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Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author

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A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets

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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Like your haiku Debbie, gave me a smile. The garden hose slithering behind the child. A great satori line for this form. Nice one,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from winnona
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A well-written challenge poem. The words flowed well and gave the reader the essence of the snake in the garden near the children. I think you completed the challenge well.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from JW
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Can you believe it? I can't sleep even though I'm lying on my bed because Scotty is sleeping with his head on the pillow and he's loudly snoring.

Thanks for sharing this poem, Debbie. JW

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Katie Jo does the same thing, LOL. Aren't thet great companions? Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Debbie,
You did a great job with your snake haiku from the art to the words. Good job with the syllable counts per line.

I hate snakes. They need to stay way far away from me out in the fields & I will leave them alone if they do the same for me.

Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from DR DIP
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haha Its true an uncontrolled garden hose under water pressure takes on the persona of a winding snake I have seen this many times and to an unsuspecting child it is hard to control lol

well written

dip

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from patcelaw
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Debbie, nicely done haiku for the multi author, may you keep writing the haiku as you are quite good at them. Blessings for a good week. Patricia

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Teri7
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I will be really glad when you don't do snakes or lizards anymore! lol This is very good what you have penned. Very good descriptive wording and imagery. Reminded me of when I was young and I found a snake easing up a tree I was climbing. Made me think of that! Blessings, Teri

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 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    It's a bit creepy, isn't it. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Not sure I get the gist of this one.
It is a true haiku but is the garden hose what is moving and she thinks it is a snake?

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 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    The garden hose is moving because the child is pulling it. Thank you, my friend~debbie
reply by Barb Hensongispsaca on 07-Feb-2017
    Oh I got it