Comment from Franklin Price

Excellent

My preference i rhyming poetry, not free verse, but this breakfast story was a complete joy from beginning to end. With the baby throwing food around and a short supply of orange juice,it seemed like a typical morning; too many people for me...LOL

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017

Thanks for the read and the comments.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That was brilliant. That's how breakfast used to be, now it's grab and go. You used every letter in the alphabet to create an everyday story on life at breakfast time. Wonderful. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017

Thanks for the read and the encouragement.

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Very lovely, nostalgic and comforting inviting us back into a past to be missed. Great entry for the contest. Best of luck in the voting booth.

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thanks for the read and the review.

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

What a fun poem full of energy and hustle. One can easily envision a family gathered in the kitchen, some seated, some moving about. It begins with "a long ago morning" and gives the sense of a time-gone-by. In doing so, it evokes a pleasant feeling as one reads.

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

Thanks for the read and your comments.

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi
this is a very well written poem. A great entry into the Abecdarian Poem contest. It brings back many memories of yesterday when families had breakfast together. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

Thanks for the read and the review.

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Poet:

You've met the abecedarian requirement of using each letter in the alphabet to begin each line in succession. Your poem flows almost like a story as you relay the events of a morning breakfast.

Suggestions:

In your K line I think you meant to say scrambled.
In the M line I think your spelling should be fridge.

Good luck in the contest.

Kim

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

Thank you for the corrections. I have made the edits.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A clever write which is hard to achieve and your story is a great tribute to families and I wish you success with your contest entry, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks for the read and the encouragement.

Comment from sue133

Excellent

This is a major feat! I so enjoyed your poem and I admire your ability to use the alphabet and make a really interesting poem about the art work you have chosen. Well done. Susan

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thank you for the read and the review.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem for the contest. Your lines flow smoothly. I really like the dialogue. It adds some interesting POV to your poem. Good job on the use of all the letters. I know that is the criteria, but sometimes other poems don't make sense. You handled it well. The picture is fitting, too.

Good job & thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. Jan

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017

Thank you for the read and your comments.

Comment from ronnie k

Excellent

I am so glad I am not being required to review on the style because I am so lost but since we are allowed freedom in reviewing I can and do say VERY WELL, I was so happy to be a guest at your families house LOL, loved the write.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017

Thanks so much for the read. Yeah, I get lost sometimes too.