A Shortened 'War and Peace'
a contest entry39 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The thought is true. The form meets the requirements of the challenge.
Poetic licensing as it is allows writers to pen what comes to mind, and also for others to suggest such things as: removing will from line two makes that line easier for me to read, and had I written line three would write "whereas compassion and compromise are cornerstones of"
This is very good.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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The thought is true. The form meets the requirements of the challenge.
Poetic licensing as it is allows writers to pen what comes to mind, and also for others to suggest such things as: removing will from line two makes that line easier for me to read, and had I written line three would write "whereas compassion and compromise are cornerstones of"
This is very good.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. Tom. Thanks for the editing help.
Joan
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
In my opinion, war should never start in the first place. However, war has been going on all my life. What good does it do? Innocent people die. Killing gets people and nations no where. If only people could come to an understanding with peace and happiness. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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In my opinion, war should never start in the first place. However, war has been going on all my life. What good does it do? Innocent people die. Killing gets people and nations no where. If only people could come to an understanding with peace and happiness. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thanks for the kind review and generous rating, Carkolyn.
I agree with your comments on war.
Joan
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a creative use of the prompt.
You have done a great job using a familiar theme and reworking it.
I appreciate the formatting, it reads like a story.
I also appreciate the use of alliteration the choice of the letter c throughout.
Such a useful and effective poetry technique to create rhythm.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This is a creative use of the prompt.
You have done a great job using a familiar theme and reworking it.
I appreciate the formatting, it reads like a story.
I also appreciate the use of alliteration the choice of the letter c throughout.
Such a useful and effective poetry technique to create rhythm.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thanks, K.L., for taking the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from mermaids
Excellent poem that is relevant to today's world. Your descriptive words capture the opposites of war and peace. I also like the structure of your poem which adds to the strength of your theme.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Excellent poem that is relevant to today's world. Your descriptive words capture the opposites of war and peace. I also like the structure of your poem which adds to the strength of your theme.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thanks for the nice review.
Joan
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Loved the B and C alliteration Joan in your descriptive Antonym contest poem. We are certainly seeing the hate, violence and boundless blood in Ukraine and prayer that peace and compassion will yet win over. Good luck in the contest Joan. Well done,
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Loved the B and C alliteration Joan in your descriptive Antonym contest poem. We are certainly seeing the hate, violence and boundless blood in Ukraine and prayer that peace and compassion will yet win over. Good luck in the contest Joan. Well done,
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing this. Glad you like the alliteration.
This was written 5 1/2 years ago. I don't remember placing in the contest. I am honored by the 6 star rating
Keep writing and stay healthy
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written contest entry you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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This is a very well written contest entry you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Hi Teri. Thanks for the nice review. This was written over 5 years ago. I didn't win any awards for it.
Joan
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thanks for the thorough concise review, Raul
Joan
Comment from GWHARGIS
Very direct in meaning. War is as old as mankind itself but even though the weapons change, the outcome does not. Lives destroyed. Hatred continues. I enjoyed this tiny gem. Very well written. Congratulations on your contest win as well. Gretchen
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Very direct in meaning. War is as old as mankind itself but even though the weapons change, the outcome does not. Lives destroyed. Hatred continues. I enjoyed this tiny gem. Very well written. Congratulations on your contest win as well. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2022
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Thanks, GW, for taking the time to read and review. Glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic, Joan.
-Good choice of antonyms and effective imagery and alliteration.
-You show the result of what hatred and violence can bring,
and follow that with the condition that "compassion and compromise" are needed to bring about peace.
-I hope you did well in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2022
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-You wrote a good poem with a good topic, Joan.
-Good choice of antonyms and effective imagery and alliteration.
-You show the result of what hatred and violence can bring,
and follow that with the condition that "compassion and compromise" are needed to bring about peace.
-I hope you did well in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2022
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Thanks for your thorough and concise review, Pam.
Joan
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You are welcome, Joan.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
I like your poem; indeed, I do. It is short and powerful. The alliteration with the "b" and "c" words are great. The message is clear. I love how it is formatted with the words "war and peace" as bookends.
I wish only that the font size was larger. I wish also for some color, at least make the bookend words colorful. I would make war red like blood and peace golden. A visual of some sort would enhance your message. This was a good entry to the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2022
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I like your poem; indeed, I do. It is short and powerful. The alliteration with the "b" and "c" words are great. The message is clear. I love how it is formatted with the words "war and peace" as bookends.
I wish only that the font size was larger. I wish also for some color, at least make the bookend words colorful. I would make war red like blood and peace golden. A visual of some sort would enhance your message. This was a good entry to the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2022
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Thanks for the review, Sandra. War and peace are black and white. Unless red the blood of war and blue for freedom of peace.
But, if it was professional published no color change was made.
This is the automatic font of the site.
Joan
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Thank you! No, if you go to the poem page hit advanced editor before you type in your poem. You can get a screen like on a word document. On that screen you may pick different font types, sizes and colors. I was trying to help you on this site. I too have a published book, but this is a different arena. Check out my portfolio not to read but to see some of the options on this site.
