2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "haiku ( Clear Water )"A collection of Japanese poetry
19 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Gypsy, will do my friend...and yes he is...he has a heart of gold...and would help anyone...thank you for sharing this...and I love your poem sweet girl...God Bless...Love ya Linda xoox
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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HI Gypsy, will do my friend...and yes he is...he has a heart of gold...and would help anyone...thank you for sharing this...and I love your poem sweet girl...God Bless...Love ya Linda xoox
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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thank you very much, my friend. I am grateful for your kindness and excellent review. Luv ya :)
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your so welcome Queen of Haiku...xxoo Love
Comment from krys123
Greetings, Gypsy;
-I like your well-written haiku and the well-known statement for your satori which is usually meant to say "go with the flow". This is Tori benefits the Palm with an aha moment and subsequently summarizes the relativity of the contextual theme and fulfills the necessary requirements of the concept which brings together the fulfillment of this haiku.
-What's phenomenal about this haiku if you show the purity in the first two lines from the word you used "clear water" and disclose fluidly as you do mention as it flows downstream and being pure makes it flow even more readily. These two lines also dramatically and grammatically connected and serve as an imagery reference to the totality of your haiku.
-Thank you for sharing this, Gypsy, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
PS: I love the pictures and I particularly love the authors notes and the fifth dimension singing Aquarius. I was in that play during high school is one of the hippies with long hair.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Greetings, Gypsy;
-I like your well-written haiku and the well-known statement for your satori which is usually meant to say "go with the flow". This is Tori benefits the Palm with an aha moment and subsequently summarizes the relativity of the contextual theme and fulfills the necessary requirements of the concept which brings together the fulfillment of this haiku.
-What's phenomenal about this haiku if you show the purity in the first two lines from the word you used "clear water" and disclose fluidly as you do mention as it flows downstream and being pure makes it flow even more readily. These two lines also dramatically and grammatically connected and serve as an imagery reference to the totality of your haiku.
-Thank you for sharing this, Gypsy, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
PS: I love the pictures and I particularly love the authors notes and the fifth dimension singing Aquarius. I was in that play during high school is one of the hippies with long hair.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Alex :)
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You're very welcome, Gypsy, and take care and may the spirit of love follow you everywhere.
Alex
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for dedicating your haiku to Michael and saluting him in your notes, plus wishing him a wonderful birthday. Your satori is an appropriate exhortation for all of us. Hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Thank you for dedicating your haiku to Michael and saluting him in your notes, plus wishing him a wonderful birthday. Your satori is an appropriate exhortation for all of us. Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the warm review. There is no need to thank me but I appreciate the gesture. I love Michael, he is a good friend of mine and I love the way he writes.
You are very kind, Joan, thank you.
Comment from Lu Saluna
What a lovely birthday gift for Michael, a beautiful haiku.
It is relaxing and dreamy. There is something very mesmerizing about a gentle stream of water flowing seamlessly down a brook, with a slight bubbling of water to take away all of your cares and woes. Magnificent satori "go with the flow"
Beautifully written and presented. The image you selected is beautiful.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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What a lovely birthday gift for Michael, a beautiful haiku.
It is relaxing and dreamy. There is something very mesmerizing about a gentle stream of water flowing seamlessly down a brook, with a slight bubbling of water to take away all of your cares and woes. Magnificent satori "go with the flow"
Beautifully written and presented. The image you selected is beautiful.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Hello, Lura,
You don't know how happy it makes me reading your reviews. They are always positive and encouraging. They make me happy. :)
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What's not to be positive about? Reading your haiku makes me happy :-))
Comment from Mark Valentine
The picture, the poem, and the song all work together to create a very San Francisco-esque, summer-of-love type vibe. I'm guessing that is intentional given Mikey's birthplace. What a great tribute. I feel more peaceful just for having read this.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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The picture, the poem, and the song all work together to create a very San Francisco-esque, summer-of-love type vibe. I'm guessing that is intentional given Mikey's birthplace. What a great tribute. I feel more peaceful just for having read this.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Yes, you got it. Michael and I are a pair of old hippies. LoL, well, not so old. Thank you, Mark, you are very kind and I am grateful.
