Hush
The night the silence screamed.6 total reviews
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry.Your words flowed from the beginning to the end building up the suspense and fear for the story. I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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A well-written contest entry.Your words flowed from the beginning to the end building up the suspense and fear for the story. I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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THANK YOU FOR THE KIND REVIEW.
Comment from sue133
This is very scary and so beautifully written. I particularly like your personification of the forest which makes the description so real and eerie. One is left on the edge of the horror waiting to find out what will happen next. What IS the spinning disc? Good luck for the competition. Susan
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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This is very scary and so beautifully written. I particularly like your personification of the forest which makes the description so real and eerie. One is left on the edge of the horror waiting to find out what will happen next. What IS the spinning disc? Good luck for the competition. Susan
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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ufo...Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Perfectly written in 100 words you scared the bejesus out for me! Very well written, engaging and interesting, well done on a fine write, kindest regards, Meia :)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Perfectly written in 100 words you scared the bejesus out for me! Very well written, engaging and interesting, well done on a fine write, kindest regards, Meia :)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Nice touch of alliteration in the final part of the opening line.
their branches to shimmy and shake hysterically - shimmy & shake put a smile on my face rather than fear. they give a more whimsical impression than I think you were going for...
Good choice of atmospheric and emotive words and a nice lead in with the final line.
GMG
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Hi there,
Nice touch of alliteration in the final part of the opening line.
their branches to shimmy and shake hysterically - shimmy & shake put a smile on my face rather than fear. they give a more whimsical impression than I think you were going for...
Good choice of atmospheric and emotive words and a nice lead in with the final line.
GMG
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
This does not sound like a freiendly visit from creatures outside our world. Even the trees are afraid. You do a good job of creating a dark and frightening atomosphere for your story. Now the chilling question left to reader is, "what comes next"? Do we really want to know?
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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This does not sound like a freiendly visit from creatures outside our world. Even the trees are afraid. You do a good job of creating a dark and frightening atomosphere for your story. Now the chilling question left to reader is, "what comes next"? Do we really want to know?
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Very poetic description of a possible UFO encounter. I like the "fear infested forest." Trees that are so beautiful in the day do look really spooky at night. The other phrase I really liked was the "dusk fell in shades of evil." Great mood setting.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Very poetic description of a possible UFO encounter. I like the "fear infested forest." Trees that are so beautiful in the day do look really spooky at night. The other phrase I really liked was the "dusk fell in shades of evil." Great mood setting.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind detailed review.
