Comment from TheWriteTeach

Good

I like the first two lines, but I don't understand the last one. It doesn't seem to fit properly. You carefully chose your words to give strong meaning to this poem. The first two lines are stellar and gives a strong mental image of what you are saying.

Good luck in the contest.

Suzanne

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017

Thanks for the read. I was trying to say, her face haunts me.

Comment from Terry Frazier

Needs Improvement

You met the requirement of the contest, but I'm not sure what you meant to say. The story you intent to display does not come through for me. The art work you chose is appropriate and pleasing, Good job.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017

Her face haunts me. Thanks for the critique. I will explore your suggestion.

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

What a beautiful photo you have chosen. You have the correct number of lines and syllables. Beautifully written.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017

Thank you for the read and the comment

reply by marybell1 on 24-Feb-2017

You are most welcome.
Marybell1.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This could be a fine entry for the contest
but line two has only six syllables
Otherwise, a good poem that many can relate to
with excellent art work
Add one syllable and all will be well
good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017

Thanks, I corrected it.

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017

My mind never rests
thus no where can I be safe
suddenly your face

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017

I will check on it. Thanks.

reply by rspoet on 23-Feb-2017

This is much better with the extra syllable. Good luck in the voting.

reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017

Thanks again for your help.