Comment from Sherman541

Excellent

I remember the garter snakes in my Grandmother's yard in the summer eww - it was not a hose but a real snake - You did a good job on this one and the picture is a good choice. Sarah

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017

Thank you so very much, my friend~Debbie

Comment from royowen

Excellent

You always take something interesting like this prompt for this haiku and turn it into something much more interesting, well done Debbie, blessings, Roy,

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017

Thank you so very much, my friend. Have a blessed day~Debbie

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Debbie, you frightened me with that picture. I do not like snakes
and to think of a snake behind a child was about too much. I'm
glad you had that third line ... garden hose. Well done.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017

Snacks don't bother me--bees and wasps are terrifying though. I stepped on a bumble bee when I was four and can't get over it yet. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Debbie,

I'm glad that you went short, long, short even though you didn't do 5-7-5 on your syllable count. So many of the haiku I'm seeing lately seems erratic in style to me. It has almost lost all convention, on some levels. I love the garden hose satori line, it made me smile. I'm not a fan of snakes. Good thing we don't have any here! lol

Kim

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017

Snakes don't bother me, but I am terrified of bees and wasps. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I saw a news report the other day that a four year old went to use the toilet and a rattle snake was there. I doubt I would ever use that toilet again. Lol. I did enjoy reading your post.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017

I'm really not afraid of snacks but there aren't any poisonous ones in my area either. Yes, rattlesnakes in a toilet would be scary. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

This is a fun one, Debbie. It scared me at first. *smile* I think that's what it was supposed to do, you meanie! *smile* This worked perfectly. Good luck in the book!

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017

Snacks don't bother me--bees and wasps terrify me though. Ha-ha. Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is well written my friend using this beautiful form you have done well I enjoyed you used a wonderful art choice regards Jill

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017

Thank you, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Yes, that darn snake slithers behind me all summer, ha ha. This is a clever haiku, love the satori, and a great snake picture too!!! Blessings....

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017

Thank you, my friend. My snake gets lots of use as well~Debbie

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Debbie, not so keen on snakes but your last line made me laugh.
Excellent work here, you caught me off guard with that ending twist. Well penned.
Thanks for sharing.
m

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017

Thank you, Maureen. Glad it made you laugh, my friend~Debbie

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written haiku. Luckily the snake that slithers back and foryh behind the child is only the harmless garden hose that can only water the garden.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017

Thank you, my friend~Debbie