Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
hypnotic movement <>stems venom springs rising=
your phrase connects well but the last 3 words are awkard they don't flow... venon spring rising ...
snake charmed= good observation
Well done, Monica, thank you for sharing.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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hypnotic movement <>stems venom springs rising=
your phrase connects well but the last 3 words are awkard they don't flow... venon spring rising ...
snake charmed= good observation
Well done, Monica, thank you for sharing.
Gypsy
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind comments and thoughts.
Comment from Leineco
Now if only we could figure out how to use the
same technique for stemming verbal venom!!
LOL - we'd have a planet wide symphony playing
24/7!!!
:-)
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Now if only we could figure out how to use the
same technique for stemming verbal venom!!
LOL - we'd have a planet wide symphony playing
24/7!!!
:-)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind comments and thoughts.
Comment from Bucketlist
An ancient art no doubt. It's difficult to review these short poems , but fun to write them. It's amazing to me that anyone would want to be around such venomous critters ( goes for the human kind too)
I only have 5 stars left but you earned them
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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An ancient art no doubt. It's difficult to review these short poems , but fun to write them. It's amazing to me that anyone would want to be around such venomous critters ( goes for the human kind too)
I only have 5 stars left but you earned them
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind comments and thoughts.
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Anytime
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
hypnotic movement
stems venom springs rising
snake charmed
Your words paint a picture of their own in this haiku - so cleverly thoughtout.
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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hypnotic movement
stems venom springs rising
snake charmed
Your words paint a picture of their own in this haiku - so cleverly thoughtout.
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind comments and thoughts.
Comment from Luna
Well, everyone I know is writing haiku these days, so I have to jump in, as I am in the club. I really loved yours, your word choices and economy, the subject, the imagery I was able to glean from it, and the presentation.
Really good work, sister.
love,
jeni
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Well, everyone I know is writing haiku these days, so I have to jump in, as I am in the club. I really loved yours, your word choices and economy, the subject, the imagery I was able to glean from it, and the presentation.
Really good work, sister.
love,
jeni
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind comments and thoughts.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Monica, Wow well one learns something every day and what a great Haiku for the challenge worded well and yes Snake Charmed indeed luck he isn't Snake harmed LOL Good piece Cheers Christine
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Hi Monica, Wow well one learns something every day and what a great Haiku for the challenge worded well and yes Snake Charmed indeed luck he isn't Snake harmed LOL Good piece Cheers Christine
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind comments and thoughts.
Comment from lyenochka
Fascinating! I didn't know it was the movement not the music that did that. I didn't quite know how to parse the second line because "springs" could be a verb or a noun. I take it as the noun like coils of the snake rising. I like how the first and last lines show the cause and effect.
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Fascinating! I didn't know it was the movement not the music that did that. I didn't quite know how to parse the second line because "springs" could be a verb or a noun. I take it as the noun like coils of the snake rising. I like how the first and last lines show the cause and effect.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind comments and thoughts.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written haiku you have penned. I did not know that about snakes but I tend to stay away from all snakes. lol Very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work! Blessings, Teri
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This is a very well written haiku you have penned. I did not know that about snakes but I tend to stay away from all snakes. lol Very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind comments and thoughts.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Mystic Angel 7777: I like your photo and poem. The snake is
charmed by the motion. Hopefully, the guy doesn't get bit.
We can watch this action and be glad we aren't so close to that snake.
I like your author's notes. Enjoy. Congrats on #2 and #1 with Dean. It
takes a lot of thought to compose the poetry. flylikeaneagle
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Mystic Angel 7777: I like your photo and poem. The snake is
charmed by the motion. Hopefully, the guy doesn't get bit.
We can watch this action and be glad we aren't so close to that snake.
I like your author's notes. Enjoy. Congrats on #2 and #1 with Dean. It
takes a lot of thought to compose the poetry. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thank you. Snakes are not my thing so I feel blessed to have done and even more so that you think I did a decent job with it.
Comment from Douglas Paul
A good entry for the reptile challenge, my friend. Good connecting first two line with good imagery. Your satori show insight and an aha moment into the meaning of those lines. Well done. Hope you are feeling better
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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A good entry for the reptile challenge, my friend. Good connecting first two line with good imagery. Your satori show insight and an aha moment into the meaning of those lines. Well done. Hope you are feeling better
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, Douglas. Me no like reptiles LOL could you tell? Your kind feedback is greatly appreciated.
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LOL - not my favorite either
