Bits and Pieces
...of a life.6 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I liked the way you've crafted this trinet poem, and the competition winner, well done, congratulations, a very cutely written in an excellently executed post, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I liked the way you've crafted this trinet poem, and the competition winner, well done, congratulations, a very cutely written in an excellently executed post, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your positive feedback!
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Most welcome
Comment from kiwisteveh
Another contest win - you're on a roll!
This is a lovely piece of reminiscing as you recall not only the retro items from Grandma's house, but also the things you liked to do there. There is a touch of sadness in the final line, suggesting that perhaps Grandma has passed away and her belongings are being sold off...
I may have misinterpreted that, since I notice that you (the voice of the poem) re now a grandparent yourself.
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Another contest win - you're on a roll!
This is a lovely piece of reminiscing as you recall not only the retro items from Grandma's house, but also the things you liked to do there. There is a touch of sadness in the final line, suggesting that perhaps Grandma has passed away and her belongings are being sold off...
I may have misinterpreted that, since I notice that you (the voice of the poem) re now a grandparent yourself.
Steve
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thank you again for your insightful review. Both mom and grandma have passed away. Did keep some mementos, but couldnt keep them all. But, we always have our memories.
Comment from Poetic Friend
June, this poem is just precious, triggering nostalgic memories for you and your readers. I like everything about this poem -- from the smoothly flowing free verse format, the line breaks, the imagery, and the most importantly, the touching sentiments.
Unfortunately, I did not see my grandmother as often because she lived in another state. During the summers, we will visit her. Just as your poem describes, we looked forward to her treasures -- they were a representation of her and my mother's past (so to speak).
I like that you mentioned the garage sale. It was a garage sale that inspired me to write my poem, titled "The Garage Sale." The poem is in my portfolio if you wish to read it.
I went to a garage sale, and asked the seller why was she selling such beautiful and antique items so inexpensively, and she told me that the items reminded of her mother, and the memories were too painful. She was selling the pain away. Subsequently, I thought that people attending garage sales see the bargains, but usually have no idea that sometimes there are back stories behind the garage sales.
Thank you so much for this poem, June. It will resonate with me.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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June, this poem is just precious, triggering nostalgic memories for you and your readers. I like everything about this poem -- from the smoothly flowing free verse format, the line breaks, the imagery, and the most importantly, the touching sentiments.
Unfortunately, I did not see my grandmother as often because she lived in another state. During the summers, we will visit her. Just as your poem describes, we looked forward to her treasures -- they were a representation of her and my mother's past (so to speak).
I like that you mentioned the garage sale. It was a garage sale that inspired me to write my poem, titled "The Garage Sale." The poem is in my portfolio if you wish to read it.
I went to a garage sale, and asked the seller why was she selling such beautiful and antique items so inexpensively, and she told me that the items reminded of her mother, and the memories were too painful. She was selling the pain away. Subsequently, I thought that people attending garage sales see the bargains, but usually have no idea that sometimes there are back stories behind the garage sales.
Thank you so much for this poem, June. It will resonate with me.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your insights and kind comments. We are the sum total of our experiences in life, the good and the bad. And items can bring up either sweet or sad memories. Hopefully the good outweighs the bad! thank you again for reading.
Comment from winnona
I thought I already reviewed this poem but I guess I did not. Your words flowed well line to line combining ad forming the message of the poem for the reader. Congratulations for the contest win. Very well done!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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I thought I already reviewed this poem but I guess I did not. Your words flowed well line to line combining ad forming the message of the poem for the reader. Congratulations for the contest win. Very well done!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thank you!
Comment from suep
Well written trinet. Nice flow. I enjoyed reading about these bits and pieces (Perfect title). I especially liked 'Retro fifties/Penny candy/Bottled coke. It brought me on a trip down memory lane. Your last stanza ... so true! Great work. Best wishes in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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Well written trinet. Nice flow. I enjoyed reading about these bits and pieces (Perfect title). I especially liked 'Retro fifties/Penny candy/Bottled coke. It brought me on a trip down memory lane. Your last stanza ... so true! Great work. Best wishes in the contest! :)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good Trinet poem you have penned for the Prompt. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture. Best wishes. Teri
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2017
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This is a very good Trinet poem you have penned for the Prompt. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture. Best wishes. Teri
Comment Written 19-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2017
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Thank you!
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you are so welcome!