Comment from Dean Kuch
What a lovely haiku, Gypsy, and what a beautifully written ode to FanStory's own Potlatch pontiff, Sir Michael Cahill.
I hope he appreciates your efforts creating it...IF he even takes the time to read it.
~Dean
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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What a lovely haiku, Gypsy, and what a beautifully written ode to FanStory's own Potlatch pontiff, Sir Michael Cahill.
I hope he appreciates your efforts creating it...IF he even takes the time to read it.
~Dean
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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LOL I know what you mean, it's the first time he reviewed me in ten years and only because it is his birthday card. LOL nah, he is my friend and whether he reviews me or not I love him. Non-of us are perfect, right? AND he gave me a six stars review so that counts for something. Hahaha
Thank you, darlin,
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You're welcome.
Doug and I are in TeamSpeak, and Lu was there.
She said she'll be back soon.
Comment from DR DIP
Nice words Gypsy I am not looking at the photo like you said to do and I am imagining a running stream in to a flowing river. I am imagining just drifting down the river with the flow and current just "going with the flow" well thats my interpretation at least
dip
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Nice words Gypsy I am not looking at the photo like you said to do and I am imagining a running stream in to a flowing river. I am imagining just drifting down the river with the flow and current just "going with the flow" well thats my interpretation at least
dip
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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LoL good job, dr dip, yes, you got it right. :)
Gypsy
Comment from michaelcahill
Really a lovely haiku and VERY Eastern in flavour. That's rather difficult for our Western brains, yes?
That music is soooooo before my time. Was it a hit back then? HAAAAAHAHAHAHA! Actually, I was born at midnight, so I'm a heartbeat from Aquarian.
How very sweet of you to remember my little birthday. The big four OH is a milestone for sure ... as I recall. Fortunately my mind is going and I have no idea which one this is. YES!
Thanks so very much, Irish Hugs, mike :))
You know it means something to get a review out of me. LOL
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Really a lovely haiku and VERY Eastern in flavour. That's rather difficult for our Western brains, yes?
That music is soooooo before my time. Was it a hit back then? HAAAAAHAHAHAHA! Actually, I was born at midnight, so I'm a heartbeat from Aquarian.
How very sweet of you to remember my little birthday. The big four OH is a milestone for sure ... as I recall. Fortunately my mind is going and I have no idea which one this is. YES!
Thanks so very much, Irish Hugs, mike :))
You know it means something to get a review out of me. LOL
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2017
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Hahaha .... that is so true, it means a great deal to get a review from the big guy.
I am happy that you like it. I was not sure if you were an Aquarius but I know you are a hippie like me so this song popped into my mind.
Happy 40, love, "live long and prosper" or "dif-tor heh smusma" ~ Mr. Spock"
Gypsy Hugs
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi GBR,
your syllable count for this haiku is less than ten so I think you have chosen your words wisely. The first two lines connect perfectly and the last line the satori has that aha moment. Going with the flow certainly does make life much easier without any bumps along the way. Great picture and presentation.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Hi GBR,
your syllable count for this haiku is less than ten so I think you have chosen your words wisely. The first two lines connect perfectly and the last line the satori has that aha moment. Going with the flow certainly does make life much easier without any bumps along the way. Great picture and presentation.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Thank you, sweetie pie,
Comment from sandy montgomery
This is a great haiku. It made me think of a trip my husband took. We happened across a beautiful little stream with water so clear you could see the bottom of the creek. Each little pebble. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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This is a great haiku. It made me think of a trip my husband took. We happened across a beautiful little stream with water so clear you could see the bottom of the creek. Each little pebble. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Sandy. I am happy my haiku brought you good memories. :)
Gypsy
