Perennials of War
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Comment from judiverse
I really love this. No sooner does Shana try to leave Anderson's apartment than the men who've been pursuing her are there again. How great are those dogs! If you include dogs, you need to find a reason for doing that, and you certainly do. The men are in custody, but I'm expecting them not to be held very long. Things could have turned quite dangerous for her. Maybe Shana will decide it's wiser to stay put, as she obviously is going to be traced everywhere she goes. Great work. judi
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I really love this. No sooner does Shana try to leave Anderson's apartment than the men who've been pursuing her are there again. How great are those dogs! If you include dogs, you need to find a reason for doing that, and you certainly do. The men are in custody, but I'm expecting them not to be held very long. Things could have turned quite dangerous for her. Maybe Shana will decide it's wiser to stay put, as she obviously is going to be traced everywhere she goes. Great work. judi
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from Sasha
I am sure Shana knows she should not have left the apartment, but I do wonder if she feels she is being held against her will. She was never forced to stay there, and being able to get into the elevator and leave proves she could leave whenever she wanted. I am curious as to what her answer will be to the detective's question. Nice work with this chapter.
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I am sure Shana knows she should not have left the apartment, but I do wonder if she feels she is being held against her will. She was never forced to stay there, and being able to get into the elevator and leave proves she could leave whenever she wanted. I am curious as to what her answer will be to the detective's question. Nice work with this chapter.
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Thank you for the kind support.
Comment from royowen
Shana is being accosted by two mysterious men after leaving Anderson's apartment, but is momentarily saved by the dogs, a man turns up threatening to shoot the dogs, if Shana doesn't call them off. She is rescued by Anderson and Philip, the police turn up to arrest the men and question Shana and Anderson, they ask Shana if she's being held against her will. Excellent action episode Barbara, great writing. Blessings, Roy
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Shana is being accosted by two mysterious men after leaving Anderson's apartment, but is momentarily saved by the dogs, a man turns up threatening to shoot the dogs, if Shana doesn't call them off. She is rescued by Anderson and Philip, the police turn up to arrest the men and question Shana and Anderson, they ask Shana if she's being held against her will. Excellent action episode Barbara, great writing. Blessings, Roy
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Thank you for the kind support.
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Welcome Barbara
Comment from c_lucas
There is more excitement in this post, but it could use a little more action. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
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There is more excitement in this post, but it could use a little more action. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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I don't see how I could fit in any more excitement and stay realistic. Thank you for the generous support.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
As always Barbara you have excelled yourself here, each time I read your work I am reminded how much work I need to do to become a prose writer! I love your phrasing and find your work so engaging and absorbing. This is a fantastic new chapter and I enjoyed it so very much, thankyou for posting it, I love your blend of genres when you write, this is exceptional work, kindest regards, Meia x
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As always Barbara you have excelled yourself here, each time I read your work I am reminded how much work I need to do to become a prose writer! I love your phrasing and find your work so engaging and absorbing. This is a fantastic new chapter and I enjoyed it so very much, thankyou for posting it, I love your blend of genres when you write, this is exceptional work, kindest regards, Meia x
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from mbroyles2
A wonderful continuation of this story.
I truly enjoy the suspense you build and there are great characters.
Terrific pace and descriptions.
Very well told.
Michael
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A wonderful continuation of this story.
I truly enjoy the suspense you build and there are great characters.
Terrific pace and descriptions.
Very well told.
Michael
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
