Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This tells the scene realistically like a hallucination in view, the birthday party and mystic atmosphere, well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018

Thanks, ALD

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

This is very clever. Pons seems like one of those people that have no grasp on reality, but think they know everything and no one is ever going to correct him, no matter what. Excellent dialog, especially Pon's concept of language. The ending made laugh.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017

Thank you, w.j., for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from Ulla

Exceptional

Hahahahaah, Bill. This is just so funny. You've nailed it. You ought to make a book with the two characters. Pen and Nod are just soo funny. I loved it. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017

Thank you, Ulla, I'll created a few more to foil a book.

reply by Ulla on 15-Jan-2017

That's great, I'm looking forward to that. Ulla:))

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Ned may think tat he sees dead people, but when they look at Ned they see is one dumb S.O.B. a literal waste of air. Tell me, was he dropped on his head as a baby, say, four or five times? Or does he possess that dumbness gene? LOL.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017

Thanks, nomi, for reading this. I guess I've got Ned well into the du-uhh zone.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Very clever script indeed, Bill. The colour coding definitely helps understand the segue between the living and the dead. Terrific use of vernacular nuther pain of existin' is hilarious.

Super job. I got a big laugh out of this. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017

Thank you, Gloria. I'm really happy with this one. Some of the folks whose work I admire most, of whom you're included, have reviewed this with some very encouraging comments.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

LOL! Time to get that guy some coffee. This is really well done as I have had conversations with the one too many kind before and they don't accept anything but what they perceive to be true in their trancelike state. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017

Thank you, MA, for giving this s look. Bill

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

When Pons gets something in his head, it's really rather difficult to make him shake it, isn't it? Of course, there is a lot of room in Pons' head, so there IS that, LOL.
Great Pons & Ned humor, as usual, Bill.
~Dean

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017

Thank you, Dean, for the fun review. I originally ended it with "It's like he was still here." Then changed it to, "I see dead people." I finally just put them both in.

reply by Dean Kuch on 14-Jan-2017

Well, whatever you did it works, LOL.
My pleasure, Bill.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very interesting script you have penned. It was very interesting and full of good descriptive wording. I enjoyed reading and reviewing! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017

Thank you, Teri, for reviewing this. Bill

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

LOL! Sorry I'm out of sixes because this gem deserves one! Lovvvve it! Might be the best of Ned and Pons yet. You need to create a book of their adventures. :)

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017

Thank you, Phyllis, for the terrific review and for book marking the boys.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Another lovely script, now about a birthday party. I enjoyed that you used different colours for the different persons. Nice end, that Ned says he sees dead people.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017

Thanks, Ine, for checking this out. Bill