The Way It Is
A rant about world conditions89 total reviews
Comment from Karl Speth
Another awesome rant poem. If we could do anything to fix this rotten world, we could beautify it with poetry! Keep the rants rolling! Yes sirree. 150 chars rule stinks blah blah blah
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Another awesome rant poem. If we could do anything to fix this rotten world, we could beautify it with poetry! Keep the rants rolling! Yes sirree. 150 chars rule stinks blah blah blah
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
Comment from mrsmajor
This poem surely hit the spot, I can identify with just about everything you said, and it's very sad, that we have reason to question even those professionals that claim to be our helpers.
It's a world for money makers...I enjoyed these rhymed quatrain verses, thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.
Warmly,
Victoria
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This poem surely hit the spot, I can identify with just about everything you said, and it's very sad, that we have reason to question even those professionals that claim to be our helpers.
It's a world for money makers...I enjoyed these rhymed quatrain verses, thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
Comment from Ross E Silke
I like the morals and ideas in this poem; I agree on many aspects. It flows nicely and is well-written. You've touched on many of the hot topics concerning 'money' in our world economy that pulls at our moral value system. I really enjoyed reading this and reflecting on your ideas. Very well done.
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I like the morals and ideas in this poem; I agree on many aspects. It flows nicely and is well-written. You've touched on many of the hot topics concerning 'money' in our world economy that pulls at our moral value system. I really enjoyed reading this and reflecting on your ideas. Very well done.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Way It Is', is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. With craft and well-honed skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. It was a pleasure to both read and review this work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"The Way It Is', is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. With craft and well-honed skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. It was a pleasure to both read and review this work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
Comment from visionary1234
Well, it seems you've just summarized our last few years of News programs, Jaybird. I totally get where you're coming from. I like poetry that rhymes, too - but the rhyming of 'nurse' and 'purse' in your first stanza was just a bit forced. 'Nurse', as a word choice, doesn't seem to fit well with the preacher in his pulpit. (Maybe it would be more fun to play with the word 'worse' - a preacher would surely find something there!) In the third stanza, a little grammatical fine tuning would be good - i.e. you don't take heed 'of' usually - you pay heed 'to'. An easy substitution but would, I think, improve that flow.
Best wishes
Sharyn
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Well, it seems you've just summarized our last few years of News programs, Jaybird. I totally get where you're coming from. I like poetry that rhymes, too - but the rhyming of 'nurse' and 'purse' in your first stanza was just a bit forced. 'Nurse', as a word choice, doesn't seem to fit well with the preacher in his pulpit. (Maybe it would be more fun to play with the word 'worse' - a preacher would surely find something there!) In the third stanza, a little grammatical fine tuning would be good - i.e. you don't take heed 'of' usually - you pay heed 'to'. An easy substitution but would, I think, improve that flow.
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment Written 16-Nov-2019
Comment from Gloria ....
I always enjoy a good social commentary poem, and yours hits the nail right on the head about the cause of such falsity--greed.
As is your signature a verse of fine rhyme and cadence that advances the thought forward with good speed.
Many thanks for sharing, Jay. Always a treat to hear from you.
Gloria
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I always enjoy a good social commentary poem, and yours hits the nail right on the head about the cause of such falsity--greed.
As is your signature a verse of fine rhyme and cadence that advances the thought forward with good speed.
Many thanks for sharing, Jay. Always a treat to hear from you.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Jaybird1
I wish that I could give you a six rating
Oh yes you definitely know how to speak up to the ones who are thinking of how money theycan get.
Smiles to the rhyming words in your poem
EX.
Our doctors, bound by ancient oath
are our choice of live or die;
But they keep cutting wider slabs
of our dwindling money pie.
Gert
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Hello Jaybird1
I wish that I could give you a six rating
Oh yes you definitely know how to speak up to the ones who are thinking of how money theycan get.
Smiles to the rhyming words in your poem
EX.
Our doctors, bound by ancient oath
are our choice of live or die;
But they keep cutting wider slabs
of our dwindling money pie.
Gert
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You've really hit the truth with this poem, Jaybird, unless there is money at the end of it, they aren't interested. What happened to decency? Your poem is skillfully written, and I was nodding my head after reading every line! Well done! :)) Sandra xx
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You've really hit the truth with this poem, Jaybird, unless there is money at the end of it, they aren't interested. What happened to decency? Your poem is skillfully written, and I was nodding my head after reading every line! Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I love the many messages conveyed in this thought provoking work. It seems as you've so eloquently stated that everyone is out to extract something from us. It's usually our money. What do we get in return? Mostly just promises unkept. I really like this Jaybird and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
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I love the many messages conveyed in this thought provoking work. It seems as you've so eloquently stated that everyone is out to extract something from us. It's usually our money. What do we get in return? Mostly just promises unkept. I really like this Jaybird and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your holding to account all of the "capitalists" around us. It is difficult to not be cynical about the greed in our world. I admired your rhymed quatrains and succinct title. Sighs- Joan
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I admired your holding to account all of the "capitalists" around us. It is difficult to not be cynical about the greed in our world. I admired your rhymed quatrains and succinct title. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 15-Nov-2019
