True Friends
A sonnet to true friendship93 total reviews
Comment from Cedar
This is a great poem about friendship, Jay. A true friend these days is hard to find. The ones we grew up with through the years are like gold. Take care, my friend...Bill
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This is a great poem about friendship, Jay. A true friend these days is hard to find. The ones we grew up with through the years are like gold. Take care, my friend...Bill
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
A variation on the Elizabethan sonnet format that employs a certain amount of cross rhyme -- hall/all in the first quatrain and light/plight/fight in the second.
In praise of friends the volta is formed by generalising friendship that has been developed in particular in the first two quatrains. The final couplet is a reminder of the impossibility of buying friendship. it is a gift.
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A variation on the Elizabethan sonnet format that employs a certain amount of cross rhyme -- hall/all in the first quatrain and light/plight/fight in the second.
In praise of friends the volta is formed by generalising friendship that has been developed in particular in the first two quatrains. The final couplet is a reminder of the impossibility of buying friendship. it is a gift.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
Comment from humpwhistle
The only thing better than having a friend . . . is being a friend.
I suspect that's the way it's supposed to work. We earn friendship by being a friend.
Along your hall of memories, you surely gave as much as you've received. I suspect your friends will bear that out.
Peace, Lee
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The only thing better than having a friend . . . is being a friend.
I suspect that's the way it's supposed to work. We earn friendship by being a friend.
Along your hall of memories, you surely gave as much as you've received. I suspect your friends will bear that out.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your sonnet has an awesome and true message, Jay. I enjoyed reading it. Great job on the style of the sonnet. Your words flow smoothly and the message is loud and clear. You are right about true friends. Thanks for sharing and caring. Jan
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Your sonnet has an awesome and true message, Jay. I enjoyed reading it. Great job on the style of the sonnet. Your words flow smoothly and the message is loud and clear. You are right about true friends. Thanks for sharing and caring. Jan
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
Comment from Susan Larson
Perfect meter for a sonnet and what a wonderful message, especially your final line that true friendship is a given, never bought. I enjoyed reading it severAl times over.
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Perfect meter for a sonnet and what a wonderful message, especially your final line that true friendship is a given, never bought. I enjoyed reading it severAl times over.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
Comment from Neonewman
There are true friendships forged in us all. The ones who will come at the drop of the hat, cry and laugh with you and support your every whim. Thank you for sharing this awesome piece.
God bless
Steve
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There are true friendships forged in us all. The ones who will come at the drop of the hat, cry and laugh with you and support your every whim. Thank you for sharing this awesome piece.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
Comment from Teri7
Jay, This is a very well written poem about true friendship and caring for them. You used very good descriptive words. This is my favorite part of the poem, even though it all was very good:
Care for the friends, along the way you sought-
True friendship is a given, never bought.
Blessings, Teri
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Jay, This is a very well written poem about true friendship and caring for them. You used very good descriptive words. This is my favorite part of the poem, even though it all was very good:
Care for the friends, along the way you sought-
True friendship is a given, never bought.
Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from Sally Law
Love this! This is my first time reading your work. I am new to FanStory and I am amazed at how much I am enjoying the poetry. Very well done. The verse rings sweet and true about friendship.
Kindest regards,
Sally
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Love this! This is my first time reading your work. I am new to FanStory and I am amazed at how much I am enjoying the poetry. Very well done. The verse rings sweet and true about friendship.
Kindest regards,
Sally
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from l.d.lauritzen
Love a number of the thoughts presented and I too like rhyming poetry that says something. Might have suggested a few different words. Ex: True friendship is always given, never bought. Like your work, keep writing.
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Love a number of the thoughts presented and I too like rhyming poetry that says something. Might have suggested a few different words. Ex: True friendship is always given, never bought. Like your work, keep writing.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from frierajac
There is a punctuation problem after strife in the 1st stanza. Also in that line you have the present tense and on the last line of same the past tense. I don't know
if you can tinker with the meter here ? This reminds me of an affirmation that was once given me by a close friend, now gone, which was: meditate upon them and send them white light.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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There is a punctuation problem after strife in the 1st stanza. Also in that line you have the present tense and on the last line of same the past tense. I don't know
if you can tinker with the meter here ? This reminds me of an affirmation that was once given me by a close friend, now gone, which was: meditate upon them and send them white light.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thank you for a very thorough comment-greatly appreciated
