Homegrown Flowers
Tanka 5/7/5/7/749 total reviews
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi friend, those who grow their own flowers know the unending joy that comes from t. I do . This why I can enjoy this write. It is short. It is beautiful and well expressed.
Danny Jock
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Hi friend, those who grow their own flowers know the unending joy that comes from t. I do . This why I can enjoy this write. It is short. It is beautiful and well expressed.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi,
This is a very well written tanka. There is so much joy in watching your own flowers come into fruition for a tiny seed.
Nice artwork.
Well done, Mary
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Hi,
This is a very well written tanka. There is so much joy in watching your own flowers come into fruition for a tiny seed.
Nice artwork.
Well done, Mary
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from sue133
What a gorgeous image you have painted with your poem. I could picture this beautiful garden and, being a a passioante gardener myself, I could relate so well. Your messages are wonderful. Thank you and best of luck for the contest. Susan
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What a gorgeous image you have painted with your poem. I could picture this beautiful garden and, being a a passioante gardener myself, I could relate so well. Your messages are wonderful. Thank you and best of luck for the contest. Susan
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from lyenochka
What better gifts than "love, hope and peace?" That is a great way to present what we can all grow and give to each other. I like the lavish generous ending to call all to "pick of our beauty." Thanks for creating and offering beauty.
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What better gifts than "love, hope and peace?" That is a great way to present what we can all grow and give to each other. I like the lavish generous ending to call all to "pick of our beauty." Thanks for creating and offering beauty.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is a very beautiful Tanka. Love how your souls picking flowers to give me the sense they are also picking love, peace and harmony.
There is vivid imagery and serenity in this poem.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is a very beautiful Tanka. Love how your souls picking flowers to give me the sense they are also picking love, peace and harmony.
There is vivid imagery and serenity in this poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from Thal1959
Very nice, Luna... glad to read a sweet and happy poem from you. But there is one problem. The Tanka requires 5-7-5-7-7, and your fourth line, "souls seeking harmony ~" is six syllables. But this can be easily fixed - perhaps you could add "sweet" to the beginning, "sweet souls seeking harmony ~" This would not only correct the syllable count, but would add an alliteration to the line.
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Very nice, Luna... glad to read a sweet and happy poem from you. But there is one problem. The Tanka requires 5-7-5-7-7, and your fourth line, "souls seeking harmony ~" is six syllables. But this can be easily fixed - perhaps you could add "sweet" to the beginning, "sweet souls seeking harmony ~" This would not only correct the syllable count, but would add an alliteration to the line.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from Irish Rain
This is just lovely Miss Jeni. What stands out the most, is the picture...a simple drawing, then the phrase...'homegrown'...it all ties together. Looks like a bouquet of love, blessings...
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This is just lovely Miss Jeni. What stands out the most, is the picture...a simple drawing, then the phrase...'homegrown'...it all ties together. Looks like a bouquet of love, blessings...
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from Jax the Moonchild
I like the whole concept of the poem although i feel it would add more of an effect if it had rhymed but it was still a very pretty poem!
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I like the whole concept of the poem although i feel it would add more of an effect if it had rhymed but it was still a very pretty poem!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am missing the flowers just now with winter upon us. Your poem brought some floral colour into my life, enjoyable read, love Dolly x
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I am missing the flowers just now with winter upon us. Your poem brought some floral colour into my life, enjoyable read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from LIJ Red
I always pop off I wouldn't know a tanka from a freighta, but I've reviewed so many of the little buggers I'm beginning to guess how they should look. This one's fine.
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I always pop off I wouldn't know a tanka from a freighta, but I've reviewed so many of the little buggers I'm beginning to guess how they should look. This one's fine.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
