Comment from GWinterwin

Excellent

Good poem to take a look at the real things of life. The gold fish, the submerged maple leaves, the algae, and sparkling things in the water below. Things that many times are not seen as one looks into a pool of this kind.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017

Yes, GWinterwin, I spent minutes in the cold, the night, and the rain taking a close look at that goldfish pond. I observed real things. Other writers write from imagination or pictures. I have to have the real thing because it makes better poetry. Thank you for your review.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Wonderful work. I have a comment though because I was raised in the south... mosquitoes and autumn don't go together. Summer lakes, bird baths, frog ponds, rain puddles.... mosquitos. You may have to change that second satori, or add a geographical note. Okay, I just read the author note... Idk.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Yes, sunnilicious, the church groundskeeper told me that the goldfish in the pond live off of algae and mosquito larva. It is too cold and early now for mosquitoes. I thought of those thin goldfish nibbling on algae for the entire fall and winter months. I wrote my three haiku about the conditions I found in the pond last week. Leaves are preserved on the bottom from autumn while goldfish dream of summer mosquitoes. Thank you for your review.

Comment from azwildrosa

Excellent

I love how it three in one and each can stand alone. I must admit it was a bit hard for me to read the bright blue and yellow on top. I had to read it a bit faster then I'd have liked but otherwise it was a good read. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Thank you, azwildrosa, for your review of my three-in-one haiku. I changed the font to white and increased the size. Thanks.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I have so enjoyed reading Haiku about these little and or big fish. Us reviewers are the ones who benefit from this. I totally enjoyed reading your Haiku. Thank you

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Thank you, Barbara. I am glad you "totally enjoyed reading" my Haiku.

Comment from Zinnia48

Excellent

Good evening, Sis Cat--I enjoyed the idea of a suite of haiku. I particularly enjoyed the imagery of the second and third. the imagery of the first haiku was splendid until the third line. Autumn would not be pickled by maple leaves: "pickle" brings to mind "sour", where as "maple" inspires "sweet". Possibly I'm overthinking this, but I think the imagery would be more consistent if the third one read something like: sugared autumn (also "sweet", "honey"....)
Thanks for letting me weigh in. Caroline

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Thank you, Caroline, for your review and suggestions. Since the leaf was submerged in water for months, "sugared" would not come to mind. If on the other hand, I find on my frosty lawn now an autumn leaf covered with crystals, I might think of the idea of sugared autumn. Thanks for weighing in with your compliments and suggestion.

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

So lovely an integrated Haiku, Andre. Pickled autumn might be my favorite line, but that in no means takes away from the other expressive words and coupling of them to spur the imagination of the reader. To reference the goldfish glint and glitter as sunken treasures is brilliant.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Oh, thank you, Mary, for your generous review. I went through over sixty-eight draft lines before I settled upon the final nine. I am glad my "expressive words" spurred your imagination.

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

I just love these!!! Especially 'sunken treasure' and MOST especially...'pickled autumn'...THAT is just delightful!!! I don't think I've gotten such a kick out of haiku before! Thank you, blessings...

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Yes, Irish Rain, I felt delight when I looked in the gold fish pond this January and found preserved on the bottom leaves from autumn. I am glad you got such a kick out of haiku. Thank you for your delightful review.

reply by Irish Rain on 22-Jan-2017

I loved this!!

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

The phrasing of "pickled autumn" and "sunken treasure" were highly effective in not only giving a bit of a twist--but in evoking a smile response, as if you've let the reader in on a private joke. Fun to read and easy to visualize.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Thank you, mvbrooks, for your review. I a,m glad you found my haiku to be "Fun to read and easy to visualize."

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A magical write full of sparkling surprise hues of nature at it's best, well chosen words for your well crafted Haiku trio, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Thank you, Dolly, for your glittering review of my sparkling haiku.

Comment from jusylee72

Excellent

All three of these are wonderful. I enjoyed them very much. The third one is my favorite one. Sunken treasures. All three were well thought out and enjoyable.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017

Thank you, jusylee72, for your review. I am glad you found these "treasures" enjoyable.