Doctor Carol
A party for Blondie41 total reviews
Comment from doggymad
This was a wonderful story. Your style of writing draws the reader from the start.
You have captured all the excitement of the event from the view of a six year old. A party was a great way to celebrate the arrival of the furry little creatures.
Best of luck with this one
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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This was a wonderful story. Your style of writing draws the reader from the start.
You have captured all the excitement of the event from the view of a six year old. A party was a great way to celebrate the arrival of the furry little creatures.
Best of luck with this one
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I had a wonderful childhood.
Comment from dmt1967
'I (went racing) down the tree lined drive to retrieve the mail. (raced)
This is such a cute little story it did make me giggle. I enjoyed reading it a lot. Thank you for the memory and good luck in the contest,
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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'I (went racing) down the tree lined drive to retrieve the mail. (raced)
This is such a cute little story it did make me giggle. I enjoyed reading it a lot. Thank you for the memory and good luck in the contest,
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the tip, I will edit and correct. I do enjoy remarks and help from the reviewers.
Comment from Kooky Clown
I just loved this memory and it brought back to me many memories of a time when small or should I say little things were so good, a time when pretty well everything was appreciated no matter how small.Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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I just loved this memory and it brought back to me many memories of a time when small or should I say little things were so good, a time when pretty well everything was appreciated no matter how small.Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Those were good days with good honest memories.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I was reading full books by the time I was four like you due to my mother and a natural love of books. I was placed two years ahead of my class at school for a few years. This is a wonderful story and I so enjoyed it you have a real gift with words and descriptions very much enjoyed kind regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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I was reading full books by the time I was four like you due to my mother and a natural love of books. I was placed two years ahead of my class at school for a few years. This is a wonderful story and I so enjoyed it you have a real gift with words and descriptions very much enjoyed kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. My mother didn't read to us so much as she had us read stories to her while she helped with the words. I think there was a method behind this, she wanted us to love reading because we would sit down and be quiet.
Comment from nuthead
What a sweet and lovely memory. That its magic stayed with you all these years is wonderful and shows how deeply the experience impacted you. Really enjoyed reading this, and could see the little girl's glee with getting a piece of mail of her own, and then the pure joy of the content of that mail!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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What a sweet and lovely memory. That its magic stayed with you all these years is wonderful and shows how deeply the experience impacted you. Really enjoyed reading this, and could see the little girl's glee with getting a piece of mail of her own, and then the pure joy of the content of that mail!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. We all loved our Auntie.
Comment from apky
>we all welcomed the chance to spend time with, Auntie, as we called her. (lose the first comma)<
>After spending three days with Auntie, and 'helping,' her do some canning; I was getting a bit lonesome for my brothers and sisters. (I don't think the semi colon after "canning" is correct; a comma would be better in my opinion)<
An interesting story, which I'll come back to later. I'm afraid it's nearly one in the morning in Germany and I should go to bed, really. Thanks for posting this.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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>we all welcomed the chance to spend time with, Auntie, as we called her. (lose the first comma)<
>After spending three days with Auntie, and 'helping,' her do some canning; I was getting a bit lonesome for my brothers and sisters. (I don't think the semi colon after "canning" is correct; a comma would be better in my opinion)<
An interesting story, which I'll come back to later. I'm afraid it's nearly one in the morning in Germany and I should go to bed, really. Thanks for posting this.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the tips, my friend. I will edit and correct. So, you live in Germany, that's where my ancestors come from. My great grandparents migrated to America from Germany. It's a small world.
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It is indeed. I'm originally of Kenyan descent and have relatives in Germany, France, Cyprus, Spain, England, Scotland and Greece!
Comment from Sis Cat
This is an excellent "I remember" story. You hooked me with your description of staying with Auntie to help her can, and then you open up with a most unusual invitation that promised adventure. You are right on the money with your summary:
"Sometimes it is the little things that stick in our minds forever and become a favorite memory."
Yes, indeed. Your story is short and charming and filled with a cherished memory of childhood.
I found several SPAGS:
Insert commas around "too": "Your Uncle and I are coming to the christening party, too, if that's . . . "
Omit comma before Auntie: ". . . so we all welcomed the chance to spend time with Auntie, . . ."
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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This is an excellent "I remember" story. You hooked me with your description of staying with Auntie to help her can, and then you open up with a most unusual invitation that promised adventure. You are right on the money with your summary:
"Sometimes it is the little things that stick in our minds forever and become a favorite memory."
Yes, indeed. Your story is short and charming and filled with a cherished memory of childhood.
I found several SPAGS:
Insert commas around "too": "Your Uncle and I are coming to the christening party, too, if that's . . . "
Omit comma before Auntie: ". . . so we all welcomed the chance to spend time with Auntie, . . ."
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thanks for the tips, I will edit and correct. Sometimes I get in too big of a hurry.
Comment from Bobbi22
Wow! You were lucky (and your mom too) that you had an aunt to "borrow" your. It probably felt like a vacation and I'm sure that one-on-one attention from your aunt was appreciated. Your story shows the excitement on the news of the new kittens - that you still recall and relive all these years later. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Wow! You were lucky (and your mom too) that you had an aunt to "borrow" your. It probably felt like a vacation and I'm sure that one-on-one attention from your aunt was appreciated. Your story shows the excitement on the news of the new kittens - that you still recall and relive all these years later. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm so glad you liked my little memory.
Comment from emptypage
This is such a sweet story of remembrance. How clever of Carol and your parents to alert you in such a way.
The writing is good.
You wrote:
She spoiled us rotten while we were there, so we all welcomed the chance to spend time with, Auntie, as we called her.
Should read as follows:
She spoiled us rotten while we were there, so we all welcomed the chance to spend time with "Auntie," as we called her.
You wrote, "Your Uncle and I are coming to the christening party too if that's okay with you."
You need a comma after "too."
You wrote, "The note and christening party for an old barn cat is one of my particularly favorite 'I remember.'"
I'd suggest adding an s: ...one of my particularly favorite 'I rememberS.'
I'd bet money I know who wrote this, and you'll hate my nitpicking! Don't kill me!??
Wonderful story. Great memory.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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This is such a sweet story of remembrance. How clever of Carol and your parents to alert you in such a way.
The writing is good.
You wrote:
She spoiled us rotten while we were there, so we all welcomed the chance to spend time with, Auntie, as we called her.
Should read as follows:
She spoiled us rotten while we were there, so we all welcomed the chance to spend time with "Auntie," as we called her.
You wrote, "Your Uncle and I are coming to the christening party too if that's okay with you."
You need a comma after "too."
You wrote, "The note and christening party for an old barn cat is one of my particularly favorite 'I remember.'"
I'd suggest adding an s: ...one of my particularly favorite 'I rememberS.'
I'd bet money I know who wrote this, and you'll hate my nitpicking! Don't kill me!??
Wonderful story. Great memory.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and the great tips. I admit, my grammar is sometimes atrocious. I had an S on the remember and my word processors kept telling me that was wrong. I guess processors are not always right and often we should use our own judgment. Right? I don't mind your nitpicking, it is what reviewers are for and I appreciate any help I can get.
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Well, "remember" is a verb, not a noun, and cannot be pluralized...except, in this case, it IS a noun and therefore MUST be pluralized, since you are talking about more than one! LOL.
Comment from robertlmcgraw
Well, you write beautifully as well! Thank you for sharing this memory. Your writing was fantastic. I enjoyed it very much.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Well, you write beautifully as well! Thank you for sharing this memory. Your writing was fantastic. I enjoyed it very much.
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
