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Comment from Grasshopper2
Okay. I begin to worry about me because I continue to read what you write and encourage you to write more! Sheesh! I must be confused, I know I am misguided, paranoid, but not innocent since age six. So, there are 50 shades of poetry. Which is this?
Me
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Okay. I begin to worry about me because I continue to read what you write and encourage you to write more! Sheesh! I must be confused, I know I am misguided, paranoid, but not innocent since age six. So, there are 50 shades of poetry. Which is this?
Me
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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lavender? chartreuse? REALLY? Age SIX? wow..
Comment from Treischel
Your very descriptive Haiku describes an all too common occurrance of birds flying smack into a clear, clean window. Well written commentary on an avian issue.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Your very descriptive Haiku describes an all too common occurrance of birds flying smack into a clear, clean window. Well written commentary on an avian issue.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Tom!
Comment from Sis Cat
Oh, oh! Poor birdy. Poor homeowner who has to clean up the mess! This is a vivid haiku which dramatically told a story about a bird colliding into glass.
Thank you for sharing your creativity and passion for haiku.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Oh, oh! Poor birdy. Poor homeowner who has to clean up the mess! This is a vivid haiku which dramatically told a story about a bird colliding into glass.
Thank you for sharing your creativity and passion for haiku.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Andre!
Comment from l.raven
OMG Robyn, what have you be eating ???LOL...worms in a kids stomach...birds smacking into a window...I wonder how long that guy had to wait to get this picture???...OMG...are you ok??? do you have a fever????LOL...well done you...Love ya sweet girl...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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OMG Robyn, what have you be eating ???LOL...worms in a kids stomach...birds smacking into a window...I wonder how long that guy had to wait to get this picture???...OMG...are you ok??? do you have a fever????LOL...well done you...Love ya sweet girl...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Yeah. Sometimes I worry about me... but what about those sweet people who put up with this mess and continue to read it? Poor silly folks!! Ha!
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you have a point...but they are pretty great people...see how much they love you...me too...xxoo love
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I don't know... I think they're confused, misguided, precious, dear, innocent and blind.
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YEP!!! I think you covered them all...LOL...xxoo love
Comment from Louise Michelle
I'm not a big fan of these short, shorts except when they're funny. And this is funny.
You have really illustrated how a few choice words can convey a whole lot. Flat bird is a hoot and made me think of all those cartoons in the past where the characters got smashed, flattened, etc., but not really hurt. Good work, Robyn.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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I'm not a big fan of these short, shorts except when they're funny. And this is funny.
You have really illustrated how a few choice words can convey a whole lot. Flat bird is a hoot and made me think of all those cartoons in the past where the characters got smashed, flattened, etc., but not really hurt. Good work, Robyn.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thank you, LM! And I'm really glad you saw the humor AND the whimsy - without the animal really getting hurt. That's how I see it, too. YAY! Yeah, most all of my haiku lean toward the senryu side of things which is the ironic, wittier (TRYING to be, anyway!) cousin. If I write TRUE haiku, I try to make them a bit funny or else VERY DEEP and WISE. I want there to be something you take away from it. I don't like the throw-away ones, either.
Thank you for giving me one of the best compliments, EVER! Hugs-
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I'm so glad I made you feel good with my compliment. As you know, we don't all react the same way to the same writings. As for me, how I react often is based on how much sleep I've had. (I have a real problem with insomnia.)So, if you post something deep and I don't get it, it could just mean I'm brain dead from lack of sleep, haha. Hugs back.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LOL poor little fellow, bang! Against the glass, that had to hurt.
The picture is weird. It looks like a fantom owl. How did you do that? Good job, honey.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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LOL poor little fellow, bang! Against the glass, that had to hurt.
The picture is weird. It looks like a fantom owl. How did you do that? Good job, honey.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thanks, sweetie!
Comment from Spitfire
Smack! This can happen to people too. That's why I don't wash my windows. LOL. Good simile and use of assonance with glass and flat, like and skies.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Smack! This can happen to people too. That's why I don't wash my windows. LOL. Good simile and use of assonance with glass and flat, like and skies.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Shari! I miss you!
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Aw, thanks. I'm working on the Quiz you started, but can't figure out what I smell like. LOL Clean, I hope
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh, no. Poor little birdie. Flew right into tomorrow. Were it I, that window would have to go, I'd feel so GUILTY!!! Wonderful haiku...blessings...
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Oh, no. Poor little birdie. Flew right into tomorrow. Were it I, that window would have to go, I'd feel so GUILTY!!! Wonderful haiku...blessings...
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Judy! This was a naughty one! *smile*
Comment from judiverse
I wonder if birds really fall for that trick and smash themselves against a window. Mine aren't too clear, so they probably wouldn't mistake them for sky. Inventive topic, and great satori--flat bird. My kitten Smokey has volunteered to watch the windows to keep the birds from mistakenly crashing into them. Fun poem1 judi
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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I wonder if birds really fall for that trick and smash themselves against a window. Mine aren't too clear, so they probably wouldn't mistake them for sky. Inventive topic, and great satori--flat bird. My kitten Smokey has volunteered to watch the windows to keep the birds from mistakenly crashing into them. Fun poem1 judi
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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That's funny! Go look at the review that Dean sent - with the bird taunting the cat! hahaha!
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I don't know how Dean comes up with that clever artwork. judi
Comment from Lu Saluna
LMAO!
This is so damn funny! Quit washing your windows so he can see the silly things.
Last time I encountered a flat bird my dog ate it. There is a short story about that incident.
Great haiku, love it!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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LMAO!
This is so damn funny! Quit washing your windows so he can see the silly things.
Last time I encountered a flat bird my dog ate it. There is a short story about that incident.
Great haiku, love it!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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HAHAHA! Now, my CAT would eat those things - not the DOG~ HAHAHA! Funny stuff! Thnaks!
