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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (in the dead of night)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Hello Dean, I am so pleased I caught this post because Haiku is my main interest now. I post on Facebook and on Twitter to get practice and talk to other better poets there. I haven't been on the site much because of illness, but I would love to join the Haiku club and will contact Gypsy Blue Rose as you advise. I would also like to participate in the weekly Tuesday meetings, the time will suit me fine. Thank you for posting this information. I am so pleased I caught you. I've actually been looking for a haiku club to join and I've started posting a few to online magazines. This one of yours reminded me so much of when I was a child in the farm house at night in bed listening to frogs that were being eaten by snakes... A ghastly croaking noise! Loved your haiku, Giddy (yes I do... Haiku) :):)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Hello Dean, I am so pleased I caught this post because Haiku is my main interest now. I post on Facebook and on Twitter to get practice and talk to other better poets there. I haven't been on the site much because of illness, but I would love to join the Haiku club and will contact Gypsy Blue Rose as you advise. I would also like to participate in the weekly Tuesday meetings, the time will suit me fine. Thank you for posting this information. I am so pleased I caught you. I've actually been looking for a haiku club to join and I've started posting a few to online magazines. This one of yours reminded me so much of when I was a child in the farm house at night in bed listening to frogs that were being eaten by snakes... A ghastly croaking noise! Loved your haiku, Giddy (yes I do... Haiku) :):)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Well, I know we would sure love to have you in the club, Giddy. We all have a lot of fun just discussing haiku, gathering ideas, and sharing what we've written with each other.
In addition, you also have an opportunity to be published in our Anthology we are putting together and selling on Amazon.com at year's end.
The best part of all...it's completely free to participate and costs you nothing but your time and poetic effort.
I look forward to seeing you there, and thanks so much as
gain for the stellar review!
~Dean :)
Comment from evilynne
Well, yes, I guess he does have a frog in his throat, hehehe. The haiku is great, as are the sound effects and gruesome picture. Evi
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Well, yes, I guess he does have a frog in his throat, hehehe. The haiku is great, as are the sound effects and gruesome picture. Evi
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku for the Haiku Club Challenge on mammals, Evi.
I am very grateful for the encouraging comments and your positive feedback.
Thank you too for the stellar six star rating, I'm glad to you you felt it worthy.
More than anything else, I'm just really pleased to know that you enjoyed it.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Dean, I'm sure your haiku is lovely, but the only thing I see is a black box and I assume it is about a bat who probably has relatives residing in my attic. Fix this and I'll read it again, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Dean, I'm sure your haiku is lovely, but the only thing I see is a black box and I assume it is about a bat who probably has relatives residing in my attic. Fix this and I'll read it again, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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I'm seeing it just fine, Debbie, and apparently so is everyone else but you.
Thanks...
~Dean
Comment from Aussie
A bat has to eat. Our vampire bats are white, they leave their caves at night and go blood-sucking on the farmer's cows. Never taking too much blood. We have big problems with fruit bats here, they carry the virus in their droppings and folks have died from it. Thanks for sharing, loved the twittering of the bats. XXK
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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A bat has to eat. Our vampire bats are white, they leave their caves at night and go blood-sucking on the farmer's cows. Never taking too much blood. We have big problems with fruit bats here, they carry the virus in their droppings and folks have died from it. Thanks for sharing, loved the twittering of the bats. XXK
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku for the Haiku Club Challenge on mammals, Kay.
I am very grateful for the encouraging comments and your positive feedback.
Thank you too for the stellar six star rating, I'm glad to you you felt it worthy.
More than anything else, I'm just really pleased to know that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me laugh Dean, picture is good too, how do you think up these little gems, a fun Haiku in your unique style, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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You made me laugh Dean, picture is good too, how do you think up these little gems, a fun Haiku in your unique style, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Comment from lyenochka
Alas, poor froggy! Wish they would just stick to mosquitoes. Fun play on words, "frog in the throat." Thanks for sharing the educational video - I think.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Alas, poor froggy! Wish they would just stick to mosquitoes. Fun play on words, "frog in the throat." Thanks for sharing the educational video - I think.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Comment from Ric Myworld
Those creepy characters have given me the willies since I was a kid. No they aren't really scary, but to a kid who had to take what seemed like a gazillion shots in the stomach because of being bitten by one, it sure changes a perspective in a hurry. Great job.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Those creepy characters have given me the willies since I was a kid. No they aren't really scary, but to a kid who had to take what seemed like a gazillion shots in the stomach because of being bitten by one, it sure changes a perspective in a hurry. Great job.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Comment from Hitcher
Ha ha, This one definitely sands out in the crowd my man, made me smile and appreciate the dark humour behind the man who has written it, my kind of haiku. loved it! I'm off bush for four days hunting catch you when I get back mate:)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Ha ha, This one definitely sands out in the crowd my man, made me smile and appreciate the dark humour behind the man who has written it, my kind of haiku. loved it! I'm off bush for four days hunting catch you when I get back mate:)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Hitch.
I'm glad you enjoyed this and I'm grateful for your review and the six.
Take care, my
Comment from Thal1959
Sorry, Dean, but I am out of sixes this week. As you know, I am not partial to the briefer forms and to Haiku - although at times, it can be artistic if not poetic. But I have read a number of Haikus lately where the Satori seems to be a humorous remark, and I am not sure how I feel about it. They are clever, and accurately state something relating to the Kigo. But it is almost as if the Haiku form is becoming akin to the limerick; a platform for a joke or riddle more than something the Japanese would approve of.
Of course, I have little credibility to critique the form, but it is just something that is occurring to me. I hope you understand.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Sorry, Dean, but I am out of sixes this week. As you know, I am not partial to the briefer forms and to Haiku - although at times, it can be artistic if not poetic. But I have read a number of Haikus lately where the Satori seems to be a humorous remark, and I am not sure how I feel about it. They are clever, and accurately state something relating to the Kigo. But it is almost as if the Haiku form is becoming akin to the limerick; a platform for a joke or riddle more than something the Japanese would approve of.
Of course, I have little credibility to critique the form, but it is just something that is occurring to me. I hope you understand.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Even Matsuo Basho, probably the greatest haiku poet of all time, recorded in his memoirs titled, 'The Narrow Way Within' at the northern turn of his travels, a humorous haiku, Thal. In a mountainous region, about to pass the barrier between two provinces, he was obliged by bad weather to spend three days at the home of a barrier guard. He counted himself lucky to have any accommodation at all in such a remote place, but the comforts were meager.
Most translators of this haiku interpolate some feeling of disgust and humor. Donald Keene, who usually can be trusted to translate dispassionately, renders the verse:
Fleas and lice biting
awake all night
a horse pissing close to my ear.
So you see, even the Master of haiku himself used humor in haiku, and there is absolutely nothing wrong with it, IF it pertains to nature and our natural surroundings.
It's been done for centuries.
~Dean
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Thanks for the explanation, Dean. As I said, me credentials are questionable about the form... maybe I have just read a few too many humorous Satori's lately.
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No worries, that's what we're here for, to enlighten and inspire, if possible.
Thanks again,
~Dean
Comment from Sasha
This is excellent. The first two sentences connect perfectly and I love the 'bat becomes hoarse' play on words followed by 'a frog in its throat', the perfect satori. Love the sounds effects and artistic presentation too. Great work with this one.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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This is excellent. The first two sentences connect perfectly and I love the 'bat becomes hoarse' play on words followed by 'a frog in its throat', the perfect satori. Love the sounds effects and artistic presentation too. Great work with this one.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thanks.
