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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (in the dead of night)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from LIJ Red
Once again, a Haiku with a sense of humor. Bats are virtually extinct here, due to the extermination of insects and end of farming, but of course we had the little gray kind...
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Once again, a Haiku with a sense of humor. Bats are virtually extinct here, due to the extermination of insects and end of farming, but of course we had the little gray kind...
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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yeah, no vampires in Georgia, right, Red?
Thanks for the review.
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Fun to throw rocks at, and watch 'em circle the rock, studying it.
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Then shoot 'em with buckshot from a twelve gauge shotgun...
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Dean - this is an excellent haiku and a worthy entry to the book. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly and your satori is very good and very clever with its double meaning. Well done - warm regards Dorothy x How lucky to find that picture - but then you always do..................
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Hi Dean - this is an excellent haiku and a worthy entry to the book. Lines one and two interconnect perfectly and your satori is very good and very clever with its double meaning. Well done - warm regards Dorothy x How lucky to find that picture - but then you always do..................
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku for the Haiku Club Challenge on mammals, Dorothy.
I am very grateful for the encouraging comments and the positive feedback.
More than anything else, I'm just really pleased to know that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Douglas Paul
This one is really different from most of the responses to the challenge. It could also be one of your "horror Haiku" LOL. Clear imagery in your first two lines with a good aha moment in the satori. Well done, my friend
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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This one is really different from most of the responses to the challenge. It could also be one of your "horror Haiku" LOL. Clear imagery in your first two lines with a good aha moment in the satori. Well done, my friend
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
Hey, bro'.
Thanks for reading and reviewing my haiku for ourHaiku Club Challenge on mammals.
I am very grateful for the encouraging comments and the positive feedback.
Take care...
Comment from Doc Holiday
Wow! So much in so little. Just like a perfect haiku should be.
Love the humor also in this one. Really nailed it well, just like the old vile vampire bat!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Wow! So much in so little. Just like a perfect haiku should be.
Love the humor also in this one. Really nailed it well, just like the old vile vampire bat!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku for the Haiku Club Challenge on mammals, Doc Holiday.
I am very grateful for the encouraging comments and the positive feedback.
Thank you too for the stellar rating, I'm glad to you you felt it worthy.
More than anything else, I'm just really pleased to know that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Bobbi22
A frog in the throat would give anyone reason to be hoarse, but in the case of the bat - hope he doesn't choke. I like the double meaning here. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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A frog in the throat would give anyone reason to be hoarse, but in the case of the bat - hope he doesn't choke. I like the double meaning here. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Yeah, I believe it would too, RightPics.
Hey, thanks a bunch for reading.
Take care...
Comment from cumulus365
Hi Dean, This one haiku I understand. I like your image of the dead of the night in line 1 as I have been there more and more now a days. It is sooos quiet. So the dead beats the meaning of quiet. Your creativity is splendid with the bat's throat got bulged out from trying to get that slimy frog down so it can't squeak anymore maybe it got choked on line 2. I learn new linking ideas from you each time. Interesting take on the bat/frog. I guess frog better learn to camouflage better to survive from these vile vampire. Oh yes, your nice alliteration v is wicked. Regards, cumulus
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hi Dean, This one haiku I understand. I like your image of the dead of the night in line 1 as I have been there more and more now a days. It is sooos quiet. So the dead beats the meaning of quiet. Your creativity is splendid with the bat's throat got bulged out from trying to get that slimy frog down so it can't squeak anymore maybe it got choked on line 2. I learn new linking ideas from you each time. Interesting take on the bat/frog. I guess frog better learn to camouflage better to survive from these vile vampire. Oh yes, your nice alliteration v is wicked. Regards, cumulus
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hey, thanks a bunch for reading, cumulus.
Take care...
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Good night snacking for the bat.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Dean, A great Haiku poor froggy, But I can see the Satori needed a sacrifice LOL
These bats are not particularly nice are they. A fun read Cheers Christineð???ð??¸
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hi Dean, A great Haiku poor froggy, But I can see the Satori needed a sacrifice LOL
These bats are not particularly nice are they. A fun read Cheers Christineð???ð??¸
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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No, they most certainly are not nice, Christine. But then, the animals I choose to write my haiku about rarely are, LOL.
~Dean
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Yes Dean and thats why your Haiku's are interesting and often fun LOL
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:)
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Dean,
this one had me chuckling.
Your first two lines run together and the satori is to die for....Hehehe.
Just perfect but it doesn't go down to well while eating a bacon sarny!!!
Great read.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hi Dean,
this one had me chuckling.
Your first two lines run together and the satori is to die for....Hehehe.
Just perfect but it doesn't go down to well while eating a bacon sarny!!!
Great read.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Oh, I would imagine it wouldn't, Brenda.
But thanks so much for reading just the same.
~Dean :)
Comment from William Ross
A frog in his throat lol, maybe that old vampire is catching a cold or just talks to much. thanks for the share and have a good day
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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A frog in his throat lol, maybe that old vampire is catching a cold or just talks to much. thanks for the share and have a good day
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Or both, William...
Thanks for reading.
Have a nice weekend.
~Dean
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Dean,
I got a good chuckle off of your satori line... a frog in his throat lol
This is clearly a well thought out piece. I especially enjoyed your author's notes and your sense of humor.
Nice job!
Kim
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hi Dean,
I got a good chuckle off of your satori line... a frog in his throat lol
This is clearly a well thought out piece. I especially enjoyed your author's notes and your sense of humor.
Nice job!
Kim
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thanks...:)
