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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Haiku ( Salamander )"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
22 total reviews
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Gypsy, until this subject in the haiku club challenge, I really never knew of paid attention to these little creatures. I like this because it tells us what is, first line and what it is doing, second line and your satori explains what it is doing. This is an excellent haiku my friend,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Gypsy, until this subject in the haiku club challenge, I really never knew of paid attention to these little creatures. I like this because it tells us what is, first line and what it is doing, second line and your satori explains what it is doing. This is an excellent haiku my friend,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
Thank you very much, my friend, I am grateful for your kindness and valuable feedback. Buddha blessings.
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from l.raven
OMG Gypsy, I didn't know they got that big...that is crazy...looks like the movie Snake Fish...very well written sweet girl...and I love your picture...Love ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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OMG Gypsy, I didn't know they got that big...that is crazy...looks like the movie Snake Fish...very well written sweet girl...and I love your picture...Love ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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I know! The are creepier than frogs, huh? LoL
Thank you very much, my friend, I am grateful for your kindness and valuable feedback. Buddha blessings.
Gypsy Sensei
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HI Gypsy, you so make me smile you...and you are always so welcome...love love love ya.../Linda xxoo
Comment from Lu Saluna
Now that is one big salamander! I had a pet salamander when I was a kid, it was a little red one. I mean little, about 3" long. Very cute.
I like your haiku, it is very good. They zip in and out of the water. They love to sun themselves and they also love the water. On the bike path, your satori is perfect!
Very clever and creative. My salamander looked just like this one only much, much smaller, lol.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Now that is one big salamander! I had a pet salamander when I was a kid, it was a little red one. I mean little, about 3" long. Very cute.
I like your haiku, it is very good. They zip in and out of the water. They love to sun themselves and they also love the water. On the bike path, your satori is perfect!
Very clever and creative. My salamander looked just like this one only much, much smaller, lol.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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That is so so cool, Lura. You have a very interesting life. Who has a pet salamander? Lu, that is who! hahaha
Thank you sweetie pie, your reviews always make me happy. I am grateful for your kindness and valuable feedback.
Buddha blessings.
Gypsy Sensei
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I don't have it anymore. It was when I was a kid. It ran away on me. That's when I realized they weren't meant to be kept as pets so I never got another one again. I just have never forgotten the little red guy. He was so cute.
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awwww I wish I could see it. He sounds very cute.
Comment from ciliverde
Nice job on this one Gypsy - that little salamander on the bike path. I've been known to coax them off the trail, and once even ushered a tarantula out of the road in Big Sur. Your Satori line is perfect too. I have to say, I think the little salamanders are cuter than the giant ones!
Well done,
Carol
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Nice job on this one Gypsy - that little salamander on the bike path. I've been known to coax them off the trail, and once even ushered a tarantula out of the road in Big Sur. Your Satori line is perfect too. I have to say, I think the little salamanders are cuter than the giant ones!
Well done,
Carol
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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LoL I can imagine you doing that, Carol. Thank you, my friend.
I am grateful for your kindness and valuable feedback. Buddha blessings.
Gypsy Sensei
Comment from Leineco
LOL - I KNEW someone was gonna use
"fish out of water" - and yet, somehow I was sure
it was gonna end up being a misguided senryu!
Instead - I get a perfect pairing!
I love the way your salamander is out of his element (water)
AND out of his element (on a bike path)! Nice "two birds with
one stone play ;-)
Bravo!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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LOL - I KNEW someone was gonna use
"fish out of water" - and yet, somehow I was sure
it was gonna end up being a misguided senryu!
Instead - I get a perfect pairing!
I love the way your salamander is out of his element (water)
AND out of his element (on a bike path)! Nice "two birds with
one stone play ;-)
Bravo!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. You are very kind and generous. I really appreciate your helpful feedback and excellent review. :)
Gypsy
Comment from Douglas Paul
I love your picture. I think you have strong and clear imagery in the first two connecting lines that would stand alone without the picture. You satori strikes at the basic sesence of an amphibian and has a good aha moment - wekk done, my friend
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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I love your picture. I think you have strong and clear imagery in the first two connecting lines that would stand alone without the picture. You satori strikes at the basic sesence of an amphibian and has a good aha moment - wekk done, my friend
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. You are very kind and generous. I really appreciate your helpful feedback and excellent review. :)
Gypsy
Comment from Sasha
Excellent work with this one. Perfect syllable count and lovely artistic presentation. I must be honest, when I think of salamanders always get the shivers. I find them ugly and scary and watching the video didn't change my mind. Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Excellent work with this one. Perfect syllable count and lovely artistic presentation. I must be honest, when I think of salamanders always get the shivers. I find them ugly and scary and watching the video didn't change my mind. Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Sasha :)
Comment from robyn corum
That's a funny image - the salamander walking along the bike trail. But it speaks a bit too much to me of evolution, actually. I don't like it too much. Sorry.
--frowny face-- Just a personal thing. Nothing wrong with the haiku! Thanks!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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That's a funny image - the salamander walking along the bike trail. But it speaks a bit too much to me of evolution, actually. I don't like it too much. Sorry.
--frowny face-- Just a personal thing. Nothing wrong with the haiku! Thanks!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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okay dokay :) thank you for reading
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love those little things - salamanders. We even have them in Nebraska though we don't see them often. Great imagery and contrast satori (bike trail vs water).
teresa
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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I love those little things - salamanders. We even have them in Nebraska though we don't see them often. Great imagery and contrast satori (bike trail vs water).
teresa
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. I am grateful for your excellent review and helpful feedback. You are very kind. :)
Comment from Grasshopper2
Haikuist-Sensei has done the salamander an excellent service. They are good grilled or the little newts like sushi. The slime and grime add character to...Oh. You don't want to eat the big guy. You say he is endangered? Oh. Very nice challenge haiku. Forget the culinary view. It never happened. Grasshopper requests help: How do you, Haikuist-Sensei, yeah - that is you, get your links to work? Grasshopper hop all around trying different ways, but none work. Grasshopper asks if the next Haiku class is 301?
What a fun subject.
Grasshopper (ing-a-long)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Haikuist-Sensei has done the salamander an excellent service. They are good grilled or the little newts like sushi. The slime and grime add character to...Oh. You don't want to eat the big guy. You say he is endangered? Oh. Very nice challenge haiku. Forget the culinary view. It never happened. Grasshopper requests help: How do you, Haikuist-Sensei, yeah - that is you, get your links to work? Grasshopper hop all around trying different ways, but none work. Grasshopper asks if the next Haiku class is 301?
What a fun subject.
Grasshopper (ing-a-long)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Yuk! LOL I will never come to your BBQs LOL
Thank you very much, my friend. I am grateful for your excellent review and helpful feedback. You are very kind. :)
Gypsy
for a link do this
Haiku 301 mmm... that is a thought but my next class is back to HAIKU101 and then HAIKU201. After that I will do a HAIKU 301 just for you. :) I want to continue to expand my horizons as a haiku instructor and I have many ideas for future classes. I would really appreciate your feedback on what would be good. I respect your opinion. I was thinking a haiga class ... what do you think?
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I'm in. Just say when. My review is Dean fault. He is wearing off on me. It's all his fault! LOL
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Thank you. I am working to fix it. I noticed your Profile Thoughts pix is gone. Speak with you tomorrow.
