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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "haiku (tropical dream)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from royowen
A very good haiku, the super artwork with what appears to be a butterfly with transparent wings, with the soft murmuring of nature, with the twist of winged butterfly, well done Gypsy, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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A very good haiku, the super artwork with what appears to be a butterfly with transparent wings, with the soft murmuring of nature, with the twist of winged butterfly, well done Gypsy, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the the review and and kind words.
Gypsy
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Welcome Gypsy
Comment from Marykelly
The tropical sounds suggested in this poem are similar to some of the distant sounds of a deep sleep dream so the sound to me has several levels. These suggestions of sound are more soul than body so this imagery works for me.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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The tropical sounds suggested in this poem are similar to some of the distant sounds of a deep sleep dream so the sound to me has several levels. These suggestions of sound are more soul than body so this imagery works for me.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you you for the review review and kind words sweetie pie
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
I remember my first trip to Hawaii where I saw a "tropical dream" of plants, animals, and insects not found on the mainland. I recall my wonder at seeing my first pineapple plant. I remember wondering about the butterflies. You are very accurate in your poem describing butterflies as the window to the soul. In some cultures, upon death of the body, the soul is released in the form of a butterfly.
I also enjoyed your use of the word "susurrus" because of its sound.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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I remember my first trip to Hawaii where I saw a "tropical dream" of plants, animals, and insects not found on the mainland. I recall my wonder at seeing my first pineapple plant. I remember wondering about the butterflies. You are very accurate in your poem describing butterflies as the window to the soul. In some cultures, upon death of the body, the soul is released in the form of a butterfly.
I also enjoyed your use of the word "susurrus" because of its sound.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from winnona
A very well-written haiku club challenge entry. The artwork is very nice and I especially like the way the butterflies wings are transparent. Very well done.
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A very well-written haiku club challenge entry. The artwork is very nice and I especially like the way the butterflies wings are transparent. Very well done.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Douglas Paul
Your picture is stunning. I like this as a haiga, but I don't think it will stand as a haiku without the picture. I don't think the imagery is clear and concise enough
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Your picture is stunning. I like this as a haiga, but I don't think it will stand as a haiku without the picture. I don't think the imagery is clear and concise enough
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Douglas.
Gypsy
Comment from Irish Rain
I have a butterfly book, which I study sometimes for my art...I've seen this one, the Blushing Phantom...just beautiful. Love the window-wings...makes a lovely haiku! Blessings...
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I have a butterfly book, which I study sometimes for my art...I've seen this one, the Blushing Phantom...just beautiful. Love the window-wings...makes a lovely haiku! Blessings...
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from robyn corum
Gypsy,
I've never seen a butterfly like that. It's remarkable and amazing! I'd love to see one in person! Wow!
I really like your satori. Thanks!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Gypsy,
I've never seen a butterfly like that. It's remarkable and amazing! I'd love to see one in person! Wow!
I really like your satori. Thanks!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for for the review and kind words sweetie.
Gypsy
Comment from BOO ghost
A blushing phantom? Are you kidding me -- is its wings transparent? Did not know what that word meant, so thanks for letting us know. A very interesting butterfly. I never seen one transparent. Nice choice of exotic words. Summer. OK. BOO gives you five butterflies. BOO!
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A blushing phantom? Are you kidding me -- is its wings transparent? Did not know what that word meant, so thanks for letting us know. A very interesting butterfly. I never seen one transparent. Nice choice of exotic words. Summer. OK. BOO gives you five butterflies. BOO!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review and and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
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BOO is a good ghost on Sunday's. I needed to review, anyways. I am a rusty ghost. Yaw sleep tight.
Comment from judiverse
That is an amazing butterfly with the transparent wings. I am not a butterfly fancier, so I'd need something else to be a window to the soul, I'm afraid. I guess I should try to be more attuned to nature. Beautifully worded, and I loved the word susurrus. judi
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That is an amazing butterfly with the transparent wings. I am not a butterfly fancier, so I'd need something else to be a window to the soul, I'm afraid. I guess I should try to be more attuned to nature. Beautifully worded, and I loved the word susurrus. judi
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie.
Gypsy
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Sasha
I love everything about this poem. Your first two lines connect perfectly and your last line 'window to the soul', is a superb link to the transparency of the awesome butterfly. Marvelous work with this one.
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I love everything about this poem. Your first two lines connect perfectly and your last line 'window to the soul', is a superb link to the transparency of the awesome butterfly. Marvelous work with this one.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
