Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
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18 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, you make my mouth water. Excellent sensory imagery. I am jealous of those flames licking the maple. Yum. Excellent satori line!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Oh, you make my mouth water. Excellent sensory imagery. I am jealous of those flames licking the maple. Yum. Excellent satori line!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Thank you so very much, my friend. Now I need to make pancakes and sausage for breakfast, LOL~Debbie
Comment from royowen
This is such a clever Haiku Debbie, the fire theme is most eloquently scribed and the satori is perfect for the haiku discipline, well done, displaying your versatility, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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This is such a clever Haiku Debbie, the fire theme is most eloquently scribed and the satori is perfect for the haiku discipline, well done, displaying your versatility, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you so very much, my friend. Have a blessed day~Debbie
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You Too Debbie
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This is a very clever haiku using the play on words of the maple log and the hot syrup. Syllable count is spot on and I can see it without the picture.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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This is a very clever haiku using the play on words of the maple log and the hot syrup. Syllable count is spot on and I can see it without the picture.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you, my friend. This really made me want pancakes and sausage, LOL~DEbbie
Comment from JW
This picture reminds me of the electric fireplace I have in the living room.
As a youth, I lived on a farm that had a real fireplace. I miss sitting next to it and occasionally cooking marshmallows in it.
Thanks for sharing this, Debbie. JW
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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This picture reminds me of the electric fireplace I have in the living room.
As a youth, I lived on a farm that had a real fireplace. I miss sitting next to it and occasionally cooking marshmallows in it.
Thanks for sharing this, Debbie. JW
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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I love my gas one. No mess, but looks and feels like a real fire. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Sherman541
Love the fire place - looks warm been really cold here - 28 below temp actual temp burr - I think you did a nice job on this poem . I think if you entered in the contest you might have won. Sarah
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Love the fire place - looks warm been really cold here - 28 below temp actual temp burr - I think you did a nice job on this poem . I think if you entered in the contest you might have won. Sarah
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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It's below zero here, but no where near that cold. I'm so much looking forward to spring. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
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your welcome - it is -6 here currently feels like -15 currently and our low tonight is expected to -23 with a high for tomorrow of 3 degrees :) the fireplace looks very inviting and warm :) - Sarah
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is very well written my friend very creative using I think 11 syllables well done I enjoyed this beautifully presented poem regards Jill
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Yes this is very well written my friend very creative using I think 11 syllables well done I enjoyed this beautifully presented poem regards Jill
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from mbroyles2
Nice imagery and crisp words.
I guess maple logs in a fireplace would make hot syrup.
Very creative and an excellent picture choice.
Michael
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Nice imagery and crisp words.
I guess maple logs in a fireplace would make hot syrup.
Very creative and an excellent picture choice.
Michael
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from winnona
An interesting poem. Your words flowed well and combine easily forming the message of the poem.Your artwork completed the piece well. I think you completed the challenge well.
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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An interesting poem. Your words flowed well and combine easily forming the message of the poem.Your artwork completed the piece well. I think you completed the challenge well.
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
