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Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a good read mike easy to visualize and I'm glad Nikki came out on top, so to speak. Sorry, haven't joined in this week yet, been unwell, but still thinking of it.
Well done,
cheers,
valda
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This is a good read mike easy to visualize and I'm glad Nikki came out on top, so to speak. Sorry, haven't joined in this week yet, been unwell, but still thinking of it.
Well done,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
Comment from Rasmine
Mikey, hi,
I found one typo: Why just this past weekend he complained that he (he's) tired of playing hide the freight train with you.
I enjoyed this. I wrote one but it's wrong. I'll post it anyway for last weeks. TC
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Mikey, hi,
I found one typo: Why just this past weekend he complained that he (he's) tired of playing hide the freight train with you.
I enjoyed this. I wrote one but it's wrong. I'll post it anyway for last weeks. TC
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Michael, I have never read or reviewed a script, but because it is you I'm doing my first.
What a twisted story and intense plot. Two most angry women fighting over a man! Go figure! The dialogue was bitterly intense and the end is simply the best. Murder and the next murder!! Well done my friend,,,,,,Jim
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Michael, I have never read or reviewed a script, but because it is you I'm doing my first.
What a twisted story and intense plot. Two most angry women fighting over a man! Go figure! The dialogue was bitterly intense and the end is simply the best. Murder and the next murder!! Well done my friend,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 18-Jan-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
" It gives death raining down from above a whole new meaning. " hahaha
AWesome, sweetie pie! I wish it was longer. It's very intriguing and the plot is well written. I didn't understand that Nikkie was the one who strangled him and cut off his weenie. Wow, she was pretty mad, wasn't she? What a nut case.
Luv ya, my friend,
Gypsy
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" It gives death raining down from above a whole new meaning. " hahaha
AWesome, sweetie pie! I wish it was longer. It's very intriguing and the plot is well written. I didn't understand that Nikkie was the one who strangled him and cut off his weenie. Wow, she was pretty mad, wasn't she? What a nut case.
Luv ya, my friend,
Gypsy
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
Comment from Sasha
My goodness, you painted a vivid picture of two very unhappy women with this one...and for good reason. Your resolution was brutal but totally understandable. Great work with this. I loved every vivid, sarcastic, and humorous word.
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My goodness, you painted a vivid picture of two very unhappy women with this one...and for good reason. Your resolution was brutal but totally understandable. Great work with this. I loved every vivid, sarcastic, and humorous word.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh what a wonderful piece with quite a scorned lover's twist. You really put us there on the pier with the discussion of love and murder and set-up. Very well done
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Oh what a wonderful piece with quite a scorned lover's twist. You really put us there on the pier with the discussion of love and murder and set-up. Very well done
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my! I wouldn't want to mess with either of those women. They are not very nice. I have often wondered about men who are unfaithful. If he was unfaithful once, chances are he would be unfaithful again, and again. Good read.
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Oh my! I wouldn't want to mess with either of those women. They are not very nice. I have often wondered about men who are unfaithful. If he was unfaithful once, chances are he would be unfaithful again, and again. Good read.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
Comment from frierajac
This seems all fine from the form point of view. Its sort of a la Steven King. The only thing I thought was a bit out of place
is the last word, "pity". It seems too mannered for the type of character you are trying to portray
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This seems all fine from the form point of view. Its sort of a la Steven King. The only thing I thought was a bit out of place
is the last word, "pity". It seems too mannered for the type of character you are trying to portray
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
Comment from brenda bickers
Oh dear Mikey,
it looks like frank got what he deserved and Felicity is just about to get hers. This is the second one I have read about two women fighting over a man who turns out to have double crossed them both. Yours was a little more brutal but well deserving. lol
A great read and a super twist at the end.
Well done.
Brenda:))x
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Oh dear Mikey,
it looks like frank got what he deserved and Felicity is just about to get hers. This is the second one I have read about two women fighting over a man who turns out to have double crossed them both. Yours was a little more brutal but well deserving. lol
A great read and a super twist at the end.
Well done.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written script, the poor ladies cannot get away from the cheating men it seems. Maybe it is worth to be armed at all times, one never knows when it will be handy.
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A very well-written script, the poor ladies cannot get away from the cheating men it seems. Maybe it is worth to be armed at all times, one never knows when it will be handy.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2017
