Perennials of War
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Comment from Sixty70
A solid intermediary segment, looking forward to what comes next. I do think it's odd that Anderson's staff dines with him. Maybe the reason why was explained in an earlier piece that I haven't read.
One sentence stopped me. "Did Ivan Morozov's family actually have anything to do with it getting stolen or is he an innocent bystander too?" The phrase 'it getting stolen' seems awkward. Why not simply 'did he steal it from the Nazis?' You point out that his position in the Russian mafia makes him guilty of all sorts of things. Why not that too? And I guess I wonder whether the question is important.
Thanks for writing.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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A solid intermediary segment, looking forward to what comes next. I do think it's odd that Anderson's staff dines with him. Maybe the reason why was explained in an earlier piece that I haven't read.
One sentence stopped me. "Did Ivan Morozov's family actually have anything to do with it getting stolen or is he an innocent bystander too?" The phrase 'it getting stolen' seems awkward. Why not simply 'did he steal it from the Nazis?' You point out that his position in the Russian mafia makes him guilty of all sorts of things. Why not that too? And I guess I wonder whether the question is important.
Thanks for writing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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It is important later on, especially to Anderson. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Poor Anderson was wondering why Shana he'd placed herself in danger as to why she left, of course he knew because she would compromise his chances of the custody of Emily. Morozov of course, must have some motive for acquiring the artwork belonging to Shana's family, other than the sheer value of the thing, well done, good episode, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : Let them have (a) special treat tonight.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Poor Anderson was wondering why Shana he'd placed herself in danger as to why she left, of course he knew because she would compromise his chances of the custody of Emily. Morozov of course, must have some motive for acquiring the artwork belonging to Shana's family, other than the sheer value of the thing, well done, good episode, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : Let them have (a) special treat tonight.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the catch and the generous review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Sasha
I d wonder what Anderson has planned. Infiltrating the Russian mafia is scary stuff...not something I would consider doing lightly. I found one minor spag:
He may be out best shot...change 'out' to 'our'...
Nice work with this one. I look forward to the next post.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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I d wonder what Anderson has planned. Infiltrating the Russian mafia is scary stuff...not something I would consider doing lightly. I found one minor spag:
He may be out best shot...change 'out' to 'our'...
Nice work with this one. I look forward to the next post.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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I can't believe I made that error. Thank you for the catch and the review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I think you should be very satisfied with this work Barbara, as always your work is flawless. You have done a brilliant job and the whole thing flows and is paced perfectly. I enjoy your work so much and find it really does display quite a brilliant talent. Thanks for sharing with us, kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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I think you should be very satisfied with this work Barbara, as always your work is flawless. You have done a brilliant job and the whole thing flows and is paced perfectly. I enjoy your work so much and find it really does display quite a brilliant talent. Thanks for sharing with us, kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from mbroyles2
Another exceptional chapter in this book. It us clear that Anderson is bothered by what is happening to Shana and appears determined to help her.
Great dialogue at the dinner table.
Nice hook at the end.
Michael
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Another exceptional chapter in this book. It us clear that Anderson is bothered by what is happening to Shana and appears determined to help her.
Great dialogue at the dinner table.
Nice hook at the end.
Michael
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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I always enjoy hearing from you. Thank you.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery. Keep up the good work.
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'(")That's not like you." Philip took a drink."(delete end quote)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery. Keep up the good work.
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'(")That's not like you." Philip took a drink."(delete end quote)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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I made the correction. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Sankey
More great reading. You do keep us hanging on for more drama. Now some spags.['](")That's not like you." Philip took a drink.["]
he's with [a?](the) Russian Mafia he's guilty of a lot."
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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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More great reading. You do keep us hanging on for more drama. Now some spags.['](")That's not like you." Philip took a drink.["]
he's with [a?](the) Russian Mafia he's guilty of a lot."
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Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the catches. Both have been corrected. I appreciate the help.
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I just shared it on your timeline.
