should be it is very beautiful well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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A fine poem written from the heart as these romantic poems for that special person should be it is very beautiful well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you Jill for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate your kind remarks.
~patty~
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Really enjoyed this lovely poem, you could tell the words came straight from the heart.
Loved the fifth stanza.
Have a lovely evening
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Really enjoyed this lovely poem, you could tell the words came straight from the heart.
Loved the fifth stanza.
Have a lovely evening
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~
Comment from doggymad
Purr Purr, must be the nicest feeling in the world, cuddled up with your loved one. I hope he appreciates the beauty of this work.
For those who have been hurt before it is wonderful to find this and this time it is real
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Purr Purr, must be the nicest feeling in the world, cuddled up with your loved one. I hope he appreciates the beauty of this work.
For those who have been hurt before it is wonderful to find this and this time it is real
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~
Comment from Pantygynt
I liked the way this poem worked, its form and use of rhyme also the way the "story" developed.
To be absolutely, grammatically correct you should say "Let's lie here..." Lay is a transitive verb and leeds an object like "Lay the table please". But colloquially, lay gets used a lot in US English and this is really direct speech so I leave it up to you.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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I liked the way this poem worked, its form and use of rhyme also the way the "story" developed.
To be absolutely, grammatically correct you should say "Let's lie here..." Lay is a transitive verb and leeds an object like "Lay the table please". But colloquially, lay gets used a lot in US English and this is really direct speech so I leave it up to you.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I know exactly what you mean about the 'lie' versus 'lay.' I struggled over it, but decided that the colloquial use fit better. Thank you for your kind words,
~patty~
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
'Your heart is still thumping
It beats in time with mine
Let's lay here till morning
Everything is fine.'
This is poignant and beautiful. It is written with finesse and is so touching. Very well done kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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'Your heart is still thumping
It beats in time with mine
Let's lay here till morning
Everything is fine.'
This is poignant and beautiful. It is written with finesse and is so touching. Very well done kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Aww, Meia - it looks like you went and read every piece I've released lately. Thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words, but more importantly, I am so happy you are following my work,
~patty~
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
A love poem, with all the elements of new? love in place. Nicely shared emotion and description, keeping the feelings, naturally deep, on a high level. I feel sure your husband loved it. What man does not want to feel that his woman sees him through those eyes! Nicely presented as well--lovely "love-colors" from wife to husband. Good job IMO. (I am not the best love reviewer since I've never written one!) GoodHearted Woman
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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A love poem, with all the elements of new? love in place. Nicely shared emotion and description, keeping the feelings, naturally deep, on a high level. I feel sure your husband loved it. What man does not want to feel that his woman sees him through those eyes! Nicely presented as well--lovely "love-colors" from wife to husband. Good job IMO. (I am not the best love reviewer since I've never written one!) GoodHearted Woman
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review. In truth, my husband hasn't seen the poem yet. He is currently out of town for work. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~patty~
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
I could sense the love and compassion within your every line.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
I could sense the love and compassion within your every line.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem,
~patty~
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You're very welcome.
Have a nice day.
Cookie
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written personal poem for your husband to remind him of the good times you have together all the years and that you are proud of him and love him alone.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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A very well-written personal poem for your husband to remind him of the good times you have together all the years and that you are proud of him and love him alone.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you, again, for reading and reviewing. I so appreciate your thoughtful comments.
~patty~
Comment from Autumn Splendour
A lovely romantic poem that speaks of love, tenderness and intimacy.
My take:
"My heart I've given to you
No fears or trepidation
In the past, I would stew
Afraid of damnation"
Just a suggestion:
The artwork is too jarring for a love poem. Soft pastel colours would have been a better complement.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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A lovely romantic poem that speaks of love, tenderness and intimacy.
My take:
"My heart I've given to you
No fears or trepidation
In the past, I would stew
Afraid of damnation"
Just a suggestion:
The artwork is too jarring for a love poem. Soft pastel colours would have been a better complement.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I will look to see if I can find a piece of artwork that is more fitting. Thanks for the suggestion,
~patty~
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's a very genuine, heartfelt, and well rhymed little poem for your "hubby" as well, Patty.
Your poetic proclamation portraying a pure and precious love would warm the heart of the stoutest of husbands.
Well done!
~Dean
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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It's a very genuine, heartfelt, and well rhymed little poem for your "hubby" as well, Patty.
Your poetic proclamation portraying a pure and precious love would warm the heart of the stoutest of husbands.
Well done!
~Dean
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Awww, shucks! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Your kind words make me feel like a real poet!
~patty~
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My pleasure, Patty. :)
