Humanity Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Hufacs"A science fiction book about genetic engineering.
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Comment from Walu Feral
Kumusta, Amiga.
I'm getting punctual in my reviewing these days lol.
"creating offspring that are man-like in appearance" (lol. I think that's what happened to my sons. Well, some of them look like humans anyway.)
"This gives us permission to experiment on them without regard for human rights." (Ouch!)
"these subjects have been kept alive, but housed in a separate facility called Mine City," (Wow! That adds heaps of weight to the mystery of Mine City. Great work.)
"They have human host mothers, and sperm contributing fathers." (I wish it was the other way around. One of my deep dark fantasies has always been to be a sperm donor to a tarantula! lol. Yuck, Fez.)
"Now, Ayala, I know all of this is a bit of a shock, but don't let it get to you." (He must have majored in the same subject as me at university! "The obvious!" I duxed the uni.)
Wow, Padna. This is an incredible and wonderfully explanatory chapter about the happenings there. Very, very powerful work and just the thought scares the heck out of me.
Gripping work and I can see a movie coming up.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Kumusta, Amiga.
I'm getting punctual in my reviewing these days lol.
"creating offspring that are man-like in appearance" (lol. I think that's what happened to my sons. Well, some of them look like humans anyway.)
"This gives us permission to experiment on them without regard for human rights." (Ouch!)
"these subjects have been kept alive, but housed in a separate facility called Mine City," (Wow! That adds heaps of weight to the mystery of Mine City. Great work.)
"They have human host mothers, and sperm contributing fathers." (I wish it was the other way around. One of my deep dark fantasies has always been to be a sperm donor to a tarantula! lol. Yuck, Fez.)
"Now, Ayala, I know all of this is a bit of a shock, but don't let it get to you." (He must have majored in the same subject as me at university! "The obvious!" I duxed the uni.)
Wow, Padna. This is an incredible and wonderfully explanatory chapter about the happenings there. Very, very powerful work and just the thought scares the heck out of me.
Gripping work and I can see a movie coming up.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Feral Padna,
Wow, great review, my friend.
We will put you in for the next round of "donors". Tarantula it is!
I'm glad the explanatory cam of as such, and not a bit too much like an information dump. It was a bit of info that could just be leaked in over time.
Archie is a bit imperialistic. He grew up privileged, and is a Senator, whose father is the Pres. I think it's one of the things that comes between he and the Headmistress.
Okay, on to your next review. I'm very proud of you for being on here a lot, and it is certainly to my benefit.
Kumusta to the beauties,
Cowgirl.
Comment from w.j.debi
The intensity of the situation just went up a notch. So these girls are classified as animals do to a little DNA alteration in their genes. Scary stuff and a timely topic for today's scientific experimentation. And what is Koko's baby?
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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The intensity of the situation just went up a notch. So these girls are classified as animals do to a little DNA alteration in their genes. Scary stuff and a timely topic for today's scientific experimentation. And what is Koko's baby?
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Yes, a quick look at the dangers of genetic research, or of human experimentation. There are a lot of levels I hit with this book, but am trying to get people to see that other people for who they are.
Again, thanks for reviewing!!
Comment from Winslow
Dear Rhonda,
Oh the horror and evilness of gene manipulation. For man likes to play God but than unfortunately he doesn't have the required wisdom or foresight. Intense write that makes you wonder if this is a harbinger of our future.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Dear Rhonda,
Oh the horror and evilness of gene manipulation. For man likes to play God but than unfortunately he doesn't have the required wisdom or foresight. Intense write that makes you wonder if this is a harbinger of our future.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Winslow. One does wonder what craziness people will come up with! Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Well said, a scientific discovery, a human factor (hufacs), a mistaken fact remains, fantasy captured in an interesting order of expression, theme ends with a conclusion, state of misconception, flow of thoughts is reasoned with a true vision of human wisdom.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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Well said, a scientific discovery, a human factor (hufacs), a mistaken fact remains, fantasy captured in an interesting order of expression, theme ends with a conclusion, state of misconception, flow of thoughts is reasoned with a true vision of human wisdom.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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Wow, I like your review. It's a great summary, and said better than I could!!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Rhonda,
Something sprung to mind s I was reading this. not sure if you've come across it, but there is a tv show from when I was a teenager (80s) called First Born starring Charles Dance in which a male ape had its way with a woman and the offspring was saved and raised as human. Very interesting. Also brought to mind Dr Moreau and Spliced.
"So . . . I'm an animal?" she stuttered - you could show the stuttering in speech rather than telling the reader.
Very well written chapter.
On reading the author notes something else sprang to mind. Scientists have discovered the gene they believe causes Down Syndrome and they reckon that in 10 to 20 years they can eradicate it. You know, just wipe out a whole whack of people, just like that. for me that smacks of genocide, as if they're lives are worthless. Where do we draw the line.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Hi Rhonda,
Something sprung to mind s I was reading this. not sure if you've come across it, but there is a tv show from when I was a teenager (80s) called First Born starring Charles Dance in which a male ape had its way with a woman and the offspring was saved and raised as human. Very interesting. Also brought to mind Dr Moreau and Spliced.
"So . . . I'm an animal?" she stuttered - you could show the stuttering in speech rather than telling the reader.
Very well written chapter.
On reading the author notes something else sprang to mind. Scientists have discovered the gene they believe causes Down Syndrome and they reckon that in 10 to 20 years they can eradicate it. You know, just wipe out a whole whack of people, just like that. for me that smacks of genocide, as if they're lives are worthless. Where do we draw the line.
