Daughter's Gone, Daughter's Gone
My daughter was involved with marriage at seventeen56 total reviews
Comment from rockinm76233
Great poem filled with sadness, but so glad you posted daughter's back and manages your business. That gives a feeling of happiness. Thanks for sharing Jaybird.
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Great poem filled with sadness, but so glad you posted daughter's back and manages your business. That gives a feeling of happiness. Thanks for sharing Jaybird.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Yes, she left before her time,
changing patterns with life's rhyme;
Left our nest, in love, unschooled
and I judged her sadly fooled.
This poem moved me to tears, you have the power to do that to me, not many writers have. The pathos in this is all encompassing. Its an amazing and superb read, I adored it and am therefore awarding it six stars.Kindest regards, Meia x
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Yes, she left before her time,
changing patterns with life's rhyme;
Left our nest, in love, unschooled
and I judged her sadly fooled.
This poem moved me to tears, you have the power to do that to me, not many writers have. The pathos in this is all encompassing. Its an amazing and superb read, I adored it and am therefore awarding it six stars.Kindest regards, Meia x
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Your comments really lift my i nspiration level-thank you so much
Comment from heyjude
Jay, I'm glad you stated in your author notes that your daughters back. We wonder about some of our children's decisions. Sounds like she returned and has been a good daugbter
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Jay, I'm glad you stated in your author notes that your daughters back. We wonder about some of our children's decisions. Sounds like she returned and has been a good daugbter
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Every thing has worked out fine-thank you for adding to my inspiration
Comment from RodG
This poem expresses the helplessness of any parent whose child impulsively leaves home at an early age. The parent, like the speaker here, blames himself and/or lives with fears hoping she'll be okay. I like the verse "she's in cadence with life's cadence."
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This poem expresses the helplessness of any parent whose child impulsively leaves home at an early age. The parent, like the speaker here, blames himself and/or lives with fears hoping she'll be okay. I like the verse "she's in cadence with life's cadence."
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can identify with this when my daughter left home an hardly visited me, but like you she returned and now I see her as often as I can, lovely rhymes, flow and I love the first and last lines which complete the picture, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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I can identify with this when my daughter left home an hardly visited me, but like you she returned and now I see her as often as I can, lovely rhymes, flow and I love the first and last lines which complete the picture, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thank you for yourinspiring comment
Comment from BeasPeas
Your poem describes those family rifts that separate. We have no choice but to let them go. They will come back when ready. I like the repetition of your key line which unifies the piece. Well rhymed and smooth. Marilyn
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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Your poem describes those family rifts that separate. We have no choice but to let them go. They will come back when ready. I like the repetition of your key line which unifies the piece. Well rhymed and smooth. Marilyn
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Beau-your comments bring me added inspiration
