Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Chrissy - sorry I spelled your name wrong in my last review LOL. This is a good haiku for the challenge with an appropriate picture - good job you showed it or we may have misconstrued your poem. Excellent satori with unusual and rarely used word venene. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017

Hi Dorothy Thank for reading and reviewing this Haiku A bit of fun from an old Nana Ha Ha, Always tring to find something different Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. The most innocent snakes that can give pleasure to humans that we can enjoy when biting off the snakes head without any consequences.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017

Hi Sandra, Ha Ha yes these snakes are harmless and the grandies love them . A lightheared Haiku this time Thanks for reviewing it Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Chrissy,
I love your haiku for the challenge. Using the sweet snakes is typical of sweet nanas, We love to spoil our grandkids. I relate to this big time.

Well done
Mary

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017

Hi Mary, Yes we do and my grandies go straight for the lolly jar and the snakes come out. ( My Huskie dog also loves lollies and gets the occasional snale also LOL ) A bit of lighthearted fun Cheers Christine😄

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

LOL - anti-venene/contavene

Nope, nana ain't gonna! Sweet treats are her lure
for love and affection :-)

Yay! Summer!!!

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

Hi Leineco. Yes Nana's snakes are harmless and always have a bag in the cupboard for the kids (and my dog who loves lollies and gets a little treat every night LOL) I though a lighthearted haiku may fit the bill so Thanks for reading and reviewing I always appreciate your support Cheers Christine

Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

This is a cute take on the reptile challenge. No worries about getting bit with these little colourful gems.
You have two lines that connect well and form a good concrete image.
Your satori is great.
Take care, Lu

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

Hi Lu, Thought I would try a bit lighthearted take on this one I may do a serious one also but have to have a think on that one.. No harm with these snakes except hyperactivity after all the sugar LOL. A bit of fun Cheers for your comments Christine

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Cheers, Chrissy,

Hahaha .... I like your snakes better than mine. Yum. Good job, sweetie pie, I am very proud of you. This is a great haiku. Simple and to the point. The presentation is awesome and your own picture! Well done!

Cheers,
Gypsy Sensei

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

Hi Gypsy, thanks for your lovely review I feel so much better writing Haiku now even if this was a little tongue in cheek for this category. I may do a serious one I will have to see, but I think you have inspired us all to become creative writers so Well done to you and Big Cheers Christine😃👍

Comment from marybell1

Good

I loved your idea for your haiku. All Nanna's know how the children love those snakes. Unfortunately I did not mark you any higher as you did not keep to the 5-7-5 haiku rule in line one'
Best of luck.
Marybell1.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

Hi Marybell1 Thanks for your review and I deliberately didn't do the 5-7-5 syllables as it is not a true requirement of any Haiku and has only become the fashion for Western Haiku's. The typical Japanese Haiku writers often had less that 15 Syllables
( althought the Japanese Syllables counting is different to the Western count. )

I will include my Haiku rules in the Authors notes and there are many to pick from ( I have just completed a Haiku Class with Gypsy who teaches Haiku and Japanese style poetry writing and we learn't many different ways to write a Haiku.

But I do apreciate ypu review and reasons for the 4 stars and accept them with good grace.

This is not a contest but a challenge for members of the Haiku Club we are compiling an Anthology of Haiku and everyone is welcome to submit . Have a look in the forum for these challenges they are fun

Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Christine,

This is the second poems of yours that I read tonight, and I am enjoying this one as well. There is something so relatable and universal about your poetry. You take a typical situation or object and breathe creativity into the moment.

Technically, the execution of your format was handled superbly.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

Hi Poetic Friend. What a nice compliment relatable and universal I am so pleased ypu enjoy my work loke that I try to be down to earth and create from experiences or how I perceive things. So Thanks you so much for your encouraging words it these things that make it worthwhile to write and share Cheers Christine😃

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was so sweet. I was hesitant about opening because the title included snakes and I do not do snakes but I figured that the title included Nana so it had to be safe. I am so glad I did open and read. It was so simple, yet direct and a great play on words. Your grandkids are truly blessed to have you as their Nana. Great job, be blessed and thanks.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

HI Ayr,, Thanks for taking a risk with my snakes (I don't like snakes either) but thought I could write a Haiku this way so I am pleased to see you and your lovely words cheer me Have a great day Cheers Christine

reply by aryr on 03-Feb-2017

You are so welcome Christine.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A cute poem. I showed imagination and creativity. the words flowed well and combined forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork completed the piece well.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Hi Winnona, Thanks for your review and I had to have a bit of a lighthearted look at this topic so thanks for your encouraging words. Many Cheers and watch out for those snakes they are yummy LOL

Cheers Christine