Act of Endurance
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the unveiling of the throne and the one looking from the outside in seems to see more than what the ruler of the throne wants the onlooker to see.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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A very well-written poem about the unveiling of the throne and the one looking from the outside in seems to see more than what the ruler of the throne wants the onlooker to see.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Glad certain aspects in this write were found appealing to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and warming views.
Comment from ameen786
Hello friend, I am sorry that after a few reads, I am still unable to comprehend the theme; I can tell from the picture that it has to do with faith, but beyond that, I am lost; I'd appreciate if you kindly help me with a bride summary, thank you and good luck!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Hello friend, I am sorry that after a few reads, I am still unable to comprehend the theme; I can tell from the picture that it has to do with faith, but beyond that, I am lost; I'd appreciate if you kindly help me with a bride summary, thank you and good luck!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Indeed it's a thought of faith, traveling people to the arrival of God's throne on Earth, illustrated anguish of this events as final judgements are settled for us. Sorry I lacked the talent to convey this thought clearer, thanking you for you generous rate despite those flaws.
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Not at all my friend, we are all learning; I thank you for sharing your poetry and wish you all the best.
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello TPAC,
I have to admit I was a little, maybe a lot challenge reading your poem. But, that's OK. I will give you what I got out of your message. Your title interested me. When I think of the throne, I think of the Lord of Lords and the King of Kings. The imagery by Seshadri shows many things, maybe the seven deadly sins; Lust, Gluttony, Greed, Sloth, Wrath, Envy, and Pride. I think, I got from your poem that there's chaos in the world and we must endure to the end. Thanks. Happy future writing:-)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Hello TPAC,
I have to admit I was a little, maybe a lot challenge reading your poem. But, that's OK. I will give you what I got out of your message. Your title interested me. When I think of the throne, I think of the Lord of Lords and the King of Kings. The imagery by Seshadri shows many things, maybe the seven deadly sins; Lust, Gluttony, Greed, Sloth, Wrath, Envy, and Pride. I think, I got from your poem that there's chaos in the world and we must endure to the end. Thanks. Happy future writing:-)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Interesting viewpoint of this read, trying to convey people trials to journey to face the Lord knowing their shortcomings. I will consider your thoughts thanking you for generous rate despite shortcomings.
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You are welcome.
Comment from LisaMay
This became an act of endurance for me to read, concentrating on what you were trying to convey. Then it actually worked better when i scampered over it quickly and the scenes became like flickering images that were quite graphic. It has a surreal dream-like quality because the language is so disjointed.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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This became an act of endurance for me to read, concentrating on what you were trying to convey. Then it actually worked better when i scampered over it quickly and the scenes became like flickering images that were quite graphic. It has a surreal dream-like quality because the language is so disjointed.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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Yeah, that's my issue proper conveyance. Glad certain aspects could be found appealing to your interests, appreciating the generous rate and honesty.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
not a big fan of religious poetry but this one is okay. Nice use of images, word choices and rhythmical devices. everything flows nicely on the page and it conveys the emotional intensity of the poet
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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not a big fan of religious poetry but this one is okay. Nice use of images, word choices and rhythmical devices. everything flows nicely on the page and it conveys the emotional intensity of the poet
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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Glad my views were conveyed to you, being not religious although believing in God, appreciating your clear views about this read. Thanking you also for your generous rate.
Comment from Tina Crute
I can understand some of this, but it is like a puzzle to solve. I actually like the parts I get, because they show skill in manipulating language. It is an interesting way to write, very unique. I would probably add some verbs and punctuation. That might help it be understandable to me. I know you have something important to say, as I can read between the lines.
Tina
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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I can understand some of this, but it is like a puzzle to solve. I actually like the parts I get, because they show skill in manipulating language. It is an interesting way to write, very unique. I would probably add some verbs and punctuation. That might help it be understandable to me. I know you have something important to say, as I can read between the lines.
Tina
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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My great problem writing, hoping to better my conveyances more clearer, thanking you despite those flaws for your generous rate.
Comment from estory
I think its an interesting, imaginative and daring kind of format, this disjointed language that creates this surreal sense of experience. I think it is a bit too disjointed and hard to follow. there is an oblique sense of emotions and movements and shapes and feelings, but it needs to have something more of a focus, if even a little, for the reader to follow. Some parts worked for me, others didn't. estory
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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I think its an interesting, imaginative and daring kind of format, this disjointed language that creates this surreal sense of experience. I think it is a bit too disjointed and hard to follow. there is an oblique sense of emotions and movements and shapes and feelings, but it needs to have something more of a focus, if even a little, for the reader to follow. Some parts worked for me, others didn't. estory
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
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Good shout. This fact conveyed by other reviewers, appreciating your advice to better this read. Glad certain aspects were appealing to your interests. Thanking you despite flaws for your generous rate.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I've read this over and over and for the life of me I can't understand any of it. I feel bad because you surely must have labored over it. It sounds short of elegant, if I could just figure it out. I still give you a five star because just because I can't follow it doesn't mean that it's not good. Keep right on writing!
Patty
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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I've read this over and over and for the life of me I can't understand any of it. I feel bad because you surely must have labored over it. It sounds short of elegant, if I could just figure it out. I still give you a five star because just because I can't follow it doesn't mean that it's not good. Keep right on writing!
Patty
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Your comments reflex others stated views, considering these thoughts presented to bring everyone on page with the detailed aspects written. Thanking you for your generous rate despite flaws.
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You're more than welcome!
Patty
Comment from equestrik
I think that I get some of what you are trying to do here but, perhaps it is due to my age but, in general, I really don't get it in a cohesive way. It often feels like just words strung together.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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I think that I get some of what you are trying to do here but, perhaps it is due to my age but, in general, I really don't get it in a cohesive way. It often feels like just words strung together.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Your view isn't strange, making adjustments to hopefully better clarity in its read, currently missing reader grasp. Thanking you for the great shout and generous rate.
Comment from elchupakabra
There are some challenges with the piece, it has a very 'beatnick' feel to it but then it is almost too structured and the subject matter doesn't quite fit. I still liked it. Good work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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There are some challenges with the piece, it has a very 'beatnick' feel to it but then it is almost too structured and the subject matter doesn't quite fit. I still liked it. Good work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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I'm doing current revisions to enhance this write clarity, revealed through comments as your, thanking you for those helpful thoughts and generous rate despite flaws.
