What pours from her
A woman of no importance can spoil all and create turmoil...44 total reviews
Comment from mbroyles2
A true expression of loathing. The additional spacing between the stanzas is a unique approach and allows for greater reflection.
"The summer pudding of your womb, still spills red juices, month by month"
Very vivid.
Michael
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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A true expression of loathing. The additional spacing between the stanzas is a unique approach and allows for greater reflection.
"The summer pudding of your womb, still spills red juices, month by month"
Very vivid.
Michael
Comment Written 27-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for your very kind review kindest regards meia :)
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Meia,
I love the sentiments of the poem because it can be the same for any of us. We do encounter some wicked women who have no empathy or sympathy. So it is not easy to like them. I agree with your notes about the decisions the past queen made were cruel. I am not sure about the spacing of the text.
well done, Mary
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Hi Meia,
I love the sentiments of the poem because it can be the same for any of us. We do encounter some wicked women who have no empathy or sympathy. So it is not easy to like them. I agree with your notes about the decisions the past queen made were cruel. I am not sure about the spacing of the text.
well done, Mary
Comment Written 27-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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I am so glad you liked it mary many thanks and much appreciated :) kind regards Meia
Comment from Thesis
WOW, Pretty powerful. I sense the loathing and disgust with the subject and the effect of the deeds that have brought the writer to identify the vile feelings harbored. The disgust that there may be another subject akin to the original is revealing.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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WOW, Pretty powerful. I sense the loathing and disgust with the subject and the effect of the deeds that have brought the writer to identify the vile feelings harbored. The disgust that there may be another subject akin to the original is revealing.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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I am so glad you liked it , many thanks and much appreciated :) kind regards Meia
Comment from Wabigoon
Hi Meia--
I think you should have let out all the vinegar and historical vitriol and just plain old The Enquirer news about Elizabeth's makeup into this. To hell with what anyone thinks of you! No one would assume it was you and yet you miss the opportunity to use such poetically rich material because...what?
I like this, I "like" this. It is hard to like but speaks to a very deep "hate" women, maybe, have for existence, themselves. Thanks.
Wabigoon
Jeff
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Hi Meia--
I think you should have let out all the vinegar and historical vitriol and just plain old The Enquirer news about Elizabeth's makeup into this. To hell with what anyone thinks of you! No one would assume it was you and yet you miss the opportunity to use such poetically rich material because...what?
I like this, I "like" this. It is hard to like but speaks to a very deep "hate" women, maybe, have for existence, themselves. Thanks.
Wabigoon
Jeff
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Dar Jeff, thanks for the great review as always. To be honest, EVERYONE assumed it was me talking, as the protagonist, I may admire Sylvia Plath but I don't wish to emulate her. I just want to be me, doing what I do. I have written some very angry poems, gritty and bitter, but that is just part of who I am as a writer, part of the many parts that make a whole. Hope you understand, thanks as always! kind regards Meia
Comment from gene roush
I like to check out the writers that critique my stuff. I appreciate your praise more now. There are angry voices and then there are frightening angry voices. Thanks for sharing yours. Gene
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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I like to check out the writers that critique my stuff. I appreciate your praise more now. There are angry voices and then there are frightening angry voices. Thanks for sharing yours. Gene
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Why thankyou so much Gene, I really appreciate your wonderful review, and also for the six stars, I always enjoy your work. kind regards Meia
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Meai - what a strange and powerful poem you have written. Your author notes make your writing much clearer - as you had me wondering who this writing was aimed at LOL. Very unusual layout - you had me scrolling down eagerly to see what was coming next. Don't worry, I don't think you are being vicious, but it is certainly a trenchant, well written piece. A change from reading trivia. Well done my friend. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Hi Meai - what a strange and powerful poem you have written. Your author notes make your writing much clearer - as you had me wondering who this writing was aimed at LOL. Very unusual layout - you had me scrolling down eagerly to see what was coming next. Don't worry, I don't think you are being vicious, but it is certainly a trenchant, well written piece. A change from reading trivia. Well done my friend. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your detailed and intelligent review very much appreciated kindest regards, Meia x
Comment from closetpoetjester
Dripping with vitriol and vinegar and a superb write from go to whoah. The stretched out spacing gave the reader time to take it all in bit by bit and it was delivered slow and skillfully, just like a knife twisting in a wound. The resentment was evident and the pain intended to make the receiver feel a burden of guilt for what the speaker/victim had been through.
Very well done. I WAS however glad to read in your notes you don't actually feel like this.
Great playacting with the nib. You completely absorb yourself into a character. My last sixer for the week is YOURS.
Well done Meia
Cheers P
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Dripping with vitriol and vinegar and a superb write from go to whoah. The stretched out spacing gave the reader time to take it all in bit by bit and it was delivered slow and skillfully, just like a knife twisting in a wound. The resentment was evident and the pain intended to make the receiver feel a burden of guilt for what the speaker/victim had been through.
Very well done. I WAS however glad to read in your notes you don't actually feel like this.
Great playacting with the nib. You completely absorb yourself into a character. My last sixer for the week is YOURS.
Well done Meia
Cheers P
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your detailed and intelligent review very much appreciated kindest regards, Meia x
Comment from RGstar
I must admit to being a little grossed out at reading,especially on reading the title and a couple of lines thinking or hoping it wasn't going to be what I thought would not dare be, as well connected to parts of the female anatomy.
Then as I read on, I thought it personal, for most things are, even though some remotely connected, many, very much, are. So wondering who did what to orchestrate such...then I read on, even further, and thought to myself, my word, this is well written, strong and worded.
