Between Two Worlds
Her name was Aurora...4 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The reader will be drawn in with your first couple of descriptive sentences. It only gets better with the sense of mystery increasing: "he could see the rock next to the apple tree - where it all began." The ending question is great. Good work.
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The reader will be drawn in with your first couple of descriptive sentences. It only gets better with the sense of mystery increasing: "he could see the rock next to the apple tree - where it all began." The ending question is great. Good work.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2023
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an interesting poem. How often do we think we MAY want to go back in time with no modern invention, thinking life was so much simpler--but was it? An enjoyable read. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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This is an interesting poem. How often do we think we MAY want to go back in time with no modern invention, thinking life was so much simpler--but was it? An enjoyable read. Marilyn
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Thank you!
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, now that some intense and real love -- to be willing to live in a world without phone or computer (just kidding) . Actually, so can I. Sometimes a phone and computer could be distractions from human connectivity.
You did an EXCELLENT job with telling this story with such few words. The movement of the story was fast, but paced suitably.
Good luck in the contest. Have a great week.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Wow, now that some intense and real love -- to be willing to live in a world without phone or computer (just kidding) . Actually, so can I. Sometimes a phone and computer could be distractions from human connectivity.
You did an EXCELLENT job with telling this story with such few words. The movement of the story was fast, but paced suitably.
Good luck in the contest. Have a great week.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thanks for the read and review. Ir was a fun challenge.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
This is a most worthy contest entry, you did an amazing job getting all the words in but ore than that you mad an incredible story out of it, something I would have been afraid to attempt, well done and very good luck in the competition this is smashing love Meia x
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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This is a most worthy contest entry, you did an amazing job getting all the words in but ore than that you mad an incredible story out of it, something I would have been afraid to attempt, well done and very good luck in the competition this is smashing love Meia x
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging words.