All the best
G
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Wow, thanks for the review and comments. You're so right about the Down Syndrome issue. When do we stop deciding what is perfect, and that's one of the themes of this book, as you caught.
I haven't seen First Born, but will have to look it up to watch.
The Island of Dr. Moreau, though, I did watch. I've tried very hard to steer away from any similarities, and hope I'm successful. It's been so long since I've seen it that I hope it doesn't leak through.
Good call on the stuttering. I'll work on that!!
Thanks again,
Rhonda
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rhonda,
Well, this was a interesting turn in the story.
A little Juristic Park with the DNA splicing,
a little Brave New World or !984 with breeding
to "improve" the overall society.
I'm not sure mixing human and insect DNA
is viable, though there have been many movies like The Fly
that mix things up a bit.
I would say these so called scientists are kooks
and dangerous ones, too.
So, to Coyote House to meet the ancestors of koko (apt name)
and Ayala.
The story should get rather challenging from here.
Well done, with good author note at the end.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Hello Rhonda,
Well, this was a interesting turn in the story.
A little Juristic Park with the DNA splicing,
a little Brave New World or !984 with breeding
to "improve" the overall society.
I'm not sure mixing human and insect DNA
is viable, though there have been many movies like The Fly
that mix things up a bit.
I would say these so called scientists are kooks
and dangerous ones, too.
So, to Coyote House to meet the ancestors of koko (apt name)
and Ayala.
The story should get rather challenging from here.
Well done, with good author note at the end.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the six star rating!
It's a bit far-fetched in places, but, hey, I can only justify so much. haha.
Insect and human DNA differ on only a few chromosomes... okay, I just made that up, but it sounds good, right?
Jurassic Park is a bit close, as well as the Island of Dr. Moreau, but, hopefully, different enough.
Strange thing is, I developed this idea when I was in high school. I found a paper where I had ideas for stories, and this one was in there, and that was before I ever saw or read either of those. I was a quirky kid!! haha.
I didn't think it was going to surprise you, as you've skirted around the idea in your reviews before. You're always pretty good at picking up on foreshadowing, and this book is full of it.
Thank you again,
Rhonda
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Ha ha. I would say you were a little more than quirky if this is what you were thinking. You must have been a fun date in high school. lol
I expected something to justify the camp, but not mixing DNA with insects and animals.
The island of Doctor Moreau is close, but his creations were real monsters. I suspect The Mine will resemble Moreau a little more.
We'll just have to see how the quirky mind of Rhonda works this all out for Koko and Ayala. Better you than me.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
RS
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The quirky probably lost me a few dates. haha.
Sort of like Sheldon's girlfriend on Big Bang Theory.
The ones in Mine City will not be that extreme.
The story will have more action now that the scene is set, and will seem a bit less weird.
Comment from royowen
A very interesting chapter Rhinda, it seems that something stinks in Denmark, and it casts a shadow on the child that Kok is carrying, although Ayala now knows Koko is as yet ignorant, although it seems that Sani knows. Excellent chapter, Dear Rhinda, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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A very interesting chapter Rhinda, it seems that something stinks in Denmark, and it casts a shadow on the child that Kok is carrying, although Ayala now knows Koko is as yet ignorant, although it seems that Sani knows. Excellent chapter, Dear Rhinda, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Roy. You're so right about the concern for Koko's baby. It will come up more in the following chapters, and is another in the whole "genetic control" issue. I do so appreciate your review!!
Take care.
BTW, my daughter is in labor right now with grandbaby #4 for me.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Congratulations Rhonda, it's the best, I'll pray
Comment from Alex Biasin
This is really starting to get interesting now.
Lots of good back story being revealed and some excellent fantasy elements being interwoven into the story.
The main impetus is still the relationships building between the characters and that is driving the story along nicely.
Just a personal nitpick - I would've liked to have had a bear in there instead of a tarantula! Really good stuff.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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This is really starting to get interesting now.
Lots of good back story being revealed and some excellent fantasy elements being interwoven into the story.
The main impetus is still the relationships building between the characters and that is driving the story along nicely.
Just a personal nitpick - I would've liked to have had a bear in there instead of a tarantula! Really good stuff.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Alex. I opted out of the Black Bear because I didn't want two powerful creatures. I went for the strong bird (hawk) and the cougar.
Thank you for reading and commenting!!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Rhonda, I like your writing and the imagery is great. You also take us through quite a ride. Second world war springs to mind and the Jews. It makes me shutter. Great story.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Hello, Rhonda, I like your writing and the imagery is great. You also take us through quite a ride. Second world war springs to mind and the Jews. It makes me shutter. Great story.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review, and for taking the time to review.
The book does hint toward the treatment of the Jews, but also African Americans, Native Americans, and others around the world right now who are into genocide.
Thank you for noticing!
Rhonda
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Rhonda, this is such an exceptional chapter. I enjoyed reading about Archie and Ayala sitting together reading the Humanity Report. They both learned so much and poor Ayala broke down in tears from reading that she could be part animal. You know how I feel about the dialogue you always come up with, Rhonda. An exceptional story for sure.
Take care my friend,
Always
Jim
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Rhonda, this is such an exceptional chapter. I enjoyed reading about Archie and Ayala sitting together reading the Humanity Report. They both learned so much and poor Ayala broke down in tears from reading that she could be part animal. You know how I feel about the dialogue you always come up with, Rhonda. An exceptional story for sure.
Take care my friend,
Always
Jim
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Jim!! You are so generous to offer six stars, and a warm and encouraging review!! Thank you for bringing some warmth into my evening. You're a great friend.
Hope all is well in your part of the world!
Take care,
Rhonda
