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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (jaguar)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
33 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hahaha... it would be so easy for a jaguar to get away. They would make awesome burglars. Good job sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
Hahaha... it would be so easy for a jaguar to get away. They would make awesome burglars. Good job sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Thank you!
Comment from krys123
Greetings, Robyn;
-the picture is magnanimously appropriate and outstandingly powerful as it represents the Jag wire in its true form and it is relevant and perfect for the haiku.
-I enjoy having the satori as the first line is it sets up the relevancy of the next two grammatically connected lines. The satori also is not only relative to the conceptual theme but also summarizes the relativity to the context of the picture and the writing in the meaningful statements that occur.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
Greetings, Robyn;
-the picture is magnanimously appropriate and outstandingly powerful as it represents the Jag wire in its true form and it is relevant and perfect for the haiku.
-I enjoy having the satori as the first line is it sets up the relevancy of the next two grammatically connected lines. The satori also is not only relative to the conceptual theme but also summarizes the relativity to the context of the picture and the writing in the meaningful statements that occur.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Alex!
Comment from Leineco
:-) I love a well done satori first haiku, where the imagery lines
serve to put a "twist" on the "at first encounter" expectations :-)
snatch and grab predator for sure!!
Very nicely done Robyn :-)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
:-) I love a well done satori first haiku, where the imagery lines
serve to put a "twist" on the "at first encounter" expectations :-)
snatch and grab predator for sure!!
Very nicely done Robyn :-)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Lorraine!
Comment from IndianaIrish
Wow, what an awesome photo, Robyn. I enjoyed your haiku and it sure is easy to visualize a jaguar grabbing whatever they want and running the heck out of any other critter. Especially like your aha line. It's perfect for the haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
Wow, what an awesome photo, Robyn. I enjoyed your haiku and it sure is easy to visualize a jaguar grabbing whatever they want and running the heck out of any other critter. Especially like your aha line. It's perfect for the haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Karyn!
Comment from Lu Saluna
wow, I like this one. Jaguar is a magnificent specimen of a wild cat.
A most amazing haiku for a most amazing animal. Not only do they run fast, they are incredibly good swimmers. One of the few who go in the water willingly.
Wonderful satori - just perfect.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
wow, I like this one. Jaguar is a magnificent specimen of a wild cat.
A most amazing haiku for a most amazing animal. Not only do they run fast, they are incredibly good swimmers. One of the few who go in the water willingly.
Wonderful satori - just perfect.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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I didn't know that! Thanks for the info! *smile* And for reading!
Comment from write hand blue
A nice picture of a ferocious jaguar. I wonder if the morsel is a cat. After reading I wondered if the jaguar had any significance in a local sort of way...
~Mel~
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
A nice picture of a ferocious jaguar. I wonder if the morsel is a cat. After reading I wondered if the jaguar had any significance in a local sort of way...
~Mel~
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thank you!
Comment from l.raven
HI Robyn, this is where being allergic to cats comes in handy...don't want to be near one...but aren't they just beautiful????...love your poem sweet girl...and the picture is stunning...very well put together you...love ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
HI Robyn, this is where being allergic to cats comes in handy...don't want to be near one...but aren't they just beautiful????...love your poem sweet girl...and the picture is stunning...very well put together you...love ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thank you!
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sooooooo welcome....xxoo love
Comment from Douglas Paul
ahhhh - I really like this one. Great choice of the mammal. Great presentation and picture. Clear imagery in the two connecting lines and a powerful satori. This one will get my vote to be included in the anthology. Well done, my friend. I would give this a 6 star if i had any left
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
ahhhh - I really like this one. Great choice of the mammal. Great presentation and picture. Clear imagery in the two connecting lines and a powerful satori. This one will get my vote to be included in the anthology. Well done, my friend. I would give this a 6 star if i had any left
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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HUZZAH!! Your kind comments are all I need, sweetie! Yum! Thank you!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Robyn, lively haiku for the cat burglars. Love your play on words in this one.
Nice strong haiku, my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
m
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Dear Robyn, lively haiku for the cat burglars. Love your play on words in this one.
Nice strong haiku, my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
m
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thanks, M!
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi, Robyn,
All sorts of thoughts come to mind when presented the phrase cat burglar. It's a strong satori, aided by the picture, it directs where the rest of the poem will go. The snatches is a great descriptive verb, in a short time, I see a vivid moment of a jaguar in the wild, grabbing up some food, perhaps a small antelope, and out running some hyenas who were going to try and take it from her.
In a playful sort of way... I also see someone pouncing,... grabbing a sandwich from someone's hand, and racing out the kitchen with a cat-like grin.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Hi, Robyn,
All sorts of thoughts come to mind when presented the phrase cat burglar. It's a strong satori, aided by the picture, it directs where the rest of the poem will go. The snatches is a great descriptive verb, in a short time, I see a vivid moment of a jaguar in the wild, grabbing up some food, perhaps a small antelope, and out running some hyenas who were going to try and take it from her.
In a playful sort of way... I also see someone pouncing,... grabbing a sandwich from someone's hand, and racing out the kitchen with a cat-like grin.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Turtle. I appreciate your time!