...and read on through the author's notes and realized the explanation, both of its reason, as well, the slight connection to your own feelings ( for it is often always).
...then thought on..
And read again.
I commend you dear lady, for not only is this also what poetry is about...strong individual perception and delivery for its theme, whatever the subject matter...be it sugar coated, religious, love or interpretation of a vile act... or person. The poet owes to themselves and to their audience to project their thesis or theme in the most original manner to the idea or persona of that piece...and so have you shown your worth.
Not only is it original, even if gory, with the intensity of thought surrounding the characters which aimed, it is also necessary and extremely well written, for if this was written of a rose with words sweet, we would be deeming it a masterpiece, ready to win prizes.
I have just read again, to be sure of vision not clouded, and reinserted what I already now. You are an extremely good writer indeed. I like the way you have kept your author's notes sparse but very informative.
Usually, I wouldn't like to see writer's dissect themselves from a work in author's notes, for one needs not as it is all about interpretation, but I think, in this case, as you have done is feasible, as so strong it is and some who may read through my link it more with character than should instead of doing what should be done and seeing it as a piece within itself and the projection of art for its own sake, though in some part always connected to us.
I stand with you, on this one. I remember writing a piece in my portfolio, ''The Antichrist'' in an interpretation request by an author a choice of a few of his paintings, in which I chose the one depicted, and used a very heavy music score from my fellow composer Kerri, and called it ''The Antichrist,'' based on Rosemary's Baby also in his artwork.
I changed the tone of my voice to incorporate the theme...Yes it was kind of dark, but I thought it well done in being strong for the theme as this is, and though it did not win, it was chosen as one of the contestants for poem of the month, and that gladdened me for it was hard work as well, recognised...art for art's sake as this is. I wonder how many would independently read without knowing me and connect it to some dark side, rather than a work to itself and the intensity of delivering its theme?
Each piece you have written, you have tried and been successful in owning it. That is what true poets can do...whatever the subject matter.
Bravo for having the gall or nerve...as well, skill in executing this strong piece of work.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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I must admit to being a little grossed out at reading,especially on reading the title and a couple of lines thinking or hoping it wasn't going to be what I thought would not dare be, as well connected to parts of the female anatomy.
Then as I read on, I thought it personal, for most things are, even though some remotely connected, many, very much, are. So wondering who did what to orchestrate such...then I read on, even further, and thought to myself, my word, this is well written, strong and worded.
...and read on through the author's notes and realized the explanation, both of its reason, as well, the slight connection to your own feelings ( for it is often always).
...then thought on..
And read again.
I commend you dear lady, for not only is this also what poetry is about...strong individual perception and delivery for its theme, whatever the subject matter...be it sugar coated, religious, love or interpretation of a vile act... or person. The poet owes to themselves and to their audience to project their thesis or theme in the most original manner to the idea or persona of that piece...and so have you shown your worth.
Not only is it original, even if gory, with the intensity of thought surrounding the characters which aimed, it is also necessary and extremely well written, for if this was written of a rose with words sweet, we would be deeming it a masterpiece, ready to win prizes.
I have just read again, to be sure of vision not clouded, and reinserted what I already now. You are an extremely good writer indeed. I like the way you have kept your author's notes sparse but very informative.
Usually, I wouldn't like to see writer's dissect themselves from a work in author's notes, for one needs not as it is all about interpretation, but I think, in this case, as you have done is feasible, as so strong it is and some who may read through my link it more with character than should instead of doing what should be done and seeing it as a piece within itself and the projection of art for its own sake, though in some part always connected to us.
I stand with you, on this one. I remember writing a piece in my portfolio, ''The Antichrist'' in an interpretation request by an author a choice of a few of his paintings, in which I chose the one depicted, and used a very heavy music score from my fellow composer Kerri, and called it ''The Antichrist,'' based on Rosemary's Baby also in his artwork.
I changed the tone of my voice to incorporate the theme...Yes it was kind of dark, but I thought it well done in being strong for the theme as this is, and though it did not win, it was chosen as one of the contestants for poem of the month, and that gladdened me for it was hard work as well, recognised...art for art's sake as this is. I wonder how many would independently read without knowing me and connect it to some dark side, rather than a work to itself and the intensity of delivering its theme?
Each piece you have written, you have tried and been successful in owning it. That is what true poets can do...whatever the subject matter.
Bravo for having the gall or nerve...as well, skill in executing this strong piece of work.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your detailed and intelligent review very much appreciated....when I comes to nerve I find it is easier to be dramatic!thanks again your review was so interesting! kindest regards, Meia x
Comment from GWinterwin
Wow this sounds like some real bad people that cause you much heartache. Too bad you have met so many people of this caliber. Thanks for the notes, I'm happy it's just your character.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Wow this sounds like some real bad people that cause you much heartache. Too bad you have met so many people of this caliber. Thanks for the notes, I'm happy it's just your character.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your detailed and intelligent review very much appreciated kindest regards, Meia x
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is an interesting poem as well as layout. Your words flow well. I believe the space between the lines allows readers to 'take in' what is written before the next lines. It is all cohesive & scary that woman acted as you have written. Good job on the research. I do not see you as hating anyone etc. You are writing about events mostly from history in a factual way. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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This is an interesting poem as well as layout. Your words flow well. I believe the space between the lines allows readers to 'take in' what is written before the next lines. It is all cohesive & scary that woman acted as you have written. Good job on the research. I do not see you as hating anyone etc. You are writing about events mostly from history in a factual way. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank-you so much for your detailed and intelligent review very much appreciated kindest regards, Meia x
