Once upon the heart..
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Love's Lullaby"Love poems
28 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Beautiful writing, Susan. I liked this stanza in particular...it's almost musical and flows so well:
"Peacefully rest upon my breast;
Steady heartbeats thrum, till we sleep.
Be always blessed along life's quest
and never far from Angels keep."
Great poetry, seriously. Bob
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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Beautiful writing, Susan. I liked this stanza in particular...it's almost musical and flows so well:
"Peacefully rest upon my breast;
Steady heartbeats thrum, till we sleep.
Be always blessed along life's quest
and never far from Angels keep."
Great poetry, seriously. Bob
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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Hi Bob! How are you? Have I mentioned how much I enjoy your story!? :-P ( reading is a challenge, but set aside time to tackle your story)...SOOOOO enjoying it!...anyways, thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem! I so do appreciate you. :-)
Comment from Irish Rain
This is so beautiful Miss Susan...'where every breath's a tender sigh'...just lovely. The entire poem reads like a vintage lullaby. Blessings...
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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This is so beautiful Miss Susan...'where every breath's a tender sigh'...just lovely. The entire poem reads like a vintage lullaby. Blessings...
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Hello to one of my favorite poets!!! thank you dear, I ALWAYS appreciate you taking the time to read and review!!!
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a beautifully written poetic proclamation portraying a pure and perfect love, Susan.
It felt genuine and heartfelt, not the least bit pretentious or overly-dramatized.
Thanks for sharing...
~Dean
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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This is a beautifully written poetic proclamation portraying a pure and perfect love, Susan.
It felt genuine and heartfelt, not the least bit pretentious or overly-dramatized.
Thanks for sharing...
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Now you know it totally puts a smile on my face when i see you reviewed one of my simple poems Deano!! thank you so much! i soooooooo appreciate you!!!!!
Comment from DR DIP
Beautifully written Susan your flow and rhythm are exquisite. Your are a wonderful romance poet. a true romantic I really enjoy your writes. Thanks for sharing
xxdip
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Beautifully written Susan your flow and rhythm are exquisite. Your are a wonderful romance poet. a true romantic I really enjoy your writes. Thanks for sharing
xxdip
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thanks dipster!! You know i was waiting on your review!! heheeh..Some people are special! ( thats you) :-))
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you say the sweetest things
xxdip
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ditto dip..hugs
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful love poem you have penned. You used very sweet and loving words in this poem. I love the art work you used! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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This is a very beautiful love poem you have penned. You used very sweet and loving words in this poem. I love the art work you used! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you Dear!! I always appreciate your kind and wonderful reviews!!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written and it flows so smoothly expressing so much feeling of love it is beautiful I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Yes this is well written and it flows so smoothly expressing so much feeling of love it is beautiful I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you so very much!!! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review!!
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
I loved your poem. It expressed protection and love. It was from the heart, and it show in your words.
The last stanza was my favorite, don't get mean wrong, I loved them all. Your words had flowed so beautifully.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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I loved your poem. It expressed protection and love. It was from the heart, and it show in your words.
The last stanza was my favorite, don't get mean wrong, I loved them all. Your words had flowed so beautifully.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Aw thanks for taking the time to read and review!! I do appreciate it!!..I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks again :-))))
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your most welcome dear.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Beautiful words, great rhymes and flow and a joy to read Susan. Peaceful sleep as love shelters you from the storm, wonderful words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Beautiful words, great rhymes and flow and a joy to read Susan. Peaceful sleep as love shelters you from the storm, wonderful words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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:-) thank you for such a wonderful review!! I'm smiling!!
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Really enjoyed this beautiful lullaby, a lovely flow throughout with some wonderful lines.
In particular in final stanza was just beautiful.
Super picture to accompany your wonderful words.
Have a lovely evening
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Really enjoyed this beautiful lullaby, a lovely flow throughout with some wonderful lines.
In particular in final stanza was just beautiful.
Super picture to accompany your wonderful words.
Have a lovely evening
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Yes, i was really drawn to that picture too!! Thank you for taking the time to read and review!! I do appreciate it!
Comment from WalkerMan
This sweet poem just overflows with unconditional love. While the man is generally expected to be the strong one (provider, protector, etc.) in a relationship, in reality he has as much need for solace and comfort as his partner (though most men are reluctant to show it, despite the fact that such restraint actually weakens their health and ability to stay strong). Accordingly, there are moments when a woman should gently take the lead as here described, giving her mate the relief he needs to recharge. It is not weak of him to accept such solace, as it truly supports his strength and resolve when needed. This rarely mentioned aspect of real love is important to recognize, and this splendid expression of it is the best I have seen. Superb, and the lovely illustration fits the theme well.
On the technical side, I like the internal rhymes that match the external rhymes in the odd-numbered lines.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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This sweet poem just overflows with unconditional love. While the man is generally expected to be the strong one (provider, protector, etc.) in a relationship, in reality he has as much need for solace and comfort as his partner (though most men are reluctant to show it, despite the fact that such restraint actually weakens their health and ability to stay strong). Accordingly, there are moments when a woman should gently take the lead as here described, giving her mate the relief he needs to recharge. It is not weak of him to accept such solace, as it truly supports his strength and resolve when needed. This rarely mentioned aspect of real love is important to recognize, and this splendid expression of it is the best I have seen. Superb, and the lovely illustration fits the theme well.
On the technical side, I like the internal rhymes that match the external rhymes in the odd-numbered lines.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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MIKE! You got it...of course you always get my poems!!...yes, this is what I was trying to express! Thank you again for such a great review and 6 stars!!...I always appreciate you taking the time to read my poetry...and the amazing reviews you write! :-)
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You are most welcome, Susan. Once again you earned a Six for wondrous words that evoke exactly the strong emotion you intend. Also, the changes you have been making since this review are improving the poem even more. FanStory is achieving its stated purpose here, as fellow writers are helping you make this work the best it can be. I love it. -- Mike
