Devastating
Lives changes forever6 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
well, that brought tears. You sound like a very good man. And the fact that you made the decision to be the best that you could after that experience, I'm sure helped your family tremendously. That is indeed a sad memory, but is well written with all the emotion and feeling of the time.
Best of luck in the contest.
pome lover
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well, that brought tears. You sound like a very good man. And the fact that you made the decision to be the best that you could after that experience, I'm sure helped your family tremendously. That is indeed a sad memory, but is well written with all the emotion and feeling of the time.
Best of luck in the contest.
pome lover
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good contest entry. Two years ago I had trouble breathing I thought I had walking pneumonia. There was no pain. I went to a walk-in-clinic and was told to go home and take Mucinex. I continued to have symptoms and was taken to the hospital where I stayed for 21 days. The doctor said, i was as close to death as anyone he ever saw.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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A very good contest entry. Two years ago I had trouble breathing I thought I had walking pneumonia. There was no pain. I went to a walk-in-clinic and was told to go home and take Mucinex. I continued to have symptoms and was taken to the hospital where I stayed for 21 days. The doctor said, i was as close to death as anyone he ever saw.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thanks Tom. Wow, thanks for the warning on walk-in-clinics.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author
The way you told your devastating true story to me sounds like you were only a teen when your dad had his several heart attacks
Best to you in this contest,
Not an easy story to write.
Gert
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Hello author
The way you told your devastating true story to me sounds like you were only a teen when your dad had his several heart attacks
Best to you in this contest,
Not an easy story to write.
Gert
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you Gert. It was a very confusing time for me. I've never gotten over not being able to say goodbye.
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I understand
Gert
Comment from Mustang Patty
You have done a good job in life, and your Dad would be proud. I was touched by your story, and I cried when you said you walked your sister down the isle. Rules at the hospitals back then were cruel-you should have been able to say goodbye.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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You have done a good job in life, and your Dad would be proud. I was touched by your story, and I cried when you said you walked your sister down the isle. Rules at the hospitals back then were cruel-you should have been able to say goodbye.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and for your comments. I agree, not being able to say goodbye still haunts me today.
Comment from Bobbi22
Losing a parent at any age is an emotional ordeal, but even more so when you are a child. Your heartfelt story shows the fear and love and loss that you experienced as well as the regrets, as an adult, that your father never lived to see all that you accomplished. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Losing a parent at any age is an emotional ordeal, but even more so when you are a child. Your heartfelt story shows the fear and love and loss that you experienced as well as the regrets, as an adult, that your father never lived to see all that you accomplished. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thanks you for your kind words and for reading my story.
Comment from emptypage
Wow. This is gut-wrenching. I'm so sorry you had to witness this. I'm especially sorry for the missed goodbyes. They leave your grief unanswered for the longest time, sometimes.
This is my favorite line: "He appeared to be in distress, but smiled when he saw me."
What is it about dads that keeps them from admitting pain or fear? Of risking their lives over our own discomfort?
You wrote, "You know how mom gets, go back to bed, son." May I suggest a period, rather than a comma, after "gets" and starting a new sentence with "Go"??
You wrote this:
"My Aunt Dot, sister, and I waited for them to come back. Fourteen hours later, Aunt Alice dropped my mother off at the house. She told us that my dad had a heart attack, and they were going to keep him in the hospital for a few days for him to recover.
He was put in Intensive Care and no one but my mother and Aunt Alice could see him. My sister and I were frantic. We were worried. Intensive Care sounded ominous. Visiting hours were very limited even for our mom."
While it is only a formatting issue, I'd separate the paragraphs.
I think your dad would be proud.
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Wow. This is gut-wrenching. I'm so sorry you had to witness this. I'm especially sorry for the missed goodbyes. They leave your grief unanswered for the longest time, sometimes.
This is my favorite line: "He appeared to be in distress, but smiled when he saw me."
What is it about dads that keeps them from admitting pain or fear? Of risking their lives over our own discomfort?
You wrote, "You know how mom gets, go back to bed, son." May I suggest a period, rather than a comma, after "gets" and starting a new sentence with "Go"??
You wrote this:
"My Aunt Dot, sister, and I waited for them to come back. Fourteen hours later, Aunt Alice dropped my mother off at the house. She told us that my dad had a heart attack, and they were going to keep him in the hospital for a few days for him to recover.
He was put in Intensive Care and no one but my mother and Aunt Alice could see him. My sister and I were frantic. We were worried. Intensive Care sounded ominous. Visiting hours were very limited even for our mom."
While it is only a formatting issue, I'd separate the paragraphs.
I think your dad would be proud.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
