Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "haiku suite (gills-gasping fish)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Aussie
Seafood on the wing! Loved your Haiku suite. Amazing Golden Eagle photo that really gave the reader insight into your words. I believe the Eagle is the sign of your country. Most enjoyable nature poem that lifted my spirit. How good is our God.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Seafood on the wing! Loved your Haiku suite. Amazing Golden Eagle photo that really gave the reader insight into your words. I believe the Eagle is the sign of your country. Most enjoyable nature poem that lifted my spirit. How good is our God.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Yes, Aussie, how good is God, indeed. This is seafood on the wing. Thank you for your amazing, six star review to match my haiku. I appreciate it.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was nicely done. The picture was absolutely perfect
for this haiku. I like the 2 part continuance.
Most definitely nature at its best....
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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That was nicely done. The picture was absolutely perfect
for this haiku. I like the 2 part continuance.
Most definitely nature at its best....
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Yes, Kerry, this eagle catching a fish is nature at its best. Thank you for your review.
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your most welcome...
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
Super-cute humor we have here! Sea food flown daily! If that eagle wanted something I had, it would be a pretty bad and bloody battle because they are strong. They are like a flying fighting machine. One lady tells that an eagle wanted her wig and the only reason he didn't get it, there were too many pins, but a person could lose an eye in such a battle--thank goodness they are mostly afraid of humans. If any of those animals gets on a rampage, they could do a lot of damage..
Hey, how's your business coming along? I think about you often, as having been a very nice friend, trying to help me.
I send Blessings. GoodHearted Woman
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Super-cute humor we have here! Sea food flown daily! If that eagle wanted something I had, it would be a pretty bad and bloody battle because they are strong. They are like a flying fighting machine. One lady tells that an eagle wanted her wig and the only reason he didn't get it, there were too many pins, but a person could lose an eye in such a battle--thank goodness they are mostly afraid of humans. If any of those animals gets on a rampage, they could do a lot of damage..
Hey, how's your business coming along? I think about you often, as having been a very nice friend, trying to help me.
I send Blessings. GoodHearted Woman
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Thank you, GoodHearted Woman, for your review and your wig story. The businesses I help manage are doing better than last year. Thanks again.
Comment from winnona
Well-written haiku challenge poems. I do not know if you have ever seen eagles fish in the streams or ponds. I am lucky enough to have watched them. It is not only the ones like in your photo but the golden eagles also fish. well captured.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Well-written haiku challenge poems. I do not know if you have ever seen eagles fish in the streams or ponds. I am lucky enough to have watched them. It is not only the ones like in your photo but the golden eagles also fish. well captured.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Winnona, I have never seen eagle fish in San Pablo Bay. I only once saw an eagle carry a salmon from there. I never forgot the sight. Thank you for your review.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Andre, next to my favorite bird...that would be a snow Geese...the Eagle is my next...they are amazing birds...beautiful and quit strong...I love your poem you...and I love the picture...perfect for the book...well done my friend...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Hi Andre, next to my favorite bird...that would be a snow Geese...the Eagle is my next...they are amazing birds...beautiful and quit strong...I love your poem you...and I love the picture...perfect for the book...well done my friend...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Linda, for your review and encouragement. I appreciate them.
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your so welcome...always... love xxoo
Comment from sue133
This is my first time reading your Haiku and it is truly the best one I've come across for ages.The photograph is perfect and the slow rhythm of the poem compliments it. I love the last line 'seafood flown daily'. Susan
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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This is my first time reading your Haiku and it is truly the best one I've come across for ages.The photograph is perfect and the slow rhythm of the poem compliments it. I love the last line 'seafood flown daily'. Susan
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Susan, for your review and for finding my haiku "truly the best one I've come across for ages." Your compliement encourages me.
Comment from lyenochka
Yes, I remember reading it before. I do like the repeated assonance of the short 'i' sound (gills, fish, swishes, grip) which sounds like the need for air in the first stanza. The last line is great, too as it is a line we see in human fish consumption contexts and given a whole new light.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Yes, I remember reading it before. I do like the repeated assonance of the short 'i' sound (gills, fish, swishes, grip) which sounds like the need for air in the first stanza. The last line is great, too as it is a line we see in human fish consumption contexts and given a whole new light.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Thank you, lyenochka, for giving my haiku a second review. Thank you also for noting the assonance.
Comment from estory
I liked the image central to this, the eagle catching its prey, the fish as food for the young eagles. the rhythm of the lines here, short interspersed with long, kind of mimicks the flapping of the wings of the bird. nice job estory
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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I liked the image central to this, the eagle catching its prey, the fish as food for the young eagles. the rhythm of the lines here, short interspersed with long, kind of mimicks the flapping of the wings of the bird. nice job estory
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Ah, estory, thank you for your review and for noting that the rhythm of my lines mimic the flapping of birds. Thanks.
Comment from Bobbi22
Your haiku suite clearly sets the scene for the eagle going fishing and then sharing his catch with the kids. Great third line in each haiku. Very well written haiku suite. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Your haiku suite clearly sets the scene for the eagle going fishing and then sharing his catch with the kids. Great third line in each haiku. Very well written haiku suite. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Thank you, RightPics, for your review. I am glad you found these to be be a "Very well written haiku suite."
Comment from Doc Holiday
Love the line...seafood flown in daily! LOL!
Well-written haiku suite! Great accompanying picture to stir the image in the reader's mind. Bald eagles are certainly awe-inspiring, aren't they!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Love the line...seafood flown in daily! LOL!
Well-written haiku suite! Great accompanying picture to stir the image in the reader's mind. Bald eagles are certainly awe-inspiring, aren't they!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Yes, Doc, bald eagles are inspiring. I never knew that they lived in the San Francisco Bay Area. Thank you for your review.
